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Published: 2016-01-04 06:56:57 +0000 UTC; Views: 836; Favourites: 16; Downloads: 0
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This took me a while to color. Need to practice more >.>

Edit: I made his jaw a little less severe.

Constructive comments welcome~
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Comments: 28

PhilDiehl [2016-08-27 04:25:42 +0000 UTC]

 

This piece really caught my attention. The colors, although fairly subtle seem to really pop with the use of contrast and a strong light source from an unusual angle. Although I’m color blind between red and brown (red looks like brown … or maybe brown looks like red), I can tell there are strong but subtle reds and browns in play throughout this piece.

 

I really like the light coming from the bottom left – not a direction most pieces use. This really makes the mind think and draws people into the work to try to figure it out. I also like the use of the red glow in the upper right; it helps to offset the brightness in the lower left of the work without creating total darkness in the work. Not having darkness helps to give the works a softer, more sensual feel. The colors, posture, and expressions really allows one to want to be a part of the piece.

 

What didn’t work for me on this piece… not very much. The hair passing across the hand should have cast a bit of shadow, possibly even a touch on the face. Her eyelash looks as though it is passing over part of her hair – pulling the hair across the lashes would help drop her eye a bit deeper in the face, which wouldn’t be bad. Her chin meets his collar; it may work better to either have a slight gap or, my preference, a bit of an overlap – dropping her chin a touch below his collar. This helps to pull her closer to him and visually pull the work together – especially since it’s nearly in the center of the work.

 

As a whole, this is a wonderful piece and I could see this hanging on my wall at home.

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13-year-old In reply to PhilDiehl [2016-08-27 04:47:51 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much! Looking at it now, I think it maybe looks a little sloppy/painterly, with not enough fine details (some completely missing) and variation in lineweights. It looked great to me right after I finished it, but now I can see the flaws. What you said about the chin makes perfect sense, though. It would look much more intimate and give the piece more depth if there was a bit of an overlap. Thanks for that. I still have a lot to learn about composition. I plan on remaking this someday, and your tips definitely help

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PhilDiehl In reply to 13-year-old [2016-08-27 04:57:07 +0000 UTC]

Maybe a bit, but it still works.

I always like to go back and do the same work again - it can be surprising. As can just looking back at your artwork over the years and seeing the progression, development and refining your style (hopefully that's what you see).

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Lilia-DeRosso [2016-01-14 19:57:28 +0000 UTC]

Commenting for project comment ~   

First of all, wow, wow, wow! This is really good! The angle is great, the expressions are good, the lighting is soft and luminous, and I can't say anything bad about it. 

The only things that maybe look slightly off are the man´s ear, which looks too high up, and the way the girl's eyebrow slightly overlaps her hair. Otherwise, it is amazing.

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13-year-old In reply to Lilia-DeRosso [2016-01-15 02:27:56 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much!

And you're right about her eyebrow xD as for his ear, I know it definitely looks off but I wouldn't know where to put it just yet i'll definitely draw this again someday, though.

Thanks again for your time and for the fave!

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Lilia-DeRosso In reply to 13-year-old [2016-01-15 18:20:48 +0000 UTC]

Yes, it must be really difficult to place features at an angle like that. I hope to see the redrawing if you do one!

No problem, I love your piece! It was a pleasure to comment on it.

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Wallace-Gazaway [2016-01-14 03:59:48 +0000 UTC]

Commenting on behalf of Project Comment:

The lighting in this piece really works to set a mood, and for the most part consistently sticks to where it seems to be coming from. I also really like how the hair flows through the fingers of the man in the picture.

If I had to pick some portions of the piece that seems somewhat off it'd be the shading of the juncture between the girls' lip and nose. It seems far too deep and awkward a shading in the crevice, especially when compared to the direction of the nose itself. The lashes also seem like they shouldn't overlap the hair but rather be under it. Same with her brows.
As for the man, he seems for the most-part fine, but the placement of his ear seems a bit high to me. Could just be me.

Beyond that though, it really is wonderfully detailed and consistent, and I really like the colors used. It knows exactly what it's intent to depict, and it does its job wonderfully and has a very warm mood to it and its story.

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13-year-old In reply to Wallace-Gazaway [2016-01-14 05:36:41 +0000 UTC]

Hello, Wallace! Thanks so much for your critique and your kind words, I really appreciate it.

You're right about the little canal between nose and mouth - it does seem to pop out when it really shouldn't be emphasized so much. I'm still practicing this realistic style of rendering, and it's been a pain so far, so any critique really helps. It's always the details that get me and after working on the same piece for a long time, you tend to become blind to all the little things.

The guy was tricky to draw, and maybe you're right about the ear - I can't really tell right now but I'm hoping to get to the point where I can look back and see what exactly is wrong with it. 

I'll definitely draw this again sometime just to compare or see my progress but I've still got a long way to go. Again, thanks so much for your time!

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Wallace-Gazaway In reply to 13-year-old [2016-01-14 19:07:48 +0000 UTC]

I get exactly where you come from about the details when it comes to realism. That's one of my main styles, mixed with fantasy of course, and I still have a great deal of problems with it. I look forward to seeing your redone version of it someday when you decide to do that.

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13-year-old In reply to Wallace-Gazaway [2016-01-15 02:42:34 +0000 UTC]

Yep, it's definitely not the easiest to master, especially when you're drawing from scratch without any concrete face and lighting references. Again, thank you so much!

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Anina606 [2016-01-13 15:31:29 +0000 UTC]

Aww its so beautiful! I love the angle, the expression and the way you painted it, pretty romantic c:

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13-year-old In reply to Anina606 [2016-01-13 15:32:29 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much! glad you like it ^^

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Anina606 In reply to 13-year-old [2016-01-13 15:54:20 +0000 UTC]

you´re welcome :happy:

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fralea [2016-01-13 06:55:17 +0000 UTC]

Wow, what a lovely and romantic image! I feel breath taken as the participants in the image look *U*

I love the lighting and atmosphere of this piece but I feel in some areas of the highlight that the skin gets a little too washed out. Mostly that bright yellow on the hand. Maybe making that colour a tiny bit more saturated or not having quite as much would help. 

The detail in the brown hair is beautiful but in the blonde hair it gets a bit busy. I would be careful with adding too many wispy strands as it draws the focus downward out of the image and away from the couple. 

I just love the colors and the blonde's gentle expression.  You did an amazing job rendering this artwork, I think it really stands out amongst the other images in your gallery.    

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13-year-old In reply to fralea [2016-01-13 14:09:33 +0000 UTC]

Hey fralea !

Thanks so much for your comment and your kind words, I really appreciate it.

I'm looking for the yellow on the hand but I can't find it *.* maybe I'm color blind But I see your point, I suppose it looks a little over-exposed. Thanks for the tip!

I totally get what you mean about the blonde hair now - I guess I got carried away and you're right, it does take away from the main point of the image I'm glad you pointed it out, I'll keep it in mind

This piece is special to me because it features two of my favorite characters, so I'm really glad you like it. Again, thanks for your time and effort!

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fralea In reply to 13-year-old [2016-01-14 02:59:05 +0000 UTC]

I guess I was thinking of the fingers under the hair, they should probably have a cast shadow from it c: The middle and ring fingers also look more whitish than yellowish like the other highlight areas, which felt off to me. Its pretty subtle though.

This image definitely made me interested in your characters and what their story is!

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13-year-old In reply to fralea [2016-01-14 05:44:03 +0000 UTC]

You're right, they should have shadows on the fingers.

Their story is actually kind of cheesy (I was 14 when my sister and I started it), so it's kind of the typical princessy/prince sort of story and I'm still trying to tweak it a bit and try to find some originality among the millions of princess/prince stories out there. It's a long work in progress but I'll definitely be uploading some more of them, since I've grown attached to them and all my other supporting characters. Gives me an idea, I guess I could put a little write-up along with the deviation to explain it.

Thank you again, you lovely netizen!

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fralea In reply to 13-year-old [2016-01-14 10:54:02 +0000 UTC]

That's a good idea, it is sometimes really nice to read a little bit of story to go with the image in the description box, as long as it isn't too long. And cliches are common for a reason... they are story elements that people enjoy! So don't feel bad if your story isn't super original, being unoriginal doesn't necessarily make something not good c:   

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13-year-old In reply to fralea [2016-01-14 11:10:52 +0000 UTC]

Aww thanks! It sounds so much better when you put it that way.

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kyrawriter [2016-01-13 02:05:20 +0000 UTC]

Interesting drawing for a thirteen year old

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13-year-old In reply to kyrawriter [2016-01-13 02:45:21 +0000 UTC]

I was 13 ten years ago this is a really old account lol sorry if it's misleading~

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kyrawriter In reply to 13-year-old [2016-01-13 03:50:27 +0000 UTC]

oh. 
Sorry.

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13-year-old In reply to kyrawriter [2016-01-13 03:51:48 +0000 UTC]

No worries

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kyrawriter In reply to 13-year-old [2016-01-13 04:25:25 +0000 UTC]

okay.

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PleaseImJustaGirl [2016-01-10 00:07:47 +0000 UTC]

 Hopeless Romantic.

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13-year-old In reply to PleaseImJustaGirl [2016-01-10 04:28:56 +0000 UTC]

Guilty as charged.

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PleaseImJustaGirl In reply to 13-year-old [2016-01-11 23:44:33 +0000 UTC]

 Me Too.

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PleaseImJustaGirl In reply to 13-year-old [2016-01-11 02:46:39 +0000 UTC]

 Oh Wait don't Stop.

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