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jusdog [2006-09-08 22:25:36 +0000 UTC]

ok, here we go...
I don't want to be the type of guy that's going to say, this is what you did good...but, blah blah blah...I'm just gonna go right in. I do want to say though, you seem to be on the right page in terms of anatomy and how things look. It's not like I'm confused as to what your trying to draw. He looks like he's in an alley and he's a warewolf, and so on and so forth.
A majority of your growth needs to take place in storytelling. Take a step back, look at this picture....what are you saying about this person that is relevant to the story that he's in? Is he in an alley? how are we proving this? that looks like a garbage can behind him, but it also kinda looks like a box or something. Normally, garbage cans have tops on them, and wheels. And they are angled a little bit so that when water gets in them, it rolls out this little hole in the bottom. You see? you have to give details like this, so that I won't have to question what it is that I'm looking at.
Then there's the camera. Your camera is one of your most important tools....maybe it's even your most important. This is how we see what we see. I know that you were trying to fill this page with the character, but your backgrounds are character's too, maybe you should've moved the camera back a little bit, and let some of those details fill us in on who this guy is. Why is he in an alley? I know the rest of the story will probably do that, but everypage is a story, and should be able to stand on it's on, at least a little bit.
Why did you cover his legs? are legs a problem area for you? I know that you know how to draw legs, but this is a question that editors would ask you.
Alright, that's it for now. I hope that all of this does not seem to harsh. I wrote it like this on purpose because that's the way editors talk and I want you to get used to this tone. I hope that you are able to get some of those books that I mentioned to you in an earlier note. They really help in these areas. So much of your style is in how you tell the story....the comic starts with the writer. He wants to see how you tell his/her story. Wathch commercials, they give good examples. They must tell a 2 minute story without going nuts. What kind of camera angles to they use? How do the backgrounds look? was that commercial memorable? This will help you in drawing, and telling stories.
I know this is alot of stuff to think about in one little picture, but this is the most important stuff. Have you ever seen Michael Turners samples that he got hired on? they were horrible. My work is way better by 1000% than his was when Top Cow hired him, but he got hired because he is a master at telling stories, and Marc Silvestri hired him because of this. I'm not saying that your style is bad, or that I'm better, but if you become a master at telling a good story, then you can learn all that other stuff in no time.

jus

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jusdog [2006-09-07 23:19:51 +0000 UTC]

I wanna give you some critiques....but I don't want to do it on work this old. I'll crit when you post your new stuff...

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