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BWshiro [2023-07-25 11:38:54 +0000 UTC]
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BearWalsh3D [2019-09-13 17:28:48 +0000 UTC]
One question. Why Did Kim get naked? I don't understand
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anonenffan In reply to BearWalsh3D [2019-09-21 09:07:45 +0000 UTC]
Kim is a little loopy and has her own ideas of how the universe works. In short, she thinks the Universe will protect her best and worst intrestests, so she's trying to take advantage of that.
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anonenffan In reply to EnfEtc [2018-11-12 03:11:26 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it ^_^
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PrinceBuffoon [2018-11-01 19:44:01 +0000 UTC]
Love the ending, but I almost feel like it could have been better as a surprise - her moans making it onto the recording are kind of telegraphed now. The cold open is also good, but I think if the reader isn't familiar with Kim, it might be a bit confusing - her protection from attention by undressing isn't really explained. I don't know if there's a subtle way to drop that in, but there might be! I also think another pass of editing to make the story a tad shorter might be a good idea? There are some lines I can see dropping, like "Added the cheerful woman" - it's clear from context who is speaking. Stuff like that.
Lovely read though and the way the story ramps up both tension and pacing is a lot of fun! And Kim's twist of mysterious supernatural assistance is a really fun plot element!
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anonenffan In reply to PrinceBuffoon [2018-11-01 20:34:49 +0000 UTC]
Thanks buff! I knew this was going to have a mysterious feel to it, and I wanted to make sure it didn't seem clear whether or not the Universe was really doing what Kim thought it did, or if she was just lucky.
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