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HikyuuTera — Tainted Soul,Ever so Broken...
Published: 2006-07-12 04:54:21 +0000 UTC; Views: 251; Favourites: 6; Downloads: 20
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*~*~*~***~~****~~~**~*~*Tainted soul,Ever so broken...
~~~~~~~~******~~~~~~~~~
This soul so tainted,
Tainted beyond repair.
Yet it's fragments,
Scattered about a
Wasteland of pain,
~
Seems to slowly mend
Ever so slowly,
Slowly as time stands
Still as a stone.
Coldness sets in it's
~
Mending care,
Gluing fragments of life
Together in it's care.
This slowly mended
But broken soul,
~
Wishes for solitude
Instead of company,
Company in which
Could be tainted as well.
Amongst this wasteland,
~
This soul wanders
From place to place.
Trying to find it's place.
A place where it can finally
Mend.
~
As it wanders it's light dulls
with every ache from within.
This ache of being alone
In this world would never
Go away.
~
It's dulling light,
In a moment it seems to brighten
Then dims ever so slowly back.
The moment's gone it seems
As the soul breaks again...
~*~*~*~
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Comments: 12
There is a name for this kinda poem... gar! I can't remember the name... where you repeat lines the way you did... anyway, very dark poem... and a bit abstract... could ba about Kenshin. ^__^' or that could just be me seeing Kenshin in it. I like the rhythm of it... but it is sooooo depressing.
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I can't remember the names or types of poems that I had to learn in school xD
Been too long
I know U.Ux lol most of the things I end up doing is Kenshin related. >.>x
Kenshin never leaves my mind. xD
Thank you,
it is depressing.. *needs to write something cheerful sometime* Maybe I will soon
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It is harder to write cheerful stuff well. I hope you do though. Good luck. ^^
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It is harder xD
but when I write I tend to write what flows into my mind.. though I've been wanting to write this one poem for so long but I can't get the right words for it.
It's actually happier than this... *has the words jumbled up in her mind when she wants to type or write them out*
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I remember reading and hearing from multipule sources that when you write, there are two stages. In the first stage, you write with your heart. That is what gets your thoughts and feelings onto the paper. The second stage is to write with your brain. This is where you edit, correct, dump parts, add parts, rewrite, put in symbolism etc... In the first stage, it is harmful to write with your brain... that usually leads to writer's block. In the second stage it is harmful to edit with the heart, because you will miss crucial parts that need correcting, or you will insist on keeping parts of your writing that from the point of view of someone else are either meaningless or confusing or just plain boring.
I'm very good at the first stage, but I have a difficult time with the second stage sometimes. XD
I think that what you are putting on dA is reflective of that first stage too, even if some mistakes get in, or if it isn't written as flawlessly as one would like, one is still enchanted by the concept because it was written from the heart.
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lol I think I've heard something like that to form somewhere..
I'm not sure if it is or not cause well *has trouble listening to her heart sometimes* I end up looking at things through logic most of the time... I dunno why but maybe it has to do with my other problems.. *doesn't want to talk about that*
Any how maybe I need to work on both stages lol :shug: *ponders this*
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wow so emotional and its very well writen!! really really well writen its sad but yet very nice i like it HikyuuTera
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hehe no problem i love your work just remember let the words flow from inside of you and show it in the paper thats all i do 
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I know U.Ux maybe that's one of the reasons why I never felt the need to write poems until now. xD
*isn't one to express her feelings easily like this*
Also thank you for faving it.
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