WarriorTilTheEnd In reply to cyanoticshade [2014-09-23 21:32:32 +0000 UTC]

Welcome !

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WarriorTilTheEnd In reply to ErichZannIII [2014-09-18 23:35:30 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome ^.^

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WarriorTilTheEnd In reply to IcyKitsuneStorm [2014-09-18 23:29:56 +0000 UTC]

Welcome! )

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WarriorTilTheEnd In reply to sesam-is-open [2014-09-13 15:30:07 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome, dear.

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WarriorTilTheEnd In reply to BlueLionEyes [2014-09-13 15:30:23 +0000 UTC]

Welcome!

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WarriorTilTheEnd In reply to varjotin [2014-08-20 00:20:19 +0000 UTC]

Welcome <3 :33

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WarriorTilTheEnd In reply to ChromaticAdmin [2014-05-25 16:13:35 +0000 UTC]

oh just a sec

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ChromaticAdmin In reply to WarriorTilTheEnd [2014-05-25 16:25:39 +0000 UTC]

oh thank you ^w^ totally isn't writing another one right now

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WarriorTilTheEnd In reply to ChromaticAdmin [2014-05-25 16:57:02 +0000 UTC]

okay. so, I was almost done with it, then my internet reset and I lost it. urg!

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ChromaticAdmin In reply to WarriorTilTheEnd [2014-05-25 17:01:11 +0000 UTC]

aw shit...do you need me to send it again?

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WarriorTilTheEnd In reply to ChromaticAdmin [2014-05-25 17:05:50 +0000 UTC]

no, I have it.
I do have a few suggestions for you!

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ChromaticAdmin In reply to WarriorTilTheEnd [2014-05-25 17:08:59 +0000 UTC]

well, that's a relief
and what do you have to say?

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WarriorTilTheEnd In reply to ChromaticAdmin [2014-05-25 17:19:47 +0000 UTC]

um.... here are a few suggestions!
1.) avoid run-on sentences. I keep finding them in your writing, and they have a tendency to confuse the reader and decrease over-all detail.
2.) make sure to pre-check your work. I can't stress how important capitalization is.
3.) Ellipsis (these "...", the three dots) need to have a space when before what follows them, ex. "Which was about... five months ago?" Note the space used.
4.) make sure to explain things in your writing, preferably in an Author's Note at the end or beginning. I have no idea what "House-wife Kiku style" is, though I have a vague idea.
5.) The comma is your friend! Use it as much as you like... within reason, of course. I know sometimes it feels like you may use it too much, but trust me, you aren't.
6.) Try to avoid using all caps anywhere within your story - it is very unprofessional looking.
7.) Some good times to italicize words (do the slanty thing) are to convey sarcasm or emphasize a point.

just some tips, I hope it didn't come out harsh, darling. :3

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ChromaticAdmin In reply to WarriorTilTheEnd [2014-05-25 17:59:13 +0000 UTC]

thanks for the tips ^w^ in all honesty i thought i fucked up allot more than i did
I actually just finished re-editing it
and don't worry, you weren't being harsh/an ass about it XD
(( just wondering, why do you call me darling every now and again, it makes it seem like we have an age gap...))

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WarriorTilTheEnd In reply to ChromaticAdmin [2014-05-25 18:06:50 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome, and it's alright! I just finished editing it, I will send it to you in a bit,
I'm glad I wasn't too harsh! :3
((I like calling people stuff like hun, darling, sweetheart, etc.))
((I'm only a teen.))

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ChromaticAdmin In reply to WarriorTilTheEnd [2014-05-25 18:18:35 +0000 UTC]

^w^
oh, so in that case it makes sense
I call all my friends bitches XD
((in a friendly way tho))

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WarriorTilTheEnd In reply to ChromaticAdmin [2014-05-25 21:55:33 +0000 UTC]

right :2

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ChromaticAdmin In reply to WarriorTilTheEnd [2014-05-25 22:11:17 +0000 UTC]

... what does :2 mean?

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WarriorTilTheEnd In reply to ChromaticAdmin [2014-05-27 00:07:21 +0000 UTC]

typo for :3 or tongue-tied.

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ChromaticAdmin In reply to WarriorTilTheEnd [2014-05-27 01:06:58 +0000 UTC]

oh! da't makes sense naow 030

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WarriorTilTheEnd In reply to kur0usagisan [2014-05-11 17:53:39 +0000 UTC]

aww thanks for the welcome doll

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WarriorTilTheEnd In reply to EvilAmishWerewolf [2014-05-03 01:50:53 +0000 UTC]

Welcome doll! :3

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