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09Striker — The Curse of Eternity by-nc-nd
Published: 2007-06-23 14:50:15 +0000 UTC; Views: 403; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 6
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Description The curse of Eternity

I´ve got too many problems
Those get me into strife
I would really like to solve `em
If I had eternal life

To get this endless time
I need the spirit of life
So I´ll travel the lands
With my bow and a knife

I finally know it
The spirit I´m searching
It´s the beautiful phoenix
I know where it´s hiding

I found him at least
He´ll grant me my wish
First he wants me to defeat him
To see if I´m selfish

I won the deadly fight
I can see the phoenix rising
From the shadows of death
And his feathers are shining

He´s the symbol of resurrection
He´s making me immortal
Mephisto cannot get me
So he´s my deadly rival

I´m living now for ages
My mistake was just the worst
I found it out myself
With eternal life am I cursed

I´m waiting for salvation
I made a mistake, I do regret
I am awaiting death
The endless sleep, I´ll never get

Mankind is seeking
For the endless life
But it only causes trouble
And a never ending strife

I accepted my fate
And made it my duty
To protect our world
From mankind´s fury

Some people will come
To get the phoenix´s might
I will be waiting
And win the endless fight

                                   Marcus "Isaac" Spaller
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Comments: 19

Eralor [2008-05-01 11:37:45 +0000 UTC]

It would be horrible to live forever... Seeing your friends die in front of your eyes and witnessing the destruction of everything that ever mattered for you... *shivers*
I like this poem. It seems quite amazing for me how you can write poems that have great rhymes without the poems losing their meaning.. because when I try to write in rhymes the meaning of the poem always becomes very abstract. You have some skill. ^_^

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09Striker In reply to Eralor [2008-05-01 19:39:12 +0000 UTC]

well, first I need to thank you aloot for that comliment^^
well, its just like i had some of the parts just in my head you know and added some stuff around, its sometimes hard to make it rhyme cause u have to work on the frase ALOT, not always tho
you just switch some words or arrange them in a new way, kinda hard to describe
and again loootsa Kiitos, Kiitos^^

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Eralor In reply to 09Striker [2008-05-02 06:24:32 +0000 UTC]

I know what you mean. ^^ For me writing in English is quite hard, I prefer writing in my native. When you write in your own language, you can be sure that you get the right meaning in it.... I'm so good explaining things again. xD

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09Striker In reply to Eralor [2008-05-02 09:58:54 +0000 UTC]

well that doesnt work for me
I wrote in german as well but I gave up ´cause it never saitisfied me and teh rhyme sounds so unoriginal you know
but then I wrote one in english just for fun (that was "the king of the aeons")
and it went so much easier and better that I tried it again and again and now I write them in english only, just as my story and the RP I work on with a friend

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Eralor In reply to 09Striker [2008-05-02 12:22:36 +0000 UTC]

Yep. It depends very much on the language. I find it quite easy to write in Finnish, and I think that's mostly because it always sounds beautiful. ^^ I write in English too, but because my English is what it is, I'm not always even sure of what I am writing... xD

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09Striker In reply to Eralor [2008-05-02 22:25:54 +0000 UTC]

xD well the time will help you on this
I just found out that german may be my mother tongue but it´s not the language I feel comfortable with
english the way I express myself, my second me I always expressed in english, thats why I want to move from germany to australia maybe

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Eralor In reply to 09Striker [2008-05-03 09:47:40 +0000 UTC]

Okay.. that was a surprise. ^^ For me English is also very important. In many ways... sometimes in expressing myself, too.
Concerning on moving abroad, I've always wanted to move to New Zealand... But I think I should visit there first (I've never been there).. xD and of course, being this young, I wouldn't be able to live there alone... not yet ^^

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09Striker In reply to Eralor [2008-05-03 15:29:11 +0000 UTC]

well I´d had to prepare alot things as well but Im quite sure I dont wanna live my life here
it´s just the way I coose a while ago, now I have to find out where to it leads me

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Eralor In reply to 09Striker [2008-05-03 19:50:14 +0000 UTC]

Yeah.. follow your destiny and that sort of things... xD

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09Striker In reply to Eralor [2008-05-03 20:05:19 +0000 UTC]

hehe yeah, exactly thats what Im talking about^^

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Eralor In reply to 09Striker [2008-05-03 20:10:11 +0000 UTC]

So you believe in destiny? I'm not sure if I do.. it's an unpleasant thought that everything's already been written and nothing can be changed. xD

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09Striker In reply to Eralor [2008-05-03 20:16:30 +0000 UTC]

no I dont think that somethigs written down in thebook fo time or such crap
all i ment I will follow what my way will lead me to
I will see what happens in the future, no one can foreseen

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Eralor In reply to 09Striker [2008-05-03 20:18:41 +0000 UTC]

True... ^^ sorry, I was just joking and exaggerating things as usual. xD

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09Striker In reply to Eralor [2008-05-03 20:25:34 +0000 UTC]

hehe yeah, maybe^^ nevermind tho

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Eralor In reply to 09Striker [2008-05-03 20:26:08 +0000 UTC]

Hmm... ^^

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Kheyra-Jyn [2007-11-11 14:05:55 +0000 UTC]

That is so true, heh
Good poem

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09Striker In reply to Kheyra-Jyn [2007-11-11 20:31:06 +0000 UTC]

thanks alot^.^

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Najiri [2007-08-01 14:34:15 +0000 UTC]

Bei den letzen beiden Zeile hab ich echt Gänsehaut bekommen ^^
Wunderschönes Gedicht^^

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09Striker In reply to Najiri [2007-08-01 17:32:25 +0000 UTC]

vielen dank
ich freu mich immer wenn meine gedichte ankommen und vorallem wenn man den Sinn dessen versteht
es lesen kann jeder aber zu wissen welchen punkt es andeuten soll ist etwas das viele scheinbar nicht können

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