Comments: 31
Reji [2006-06-19 02:55:27 +0000 UTC]
A very nice piece that I just happened to click on. I do have to agree with *Mickey-Mouse with the last stanza. Other than that, this piece is really good. I haven't really read a good piece like this in a while so it's a refreshing change. Good job!
~Raye
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Reji In reply to 10eel [2006-06-20 04:57:13 +0000 UTC]
You're quite welcome. I've waded through having a lot of comments as well and it doesn't bother me that it took you a while.
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10eel In reply to Reji [2006-06-20 05:34:49 +0000 UTC]
What? No attempt to steal it back?
Oh, I'm sorry... here... *gives back virtual chocolatey-goodness*
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Reji In reply to 10eel [2006-06-20 17:09:36 +0000 UTC]
*Huggles chocolate*
I was tired and didn't feel like running after someone. (^^)
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Reji In reply to 10eel [2006-06-21 20:13:43 +0000 UTC]
Lol
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Mickey-Mouse [2006-06-13 07:34:48 +0000 UTC]
All round, very good, but the last paragraph didn't quite fit..... but other than that, it flowed quite nicely.
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10eel In reply to Mickey-Mouse [2006-06-14 03:44:24 +0000 UTC]
Michelle... that was intentional... *shakes head* You'll never understand artistic poetic license, will you?
Joking, thank you for the comment, I feel super impressed and special as you NEVER comment and you HAVE commented to me!!! YAY!!!! Thank you for the compliment, Chelley... You're awesome, and dA misses you when you go away!!!! *hint, hint, nudge, nudge, say no more, say no more!!!!*
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spontaneous0 [2006-06-02 16:31:34 +0000 UTC]
AWESOME SUSPENSE!, i write the same way too, just what comes to head!
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10eel In reply to spontaneous0 [2006-06-04 11:34:53 +0000 UTC]
Haha! THANK YOU again!
Really? That's awesome, I'll have to read some of your poems sometime! (My Mum's currently breathing down my neck to go to bed, so I won't have time now, but if you were to remind me I'm sure I'll find the time!!! ...)
I really love reading other works of poetry written like my own. It reassures me that I'm not the only one!
Haha, and I love writing just whatever comes to head. I always thought, when I was growing up, that someone really needed to make a better version of that silly poem, 'Not a creature was stirring, not even a mouse...' and then, one day, I finally managed to get around to it!
I look forward to reading your work too! Happy Rhyming!
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spontaneous0 In reply to 10eel [2006-06-04 13:42:16 +0000 UTC]
yup do go ahead, try my earlier ones for the rhyming part, lately i've been into free verse(or maybe worse! )
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Lynarri [2006-05-23 14:22:43 +0000 UTC]
Wow. I really like this one, Tenille. It is a little bit dark and depressing, but it is a unique perspective looking at the world through the eyes of one who has died but doesn't realize it immediately. I also like how you started out with the slight reference to the Christmas poem (I can't remember its name for the life of me!); it made me think it was going to be a nice feel-good poem but then you turned the tables. It was a good way to draw your audience in. Very nice job.
~Lynarri
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