SoraTheAvatar [2012-12-07 04:20:17 +0000 UTC]

OK. Now I updated chapter now. Read it and tell me what you think of it.

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SoraTheAvatar [2012-11-30 21:35:32 +0000 UTC]

OK. Response for Page 7:
Later, Naruto and Sakura tell Minato and Tsunade about what he is and he shows proof to them too of what he is 'cuz his dad doesn't believe him at first. In the first place, Sakura and Naruto knew that they needed to ask his dad and Tsunade if they knew anything about vampires or heard anything about this guy in a black robe from years ago. This don't happen til like chapter 6 or 7. DOES that answer your question?
I am working on Chapter 5 right now. What message are you talking about at the end?

Oh side note, NOBODY seems to notice that Naruto isn't breathing in chapter 5. rofl

Response for page 1:
Wow... I did not know that I had so many things wrong with this. About him being back at a certain time, I couldnt think of anything else for the reason why sakura would get mad at him......I wanted somewhere in there of where Sakura and Tsunade would get mad with him. His dad couldn't go with cuz he is too busy with his job of being the hokage and him and Tsunade were supervising everyone with the reconstruction of the village. Naruto went on his own cuz he is fully capable since now he has mastered sage mode, nine tail chakra mode, mastered the ninetails ...all that stuff. He is one of the strongest ninja in the village. He was uinconscous for almost 3 hours cuz his body was slowly changing from that bite from that vampire....slowly turning him into one. I guess I could change it to an Hour or less. I don't know. Nobody came through that road during those 3 hours.

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