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Adoir — Beyond This World by-nc-nd

Published: 2009-04-15 04:49:46 +0000 UTC; Views: 425; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 2
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Description Heat
Flame
Fire
Sunata emerges through unharmed
Cloaked in flesh divine
At the beginning of time

The artestry begins
Painting in colours
Ever imaginable

Creation
Birth
The construction of life
Blessed by divinity
We were forged in spirit and flesh
Masters of destiny

But darkness blinds
As most are kept in shadow
They not see the power
Slow of thought
Syphoned of all will

The kind of wrath
Those of deceit
Are fighting for control
To own the lands
To enslave us all

But honour will reign
and eyes shall be opened
The true power of shall shine upon us all
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Comments: 11

Chanteur-de-Vent [2009-10-07 08:01:28 +0000 UTC]

I really like this. The way you describe something that is supposed to be a story (prosa) making it fully poetry. That's difficult, but you succeded.

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Adoir In reply to Chanteur-de-Vent [2009-10-07 08:05:06 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, I don't know why but reading this one makes me laugh a little bit.

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Chanteur-de-Vent In reply to Adoir [2009-10-07 08:06:56 +0000 UTC]

Like not taking yourself seriously?

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Adoir In reply to Chanteur-de-Vent [2009-10-07 08:09:57 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I guess it would be that. Towards the end I think it gets a little corny.

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Chanteur-de-Vent In reply to Adoir [2009-10-07 08:13:40 +0000 UTC]

But I like the ending. It keeps the feeling of the rest. It's like not loosing the end at the end.

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Adoir In reply to Chanteur-de-Vent [2009-10-07 08:17:21 +0000 UTC]

I'm just being critical on it. I know its decent but I can't help but think it could be better.

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Chanteur-de-Vent In reply to Adoir [2009-10-07 08:19:30 +0000 UTC]

If you can, then it's complitly your right to try to do better. That's moving the artists to selfperfection, what is definitly a good thing.
But you're better now than most of the poetry-posts I've seen on DA. So take it as a compliment.

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Adoir In reply to Chanteur-de-Vent [2009-10-07 08:23:53 +0000 UTC]

Lol, I am most grateful that you would say something like that. Its not every day you get a favourite.

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Chanteur-de-Vent In reply to Adoir [2009-10-07 08:26:09 +0000 UTC]

You're most welcome. And it's not the faves that make you create, so don't worry if there are not enough yet to let you see how good you truly are.

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Adoir In reply to Chanteur-de-Vent [2009-10-07 08:28:48 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I know that. Lol, its definitely not favs that 'cause me to write.

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Chanteur-de-Vent In reply to Adoir [2009-10-07 08:33:48 +0000 UTC]

That's a very good sign. Artists must be independent of the mass.

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