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[2004-10-25 17:29:14 +0000 UTC]
"shut up; you talk too much"
(United States)
# Statistics
Favourites: 30; Deviations: 46; Watchers: 8
Watching: 17; Pageviews: 5775; Comments Made: 590; Friends: 17
# Interests
Favorite bands / musical artists: DeftonesOther Interests: Interesting... things.
# About me
Personal Quote: Sometimes I feel like I don't have a problem# Comments
Comments: 50
I just saw your message on my wall. Shows how often I'm on. Hey! Hope you're well!
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Hey
I thought you might like to take a look at some of my poems:
Wake_up. and .: '-._ dElEtEd _.-' :. are two that I'd like more people to see.
You seem like someone that might like to.
Oh check out My Gallery too. Thanks. ^^
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Sorry it took so long to get around to it, but thanks for the watch.
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# is Deviously Deviant
# is Male
# is a deviant since Oct 26, 2004, 3:28 AM
# has 777 pageviews
# is located in United States
Lucky seven.
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i may b wrong but is there any chance your avatar is from the midtown video "just rock and roll"?? just curious
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hmm, I don't think so. I don't know for sure though. I've never seen the video. I found it while googling for a pic of a rabbi. Are you a midtown fan?
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Comment.... Overload....
*brain melts with appreciation*
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Many thanks for the +watch
It is very much appreciated
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Just thought I'd drop in and say Hello-a-doodle-doo
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Hey! That's not cool. The link said I'd get laid if I followed it and it sent me HERE. The page of another guy? Oh well. Might as well browse your gallery.
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Hey there!
Thanks a lot for the favs and watch, you're awesome
Take care.
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Thanks for visiting my page and appreciating my works!
I've read through the poems displayed on the dev. window on this page, and thought that it'd be best if I just summed up all my critiques in one, constructive, helpful lump. 
First off: I'm no poet, and I haven't read up on that much published literature from established poets, modern or otherwise, so most of what I'll be saying here is influenced by what I've heard other writers say to their fellows about writing poetry, and should never be misconstrued as such learned from my own experiences in writing
Rhymes nowadays, in my opinion, is a format you subscribe to only if you want to achieve an effect of continuity/spontaneity, which goes best with narratives. If you want to make a narrative, rhymes are welcome, "musical" devices. You can however do narratives without doing rhymes. In fact, rhymes can sometimes hurt the flow and presentation of ideas in a work of literature. I believe the most common mistake of writers doing rhymes is they get to be too obvious in trying to make rhymes work 
Try this: Write everything you want to be expressed. Don't stop until you feel you've poured out every idea you want to share at the moment. Then, try to make cohesive sense out of those lines. Arrange them sequentially if you want. Omit things you don't feel like showing. Then, if by combining them into one composition they get to make sense, THEN you start making things artful. Edit galore. Rhyme if you want. Cut lines into phrases, clauses or even words which speak for themselves, rather than using one complete sentence to get something across...
Which gets me to another point: If you want to convey something, SHOW, don't tell. Don't dictate that "this" is what's happening. Tell the message through symbols. Tell them in ways other than the literal. I've seen you pull this off rather often, now I just think you need to know how to "maximize" the effect of a "symbol" (an object, an action, a comparison or figure of speech, simile/metaphor/whatever) so much so that it speaks louder than one whole bunch of lines. I've seen that you use so many symbols that they can't work by themselves (in harmony, a little, but still it's sketchy), thereby making things vague. Make things open to interpretation but choose your words well and focus on getting one image/idea across at a time. Don't try to convey say, "the disturbing sense of prevalent apathy in today's society" in a few lines. Get the reader to arrive at that theme by drawing, with your words, stark, memorable images which suggest that idea, one after another. Don't overwhelm the reader, guide him/her, show them signs but never confirm anything, and when they realize the big picture in the end on their own they'll praise you for being so manipulative
Just trying to be helpful. On a final note, which is I believe one of the best things you can do for self-improvement on a certain craft: Research. Read up. Good works or bad. Just read. It broadens your horizons, teaches you what's good and bad...keep learning
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Thanks for all the great comments that you put on my works, but thanks for the watch more so.
As I said in my comment on Flies, I'm not a big fan of poetry. However, even with my rudamentary (I don't think that's spelt right) knowledge of poetry, or rather, lack of connection with poetry, I can tell that some of your stuff is good indeed. I appreciate how difficult it must have been to write some of your works, seeing as your style tends to involve rhyming schemes of AAAA - sometimes an impossible task.
I would really like to say that I absolutely loved every piece, but quite bluntly, I didn't. When taking into account the previous paragraph, it's obvious this is of no fault of yours. I can tell that you have skill to boot. I would really like to establish a connection between myself and your works, but that's not me. I did however like quite a few of your poems, namely Flies and Watch This Space, which is something that I rarely do.
So, I would like you to understand that I really can see the 'hard yards', skill and emotion that have been put into your work. And, I think you should keep on writing, as it seems to be a passion of yours.
As I said before, I would like to say that I adore all of your work, but it would be a lie which you would probably see through.
Sorry this ended up being so long, but it was necessary, though perhaps not successful, to convey how much I think of your writing.
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k.. ummm. came here to get laid so.... chop chop (joke)
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crikey son! how am i gonna comment on allt hose?? *L* keep doing what you do, man, i'll try to keep up.
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well well,
seems as if you have attracted me into your gallery and im gonna end up 
you got quite lucky.
ill be seeing you around
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Hey great gallery, I see that you live by me on the find Nearby Devients. Well come check out my gallery!
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thanks for listening on the forum, mind if i do a watchee?
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Hey there. Welcome to DA and thanks for the 
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Hey,
Thanks for the welcomes y'all. It's a pleasure to know that people care.
- m32
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Hey there and welcome to 
I hope you enjoy yourself and all the great things DA offers.
Need Help
Have a nice day!
Take care. 
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