Comments: 31
QyJx [2011-08-21 07:38:22 +0000 UTC]
Cute. I like the rhymes, but the meter is a bit stretched at times.
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uturn190 [2011-08-16 21:08:28 +0000 UTC]
mmmm sugar cane!
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LuckyClover38 [2011-08-14 02:36:43 +0000 UTC]
Sweet, amazing imagery, flows well. My only suggestion would be to regulate the punctuation better since you lose it a bit throughout. many poets forget this.
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SevenoceanCity [2011-08-14 02:25:53 +0000 UTC]
This is beautiful.
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facile-guise [2011-08-13 22:29:20 +0000 UTC]
:J itd probably be a candycane...not a sugarcane...rofl...
but either way...n__n xoxo
bon travail, paramour...
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FieryFurry [2011-08-12 00:47:57 +0000 UTC]
Nice.
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blaisen [2011-08-10 21:42:39 +0000 UTC]
I like it.
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leesmilezz [2011-08-10 17:14:42 +0000 UTC]
This is such a sweet poem with wonderful imagery. xD
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leesmilezz In reply to AKsroa4a [2011-08-11 01:55:07 +0000 UTC]
It calls for an xD because I am an idiot...
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AKsroa4a In reply to Auroralune [2011-08-10 19:51:18 +0000 UTC]
Yeah... I tried again because Cort said he'd written something, and I thought if he did then I should try too.
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