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ToughAqua777
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[2014-09-06 19:54:15 +0000 UTC]
"Screw This"
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Favourites: 12; Deviations: 38; Watchers: 19
Watching: 181; Pageviews: 8975; Comments Made: 3441; Friends: 181
# Interests
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Favorite bands / musical artists: Linkin Park
Favorite books: RPG Dialogue
Favorite writers: Fanfic writers
Favorite games: Too many to count
Favorite gaming platform: Unsure
Tools of the Trade: "Tools of the Trade"? What does that even mean?
Other Interests: RolePlay, computer stuff, writing poetry for no reason, YouTube...there's a lot.
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Comments: 105
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pachi (i put the pokemon xd story there some time ago if you can see it)
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I'm gonna assume you're the guy who keeps going after him and you can't comment on his stuff because he's got you blocked. Don't drag me into whatever you got against him.
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pachi (did you see the pokemon xd story that i made there)
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pachi (i made the pokemon xd story, here- Untitled )
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pachi (can you look at this and tell me which one you think would win that- Untitled )
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Sorry I'm late, but thank you!
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Pretty good. I think you can handle it. Sorry I didn't reply earlier.
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pachi (this is the next part- Untitled )
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Alright, I think it's time I asked a couple questions.
Why is it that the main characters are two talking Zorua? No harm no hate, but wouldn't that be odd for two Zorua to be acting like, and be treated like, humans? Especially since Cipher thrives on the abuse of Pokémon, which turn Pokémon into Shadow Pokémon to begin with? If there's a reason behind all this, I would like that specified.
Another thing is the Snag Machine. Unless it was, for some reason, custom-made for a Pokémon to wear, there's no way it could work for a Pokémon, let alone Zorua whom don't even have arms. I would also like this to be expanded upon.
Also, remember what I said about spacing the lines? I think you're overdoing it a bit. You only really need to hit the enter button twice before starting a new line.
One more thing. So far, the story's written like it's all a script. For example, instead of quotation marks for characters that are speaking, what's written there looks like this; (character): (line). I used to do this when I was in seventh-grade, and let's just say it wasn't well-received.
I will say that you aren't doing a bad job, but it's not what I would call a good one either. I don't want to discourage you from continuing to write, I'm just trying to give some honest criticism.
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pachi (for the zorua talking, they can talk through telepathy, and most of the people and trainers do see that zorua is a pokemon if you seen that in the story, and zorua was getting in cipher's way by beating all their members, so they had to do something about that, and since zorua and zor are the main characters, you know i can't let anything happen to them like being turned into a shadow pokemon or anything bad like that since i have to put them in more stories after this one, and for the snag machine one, it was a snag machine made just to work and fit on zorua)
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Telepathy I can accept. People not caring that they're Pokémon with no Trainer I'm skeptical about. Pretty sure Zorua are considered fairly rare Pokémon, even from their home region. And considering the amount of criminals within Orre, more than a few would be eager on catching them. And as for Cipher trying to stop them? No matter which way you look at it, the best way they could "do something about it" would be to catch the Pokémon themselves.
That being said, I understand not letting the main Pokémon become Shadows. Couldn't really happen anyway since the villains don't have a Snag Machine anymore.
But there's something bothering me. A Snag Machine just to work and fit on a Zorua? That just raises more questions. Why would that even be a thing when Pokémon can't even use Pokéballs naturally? And why in the world would that even be made?
All that being said, I'm not sure I can help you much now aside from advice. Good luck on your story though!
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pachi (and do you think you could talk to me like a pokemon, i like that more, and a lot of people on here and other websites talk to me like that, how you do that is by putting something a pokemon says and then putting what you're going to say to me in these things- ( ) )
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I'm gonna pass, thanks. I would only really do that if we were Roleplaying.
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pachi (blazeaurora13 might be making the pokemon xd part of that story, what would you think about that)
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I mean, that's alright. I just rather not be involved, if that's okay.
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Oh, hello there! Thanks for the compliment! And I'm doing well, if sleep deprived xD
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pachi (i started making that story, tell me how it is, here)
Zorua finds her way in a region known as Orre, along with a male Zorua called Zor
Zorua: Are you ready for this?
Zor: As ready as I can be.
Zorua and Zor make their way to the middle of a desert and find a thing that looks like a train house and go inside it and the TV comes on
Reporter: This just in, a snag machine was stolen at the Team Snagem hideout and the person that stole it got caught and it got dropped somewhere. We don't know where it is, when we find it, we will let you know.
The TV clicks off and Zorua and Zor go outside and look for where they have to go next, when a trainer comes up to them
Willie: Tryin' to get out of 'ere witout a battle, are ya?
Zorua: I don't think so. What do you think, Zor?
Zor: Riiiight, that's not at all what we were doing, heh heh...
Willie: Leeeee's battle then!
Willie sends out a Zigzagoon and a Linoone
Zorua: It looks like this is a double battle, it looks like it's a good thing you came with me then.
Zor: I would come with you anytime if it means battles like this!
Zorua uses Aura Sphere on the Linoone and wins against the Linoone
Zor uses Cut on the Zigzagoon and takes the Zigzagoon down to half hp
The Zigzagoon uses Bite on Zorua and Zor uses Snarl to make Zigzagoon fall down and not hit Zorua
Zorua uses Night Daze on Zigzagoon and wins the battle
Willie: Ah! Oh no!
Willie: I'll be back for you two!
Willie runs into town
Zorua and Zor go into the town too and a pokemon rushes at them and knocks Zorua back
The pokemon seems to be super angry and pushes Zorua back
Zor bites on the pokemon and Zor gets thrown down
Zorua uses Cut on the pokemon and puts a big slash mark on the pokemon's body
A Cipher Peon comes running this way, which is like the lowest rank of Cipher, the bad guys of the region
Cipher Peon: Get off of my pokemon!
The Cipher Peon calls the pokemon to get into a battle
Zorua uses Cut and Zor uses Aura Sphere and the pokemon, which is now revealed to be a pokemon called Makuhita and Makuhita uses Arm Thrust on Zorua and Zorua takes a lot of damage and gets up weakly and the lost snag machine falls on Zorua's foot and attaches to it, along with something else
Zorua: Ah! What is this thing?! (Zorua tries to shake it off) Get it off! Get it ooooofffff!
The Snag Machine turns on and Zorua can see a dark shadow looming over the Makuhita
Zorua: Wait, what's wrong with that Makuhita?
The Cipher Peon heard Zorua and starts to answer
Cipher Peon: A Shadow Pokemon, a pokemon that got the door closed to its heart by us and it's a really powerful fighting machine! Yeah! Don't mess with it or it will mess you up!
Zorua: A Shadow Pokemon, never heard of it, have you, Zor?
Zor: Neither have I, but you seem to have some pokeballs in that machine. Maybe you can catch it?
Zorua: Ooooh, I didn't even think of that, that's right, I can see a pokeball symbol on this machine's display.
Zor: Then go for it!
Zorua starts the snag machine up ready to throw a pokeball and Zor calls Zorua instead of using an attack so the pokemon doesn't get beat before catching
Zor: Zorua!
Zorua responds and Zorua feels powered up for the next move
The pokeball dispenses out of the snag machine just a little bit and Zorua lauches the pokeball out of the snag machine at the Makuhita and the Makuhita goes inside the pokeball and the pokeball shakes twice and Makuhita breaks out and uses Focus Energy and Zorua gets the snag machine ready for a second attempt and Zor uses a weak Snarl just to push Makuhita down and not do any damage
The pokeball comes out and the Makuhita gets caught this time and Zorua and Zor win the battle by catching Makuhita
Cipher Peon: Oh no... How am I going to explain this to my boss?
The Cipher Peon retreats and Zorua goes up to the pokeball
Zorua: Now what are we going to do with this pokeball? There might be more of those Shadow Pokemon and we have to keep them all somehow.
Zor: Maybe we can give it to the nurse standing in front of the pokemon center over there to keep it for us, or...
Zor looks closely at the snag machine
Zor: Ah! There's a special compartment in this machine to keep pokeballs in
Zorua: That's a good idea! But this machine is taking up most of my body and I can't pick up the pokeball, Can you help me?
Zor: Sure I can.
Zor picks up the pokeball and pushes it in the slot and it makes a clicking sound and a congratulations sounding sound
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Not bad for a first time! Not gonna nitpick the small mistakes (like capitalization), but I'm curious as to why the main two Pokémon, Zorua and Zor, can talk and act like normal humans and are almost treated as such. Normally, unless everyone else is a Pokémon, that wouldn't really be happening.
Still, so far you're doing alright. But next time, try not to write this all in a comment on my profile; it takes up a lot of space. You can go to Sta.sh Writer to write things down and just send me a link instead.
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pachi (this is the next part- Untitled )
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Okay, decent so far. But it looks kinda cluttered; when you write on Sta.sh, try pressing enter twice before starting a new line. It makes things a little easier on the eyes of the readers.
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pachi (what do you think about there being eevee, espeon, umbreon, flareon, vaporeon, and jolteon, and you know the attacks that zor has are aura sphere, attract, snarl, and cut, so there isn't that much variety in what zor can do, when zorua has aura sphere, night daze, snarl, and cut)
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For your current two Pokémon (Zorua and Zor) and for other Pokémon in general, keep in mind that they could also learn TM moves, which should add variety to movesets. Just don't go overboard!
As for Eevee and its evolutions? That's for you to decide, though I don't recommend Umbreon or Espeon being involved unless the story is more Colosseum-based. Especially not Umbreon due to being a Dark-type like the other two; three Dark-types is a bit much.
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pachi (you just gave me an idea, maybe another pokemon can join zorua and zor in the pokemon xd side of the story, since it's going to be pokemon colosseum and pokemon xd, hut which one do you think, and i would want it to be a much weaker pokemon that gets a lot stronger than zorua and zor over time if it's going to be any, i was thinking azurill)
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Interesting...I like where that's going. (on a side note, try to capitalize Pokémon and Pokémon names when you can)
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pachi (i have the next part here- Untitled )
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pachi (do you think you can make that story now that i wanted)
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Sorry. Not really what I'm looking to do at the moment.
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pachi (i hope you make it soon, since i've been waiting for it for almost 3 years by somebody else)
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Not to disappoint, but I was never actually planning on writing a story for someone else. I'm not trying to be mean, I'm just not taking requests.
Still, don't you think it would be easier to write it yourself? It looks like you already have a rough draft on what the characters will say, so that's a good start. If you're having trouble, I can give advice, but I'm not going to write the whole thing for you.
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pachi (can you tell me everything that the characters could say and i'll see if i can do it from there, i'm not good at parts like that, i'm the best at the parts of what they're doing the most)
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What the characters could say? From the comment you made back in June 26 on my profile here, you already have a whole script of what they say right there. Since I don't know the full extent of the story you want, I really can't help you much there.
When I meant I could help, it was mainly to describe areas and expressions with details, times in which characters aren't in a lot of action. Try reading the stories of other people to see what I mean. Don't try too hard to make it perfect if it's your first time, mind you, but reading the story formats of others who write could help out.
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pachi (i usually have somebody else help me with what the characters are saying most of the time, and i could do that, but i still don't think i could do that part at least, and the one that helps me with that doesn't know anything about pokemon colosseum and that, and it would take too long to show them or tell them)
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Okay, about the Pokémon Colosseum part: The story you kinda wrote out on my profile looks like it has nothing to do with Pokémon Colosseum. And while I do know quite a bit about it, I still think you should focus on how other people write fanfics like the one I did.
Unfortunately, that's all I can really help with. Sorry.
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pachi (this one is the best i can possibly make on my own if that tells you anything)
1000 years ago, it was a peaceful time in the village until a pokemon known to the village as Shadow sneaks in and then attacks the village and runs everybody out of the village, except for King Incineroar
King Incineroar sees Shadow and roars very loudly and uses Flamethrower and Shadow avoids it and jumps at Incineroar and Shadow is moving around Incineroar and Incineroar is watching for what Shadow is going to do and Shadow disappears into the ground and Incineroar is walking back to the castle, thinking Shadow is gone, when suddenly, Shadow puts its claw right through Incineroar's chest and Incineroar roars in pain and Shadow takes its claw out and picks up Incineroar and carries Incineroar to the edge of a cliff with a big ocean at the bottom and Incineroar roars like saying- "DON'T DO THIS! YOU CAN'T DO THIS TO ME!!!", Shadow thinks about it, then throws Incineroar down into the ocean, and you should know what happens after that, since you know what happens when water touches fire
Queen Ninetales saw Shadow throw Incineroar in the water from a distance and uses Curse on Shadow and Shadow is not seen around there again after that
In the present time, a Vulpix is now born and the young Vulpix in the village got called up to the Queen Ninetales
Ninetales: oh, how cute, a newborn vulpix comes to me
Vulpix: Vul Vul Pix
Ninetales fur glitters the prettiest colors
Ninetales: is that so. well, you still need to be trained since you do not know the kind of things this world can do to pokemon like us
Vulpix: Vulpix!
Ninetales: if only you knew this world in the way it has been to me
Vulpix yawns and curls up in Ninetales fur
Ninetales looks down at Vulpix
Ninetales: in time, little one
Early the next morning, Vulpix is playing with her new friend, Litten
Ninetales comes out of the castle and sees them playing
Ninetales walks up beside Litten's big brother, Torracat and sits down next to Torracat with her eyes closed and sighs
Ninetales: you can not still feel that way about what happened to your father, after all that was a thousand years ago
Ninetales opens one eye to look at Torracat
Torracat growls and paws at his face
Ninetales: when you want to talk to me without doing any of that, come to the castle
Ninetales walks away in an army stance with her head held up and tail high
On a dark and cloudy day, Shadow finds a way to get out of the curse put on by Ninetales and goes back to the village and everybody is running around in fear
Vulpix gets caught in the middle of the commotion and doesn't know what to do
Ninetales: vulpix! vulpix! come here quick
Vulpix runs to the castle and goes in and Ninetales closes and locks the doors
Ninetales: we should be safe here
Vulpix is shaking
Ninetales: do not act so scared, i will protect you
Shadow is banging on the doors, trying to break through them
Ninetales: stay behind me
Vulpix does that
Shadow knocks the doors down
Ninetales gets in a battle position
Shadow jumps behind Ninetales and slashes at Vulpix and Ninetales sees that and tries to jump in the way and is not quick enough and Shadow hits Vulpix and Vulpix falls down
Ninetales runs to Vulpix and Vulpix is squeaking in pain
Ninetales: oh sweet vulpix
Ninetales puts her paw on Vulpix and brushes Vulpix with it and Vulpix's eyes close
Ninetales runs to the back room and takes out the sword
Ninetales and Shadow stare each other down with Ninetales holding the sword in her mouth
Ninetales slashes the sword at Shadow and Shadow grabs the sword and spins Ninetales around and throws Ninetales into the wall
Ninetales scratches at Shadow and keeps scratching and Shadow slashes Ninetales in the stomach and Ninetales gets hit into the wall and stands up weakly with blurry eyesight and Shadow is walking towards Ninetales getting ready to finish her off when suddenly, Torracat runs inside the castle growling and snarling and jumps on top of Shadow and starts biting at Shadow and tearing Shadow apart piece by piece
When Torracat is done, Torracat walks up to Ninetales and heals Ninetales
10 years later, a hooded Torracat that the village has known for 5 of those years with a monocle named Pence comes inside the castle
Pence: eyyy Queen Ninetales, how have you been doing these days?
Ninetales: not now pence i'm working on something with prince torracat, that's right i made torracat to be an official prince just an hour ago, not like when torracat was a prince years ago
Pence: Oh Ninetales, it's always time for me...
Pence snuggles up to Ninetales and Ninetales blushes
Ninetales: d-don't do that
Pence gets up closer to Ninetales
Ninetales uses Psychic to slam Pence into the wall
Ninetales: (in a deep voice) I SAID DON'T DO THAT
Ninetales: (sighs) tsk tsk tsk what am i going to do with you
Pence has stars spinning over his head and stumbles out of the castle
Ninetales is sick and laying in bed and Torracat comes in the room
Ninetales: oh torracat there you are (coughs) come closer
Torracat does that and Ninetales brushes her paw up and down Torracat's face
Ninetales: you know i love you, don't you torracat. but my days being here are numbered, i'm pushing it as it is with my age and i can only live a thousand years, and it has been a thousand years by now
Torracat growls
Ninetales: don't be sorry, i have somebody else taking my place for me and you'll see them soon enough
Torracat's ears go up
Ninetales: yes torracat it's somebody you may or may not know
Pence is looking over the plans that Ninetales left for him
Pence: Now I can't believe that Ninetales put me in charge after how I acted towards her yesterday, but who else was going to do it I guess?
Pence is running around getting things ready for that
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pachi (and i like it more if you talk to me like a pokemon, how you do that is by putting something a pokemon says and then putting what you say to me in these things- ( ) )
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pachi (you seem to know a lot about pokemon colosseum and pokemon xd gale of darkness, do you think you could make a story about my zorua and another zorua called zor going through an adventure together of what happens in both of the games, pokemon colosseum first until the end and pokemon xd after that until the end the same way everything in the game's story goes, zorua is female and can use aura sphere, night daze, snarl, and cut, and zor is male and can use aura sphere, attract, snarl, and cut, and i want zor to use attract on some pokemon and see what those pokemon that zor uses attract on act like, and i have some stories that i made here to show a little bit of what zorua acts like, and zor acts similar to zorua, and i want zorua to have a snag machine made in a way so it can work for a zorua, and be able to catch shadow pokemon and have a way to keep all those pokeballs that the shadow pokemon get caught in, i tried to see if somebody else could do it for me, but that hasn't got anywhere for 2 years now, and i see that you made one about pokemon xd gale of darkness, here's some of the stories that i made to show what zorua acts like now, and can you make it in the same style as my stories if you're going to)
After beating the Coumarine City Gym, Zorua arrives at Shalour City. Zorua first goes to the Shalour City Gym where she sees the gym leader Korrina roller skating at the Skate Park. Korrina does a rail grind and a backflip and Zorua is amazed by the way she roller skates. Korrina skates toward Zorua.
Korrina: Hey there. What's your name?
Zorua: Zorua. You must be Shalour City Gym leader Korrina. Correct?
Korrina: Yep, that's me. You must have come here to challenge me then.
Zorua: Yes. I'm hoping to beat you so I can progress toward the Pokemon League.
Korrina: The Pokemon League? That's quite a quest to complete.
Zorua: Yep, I know it is.
Korrina: Well then, are you ready to battle me?
Zorua: Yes I am.
Korrina: Then let's head for the gym.
Zorua and Korrina arrive at the Shalour City Gym.
They enter the gym.
Korrina: You ready over there?
Zorua: Bring it on. I'm ready to win and beat you.
Korrina: Alright then. Let the battle commence.
Korrina sends out Lucario.
Korrina: What's your first move going to be.
Korrina uses the mega stone to mega evolve Lucario.
Zorua uses Aura Sphere. It's not very effective against Lucario.
Mega Lucario uses Swords dance, which raises Lucario's attack stat.
Korrina: Aura Sphere? You do realize that's not very effective.
Zorua: I know that. I'm just buying time.
Mega Lucario uses Bone Rush.
It doesn't hit Zorua, Zorua's HP stays full.
Zorua uses Night Daze, it's not very effective against Mega Lucario. Mega Lucario's HP is at 3/4.
Mega Lucario uses Metal Sound which lowers Zorua's special defense and increases mega Lucario's special attack stat.
Zorua uses Snarl, which lowers Mega Lucario's special attack. Mega Lucario's HP is now 1/2.
Korrina: How are you not taking any damage over there?
Zorua: Guess I'm lucky then.
Korrina: Your luck is about to run out.
Mega Lucario uses Aura Sphere, but suddenly Zorua bolts towards Mega Lucario using Aura Sphere at the same time.
The two Aura Sphere collide causing an almost thermonuclear explosion which destroys the gym and damages both opponents. Mega Lucario's HP is down to 1/4 and Zorua's HP is reduced to 1/3.
Korrina: What the... What exactly happened?
Zorua: I used Aura Sphere to repel off Mega Lucario's Aura Sphere.
Korrina: (upset) Your going to pay for that!!
Zorua: UH-OH. This is going to get bad.
Korrina: Well since you used Aura Sphere at the same time as Mega Lucario, we're going to have to flip a coin. Heads I go, tails you go.
Korrina flips the coin, it lands on tails.
Korrina: Great. Just great.
Zorua: Yay! I'm going to beat you now.
Zorua uses cut, which makes Mega Lucario faint.
Korrina: Uuuughhh. How am I going to explain to my grandfather that you destroyed the gym?
Zorua: Just say team flare came and blew up the gym because they wanted the mega stone.
Korrina: That could work, I guess. Well now guess I have to congratulate you for beating me then.
(Outside the gym) Where are you going to next Zorua?
Zorua: Snowbelle City.
Korrina: Snowbelle City? That's quite a long distance from here. 6 days by walking if I'm correct.
Zorua: Well I guess I'd better be on my way then.
Korrina: Thanks for coming I guess. Take care of yourself Zorua.
Zorua: I will, hope to see you again sometime.
Zorua arrives at the Snowbelle City Gym but Zorua runs into a snowstorm and has to camp out in an abandoned building and must stay there for the night.
Zorua: Hello? Anyone there?
There's no reply.
Zorua takes a nap in an old looking bed.
While Zorua is sleeping a Darkrai appears and puts a dreaming spell on Zorua which makes Zorua look like a Zoroark
Zoroark has to find a way to turn back into Zorua
Zorua has to find Lysandre to turn back into a Zorua, but Zorua knows it's not going to be easy
Zorua heads to Lysandre's base but runs into 4 grunts at the entrance
Team Flare Grunt: What do you want?
Zoroark: I wish to see Lysandre.
Team Flare Grunts: You'll have to get through us first to get to him.
Zoroark: Alright then, you're going to regret this.
The 4 grunts send out 4 Mightyenas
Zoroark turns into a Mightyena and switches places with one of the Mightyenas
The Team Flare grunts are confused so Team Flare grunts use Dark Pulse on all the Mightyenas
Zoroark's illusion wears off
Zoroark turns back into a Zoroark
Zoroark uses Aura Sphere on two of the Mightyenas
The two Mightyenas faint
The two Mightyenas use Snarl on Zoroark. It's not very effective.
Zoroark uses Aura Sphere against the 2 Mightyenas. Both Mightyenas faint.
The 4 Team Flare grunts retreat
Zoroark continues through the entrance of the base
Lysandre hears the grunts retreating and goes to investigate the problem
Zoroark: Lysandre. I need to speak to you.
Lysandre appears
Lysandre: What do you want from me?
Zoroark: I would like you to turn me back into a Zorua
Lysandre: Very well. Come this way.
Lysandre leads Zoroark to a machine
Lysandre: To change you back into a Zorua we need to put you in this machine.
Zoroark: This machine? What for?
Lysandre: This machine will convert your cells to change you back into a Zorua
Zoroark: What are the chances of it failing?
Lysandre: It's a 25 percent chance of that happening.
Zoroark: Okay. Let's get this started then.
Zoroark walks into the machine
Lysandre commands Xerosic to turn on the machine
The machine turns on
Zoroark starts to feel its body shrinking
As Zoroark's body is shrinking back into a Zorua an alarm goes off
Lysandre: What's that noise?
Xerosic: We're using too much power right now. We need to decrease it.
Lysandre: No, we're not going to do that. Continue at full power.
Zoroark is almost turned back into a Zorua when all of a sudden one of the generators explodes
Xerosic: Sir, major failure on generator one. We are losing power.
Lysandre: I know, but continue on. We have to complete this.
Zoroark is nearly back into a Zorua when 3 out of the 4 generators explodes
Xerosic: Sir, we have to stop. We are going to risk blowing up the power plant
Lysandre: We are at 98 percent complete. Continue on now!
Zoroark is turned back into a Zorua and at the same time, the last generator explodes and the power goes out
Zorua: I'm turned back into a Zorua. Thank you Lysandre.
Lysandre: You're very welcome.
Xerosic: Sir, it's a blackout now. What do you want us to do now?
Lysandre: Fire up the solar panels.
The power comes back on
Zorua and Lysandre walk out of the building
Lysandre: You do realize, Zorua, this will affect your DNA
Zorua: How will it affect my DNA?
Lysandre: Well, one of two things can happen, one, If you get hit by a special kind of attack, you'll turn back into a Zoroark. Or two, nothing will happen and you will stay as a zorua for the rest of your life.
The sleep spell wears off and Zorua wakes up
Zorua: That was one strange dream.
The snowstorm has stopped and Zorua continues on towards the Snowbelle City gym
Zorua finally makes it to the Snowbelle City gym, but the gym leader is not there
Zorua: Where is the gym leader?
There is a note on the door: it says "To trainers who want to battle, please come back in a couple hours"
Zorua goes to look for the gym leader
Zorua first looks in the Pokemon Center, but he is not there, so Zorua goes to look in the Snowbelle City diner, and again he is not there
Zorua walks down a path and sees a forest
Zorua walks into it and finds a pokeball on the ground
Zorua sniffs it and picks up a scent of the gym leader, so she follows the scent. She comes to the end of the woods and sees the gym leader talking with other pokemon in front of him. There is a Furfrou, an Espurr, and a Fletchling. They run when they see Zorua coming.
Wulfric: Huh? Hello there, what's your name?
Zorua: I'm Zorua
Wulfric: A zorua that talks, I haven't seen this before.
Wulfric: What brings you out this way?
Zorua: I want to do a gym battle with you.
Wulfric: Okay. Just let me tell the pokemon here you're not here to hurt them
Wulfric: IT'S OKAY, SHE'S NOT HERE TO HARM YOU ALL. COME ON BACK NOW.
The pokemon return and greet Zorua by sniffing her
Zorua: Glad to meet you all.
Wulfric: This is Pokemon Village, a place where abused, abandoned, and tortured pokemon come. They come here to escape their abusers and I come here to make sure they are alright.
Zorua: So it's like a shelter then?
Wulfric: Yep, that's what it's like. I guess you must be in a hurry to do a gym battle with me.
Zorua: You bet I am. I want to beat you.
Wulfric: Okay then, let's head back to the gym.
They arrive at the gym and Wulfric sends out Avalugg
Avalugg uses Crunch. It's not very effective.
Zorua uses Aura Sphere. It's super effective and Avalugg faints.
Wulfric: Avalugg return. You did great out there, now take a good rest.
Wulfric sends out Cryogonal
Cryogonal uses Confuse Ray. It confuses Zorua.
Zorua uses Cut and gets hit by confusion and Cryogonal uses Flash Cannon. Zorua's HP is at a half
Zorua snaps out of confusion and uses Night Daze and Cryogonal faints
Wulfric: Cryogonal return. You did great out there today. Now it's time for me to shine.
Abomasnow uses Energy Ball. Zorua's HP is 1/4
Zorua uses Snarl and Abomasnow faints
Wulfric: Wow, that was a quick battle. Well, Zorua, congrats, you won.
Zorua: Why thank you.
Zorua and Wulfric leave the gym
Wulfric: Where is your next destination?
Zorua: Cyllage City. I'm going to beat the rock type gym.
Wulfric: I wish you the best of luck Zorua.
Zorua walks away from Wulfric and starts heading towards Cyllage City
Then right before Zorua leaves Snowbelle City, three Team Flare grunts surround Zorua and each send out a Golbat to battle Zorua
Zorua: Not you guys again, don't you ever give up?
Team Flare Grunts: We never give up. We keep coming and coming.
Team Flare Grunts: Go Golbat.
Zorua uses Night Daze on the second Golbat
The second Golbat faints
The first Golbat uses Poison Fang and Zorua gets poisoned
The third Golbat uses Mean Look and Zorua can't escape from the battle
Zorua uses Aura Sphere on the first Golbat. It's not very effective and Zorua takes the damage from being poisoned and Zorua is two turns away from fainting
Zorua uses Cut on the first Golbat and it faints
The third Golbat uses Wing Attack and the Wing Attack damage along with the poison damage takes Zorua down to 1 HP
Zorua uses Snarl and the third Golbat faints
Team Flare Grunts: Retreat! We'll be back for you, Zorua.
Zorua heads to the Pokemon Center to get healed
Zorua comes back to the Santalune City gym for a rematch
Viola: I see you're back again, Zorua.
Zorua: I'm here for a rematch.
Viola: Okay then, let's do it.
Vivillon uses Infestation and Zorua uses Aura Sphere and Zorua takes damage
Vivillon uses Harden and Zorua uses Night Daze and Zorua takes more damage
Vivillon uses Tackle and Zorua gets hit and Zorua uses Snarl. Vivillon's hp is at 1/2
Zorua takes more damage and Vivillon uses Tackle and Zorua dodges it and jumps on Vivillon's back and holds on tight and starts pushing down on Vivillon's back until the Infestation effect comes off of Zorua and goes onto Vivillon
Zorua: What do you think about that?
Viola: Using my pokemon's attacks against them, very clever.
Zorua: Now it's time for me to finish this.
Zorua uses Cut and Vivillon faints
Zorua: Finally, I beat you.
Viola: Well, you won fair and square.
Zorua comes out of the gym and sees Lysandre
Lysandre: Hello, Zorua. Do you know who I am?
Zorua: No I don't. Who are you?
Lysandre: I am Lysandre, the leader of Team Flare.
Zorua: So you're the leader of the people that tried to catch me?
Lysandre: Yes, yes I am.
Zorua: What do you want to do with me?
Lysandre: I want to capture you.
Zorua: Good luck with that.
Lysandre sends out an Aerodactyl and mega evolves Aerodactyl
Zorua: Bring your best.
Zorua uses Night Daze and mega Aerodactyl uses Earthquake
Zorua uses Aura Sphere and mega Aerodactyl uses Fire Fang and Zorua gets burned
Zorua uses Snarl on mega Aerodactyl and Aerodactyl uses Stone Edge and Zorua is at 1 hp
Zorua uses Cut and mega Aerodactyl faints
Lysandre: You won this battle, Zorua, but I'll be back.
Zorua heads to the pokemon center and gets healed
Valerie: Are you ready to battle?
Zorua: I guess I am.
Valerie: OK. My first pokemon will be Sylveon.
Zorua: A fairy type? This could get ugly for me.
Valerie: What is your first move going to be?
Zorua uses aura sphere. It's not very effective against Sylveon.
Sylveon uses moonblast. It's super effective against Zorua. Zorua's hp is reduced to half of what it was.
Zorua: That hurt! (In Zorua's mind) How am I going to win this?
Valerie: What's your next move zorua?
Zorua: I'm going to win this!
Zorua uses Cut. It reduces Sylveon's hp to 3/4 damage.
Valerie: You giving up Zorua?
Zorua: No way am I giving up!
Valerie: It's your funeral then.
Sylveon uses moonblast, but Zorua dodges it.
Zorua: How did I avoid that? Guess I got lucky.
Valerie: It avoided the attack?! How?!
Zorua uses cut on Sylveon, again it does 1/4 damage. Now its hp is down to a half.
Sylveon uses moonblast again, as it comes toward Zorua braces itself to faint, but for some reason Zorua's hp is reduced to one.
Zorua: I didn't faint?! But how!?
Valerie: You used endure. Hmm, nice. But that doesn't mean your going to win this battle.
Zorua: (In its mind) Ok. How am I going to do this? I'm down to 1 hp and Sylveon is at 1/2 hp.
Sylveon again uses moonblast, but Zorua avoids the attack by running in a zigzag and as moonblast gets closer Zorua bolts at the last second and it hits Sylveon instead.
Valerie: Sylveon! You ok?
Sylveon gets up, but its hp is now 1/4 and Sylveon is badly injured.
Zorua: This is my chance to win this.
Zorua uses Cut and Sylveon faints.
Valerie: Sylveon! Noooooooo!
Zorua: I won? I WOOON!!!
Zorua: Now I beat the fairy type gym. Up to the next gym.
Valerie: For beating me I congratulate you on that. You are one tough pokemon. Where are you off to next Zorua?
Zorua: Not sure. Probably the next gym.
Valerie: Why don't you go to the Psychic gym in Anistar City?
Zorua: Anistar City? Ok now I know where it is.
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Oof sorry for the late reply! I appreciate it, but as of right now I'm not taking requests for stories. I don't think I'm ready for that kind of thing yet. Maybe one day, but not today.
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