Senex-de-Umbris In reply to Pandafritters [2013-01-08 09:41:51 +0000 UTC]

D'aaaawww, thank you^^ That's always nice to hear

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Senex-de-Umbris In reply to meikahidenori [2012-12-24 11:23:44 +0000 UTC]

D'aaawww, thankies^^
Merry Christmas to you too, try have some nice days!

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Senex-de-Umbris In reply to CommanderEVE [2012-12-15 18:48:39 +0000 UTC]

Hello dear,

am I right when assuming that your comments here may be a request for a critique? (:
(If it is so, then I'd like you to give me certain chapters you'd especially like to have feedback on.)

As to your comment before: You see, I'd like to think of myself as a person who gives halfway decent critiques x'D (Well, at least I try my best.)

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CommanderEVE In reply to Senex-de-Umbris [2012-12-15 22:35:20 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I did kind of beat around the bush. I guess I was shy and didn't want to come off as pestering you.

I have read some of your critique and I think they are good; this is why I commented on your profile.

The story is about a barn owl called Eve and her life story of how she became a high ranking officer in a evil group called the Tytonic Union of Pure Ones.

These are the chapters I think need the most work:

Chapter 3: [link]
Chapter 4: [link]
Chapter 6: [link]

The other chapters can be seen here: [link]

The main reason I want it to be critiqued is becuase I have been writing the 7th chapter and I am a little bit unsure if the story is heading the right direction, I feel that Eve, the main character is turning into a Mary Sue. I also feel that the plot is getting boring and I I want to make it realistic and fresh.

Thankies.

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Senex-de-Umbris In reply to CommanderEVE [2012-12-15 22:41:49 +0000 UTC]

xD That's cute. Little tip: if people asking me for critiques would be bothering me, I wouldn't write that I like to give such xD If you come in at a non-good time, I'll tell you.

D'aaawww, thanks, it's really nice to hear that.

Ah yes, I see. I will pay special attention to the points you mentioned. Please note that I might need a bit longer though due to me being busy in RL. I'll try to not have you wait too long though^^

No problem^^

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CommanderEVE In reply to Senex-de-Umbris [2012-12-16 00:15:27 +0000 UTC]

I got called cute.

Oh I see. Thank you for telling me.

I thought I would tell you that.

That is fine, I know what it feels like to be super busy. Also, I might add that the story is complex and reading it mid way may seem weird.

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Senex-de-Umbris In reply to Vainamoinenian [2012-11-19 08:18:40 +0000 UTC]

D'aaaawww thank you so much <3 This is really sweet of you

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Vainamoinenian In reply to Senex-de-Umbris [2012-11-19 15:06:39 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome, have fun!

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Senex-de-Umbris In reply to Vainamoinenian [2012-11-28 12:43:52 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, I did!

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Senex-de-Umbris In reply to Storyteller21 [2012-09-22 20:47:42 +0000 UTC]

Why yes, you can ask me for feedback; I'm glad to help.
Unfortunately, I tend to be quite busy and therefore cannot review every single piece of yours; if you would kindly send me the links to two or three works of yours (single chapters please, not whole multiple chapter stories; as much as I'd love to, I cannot find the time for that. Thanks for your understanding.) you'd like to have feedback on the most, that would be superbly helpful!
Have a nice day, and may something amazing happen to you~

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Senex-de-Umbris In reply to ChiisanaHoshi [2012-09-22 20:48:12 +0000 UTC]

No problem, you're welcome

have a ncie day, and may something amazing happen to you~

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Senex-de-Umbris In reply to Graehound [2012-08-03 19:53:27 +0000 UTC]

No problem

Have a nice day, and may something amazing happen to you~

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Graehound In reply to Senex-de-Umbris [2012-08-04 22:34:04 +0000 UTC]

^_^

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Senex-de-Umbris In reply to IMPSHA [2012-07-13 19:08:55 +0000 UTC]

No problem^^

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Senex-de-Umbris In reply to TantzAerine [2012-06-29 22:27:23 +0000 UTC]

Haha, I'm a bit confused about what for, but you're welcome anyways xD

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TantzAerine In reply to Senex-de-Umbris [2012-07-01 21:12:54 +0000 UTC]

For all the cool comments and stuff

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Senex-de-Umbris In reply to TantzAerine [2012-07-13 15:22:49 +0000 UTC]

No problem xD
But thank you very much

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Senex-de-Umbris In reply to Elehanne [2012-06-29 15:53:58 +0000 UTC]

No problem, it's absolutely beautiful <3
and congrats on the well-deserved DD ~

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Elehanne In reply to Senex-de-Umbris [2012-06-30 09:58:55 +0000 UTC]

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Senex-de-Umbris In reply to fotografka [2012-06-05 10:37:57 +0000 UTC]

No problem^^

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Senex-de-Umbris In reply to Generalobiwankenobi7 [2012-05-07 08:47:11 +0000 UTC]

No problem~
Thank you, too

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Generalobiwankenobi7 In reply to Senex-de-Umbris [2012-05-07 11:33:43 +0000 UTC]

You're Welcome!^^

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Senex-de-Umbris In reply to smilewithlove [2012-05-06 18:15:15 +0000 UTC]

No problem~
It's a pleasure to do so.

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Senex-de-Umbris In reply to fotografka [2012-04-30 07:04:38 +0000 UTC]

No problem~
and good luck^^

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fotografka In reply to Senex-de-Umbris [2012-05-18 18:53:28 +0000 UTC]

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Senex-de-Umbris In reply to fotografka [2012-06-05 10:38:03 +0000 UTC]

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Senex-de-Umbris In reply to GhostHause [2012-04-30 17:49:22 +0000 UTC]

No problem~

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Senex-de-Umbris In reply to EverydayBattman [2012-04-30 17:49:12 +0000 UTC]

No problem~

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Senex-de-Umbris In reply to fotografka [2012-04-20 12:33:13 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome~

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