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An Anatomy Lesson
Published: 2010-12-13 06:50:04 +0000 UTC; Views: 7054; Favourites: 395; Downloads: 49
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If I collected the lies I've been told I could make myself a skeleton. 206 hollow bones made of hollow words. The bigger lies are structural support, holding up the rest of me. 33 dishonest "I love yous" could be 33 intersecting vertebrae, composing my curving spine.I could gather shards of my 10 favorite broken promises to be my long, sharp finger nails. The 10 runner ups fit on the tips of my toes.
Spiderweb truths, theirs and mine, will weave my new skin. An average of 20 feet of sticky substance, easily torn and easily rewoven.
Words will circulate like blood through the 100,000 miles of my veins. Cynicism creates phagocytes, attacking all foreign bodies of hope.
2 hazel eyes are formed from memories. Green from springs come and gone. Brown from Autumns just the same. Rods and cones of years gone by interpret the way I see things now.
My heart is love, beating on and on. 72 times 24, beating, beating, beating, never stopping till death. My soul, however, is borrowed from nothing else. It is always my own.
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Cool! My first official critique. Thank you. 
About the number thing. Aestheticly I prefer to write out numbers as well. But I figured since the piece grates science against art and you never see number written out in a textbook, to leave them digitized in the piece was fitting. That was kind of my line of thought with that. But if you think detracts from the piece then I would of course change it.
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Now that you've explained it, I can see where you're coming from. In the end it's a purely aesthetic choice as you say, and your reasons for doing it make sense.
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This is brilliant, do you perform slam poetry by any chance?
You would make a wonderful slam poet!
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Thank you so much. I don't really do slam poetry. There's not really a venue anywhere around here to do that. Also it sounds terrifying.
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It isn't terrifying, honestly. It's just performing poetry, and it's often written like this piece, as opposed to page poetry.
That's sad that there's nowhere around where you live to do slam poetry, we have a shop that has a room in back where we perform every month.
And you're very welcome.
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I feel like I just left science class, haha! Great work, really.
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I hope you like science class. In all seriousness though, thanks!
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It's an interesting combination, yet a very good one.
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Wow, I like this! I love the notion of lies making up a person. Though, the heart of love looks out of place in such a hopeless, cynical, pessimistic body...but maybe that's just me.
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It is. It's very out of place.
On a lighter note though, thank you!
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wow this is legit props to you keep on writing cause this is great one of my top fave
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I'm flattered, thank you!
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As a medical student who loves to write this is breathtakingly beautiful.
Well written and well deserved DD
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Thanks! I considered being a med student but went for english instead.
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haha that's funny I was an English student who switched to medicine
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Nice! I figure that I'm still an undergraduate so if I change my mind I can always go to grad school later but at least I'll have the degree I wanted. No regrets! lol
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Oh good. I'm so glad it's not just me!
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No way, it practically writes itself.
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That was beautiful! The lungs are gorgeous I hadn't even thought about that.
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I come back to that one a lot. Do you ever feel like we're all broken record? Like, catch yourself using the same kidns of images/words? 
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Of course but I think in some ways that's alright. Those images are pieces of us. It's like having a favorite unusual word or a specific sign off phrase. They're annoying if you use them too much but to use them frequently enough that people recognize them as yours, that's like a fingerprint.
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Hmm, that's also true.
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So creative and beautiful. Really just the perfect blend.
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This is beautiful and creative, this is so original and I now want to check out all your other stuff!
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Thank you so much. My gallery is open for your perusing pleasure. Welcome!
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I've always attempted to write things like this and it never turns out. Such a creative idea.
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you think I did it properly.
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Thank you. I love it too. Science is the best.
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Wow, so fascinating <3
After my 11th grade year in HS I'll have no more sciences, math, or history to take. Just the regular English.
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Lucky! I'm in college but I'm only just wrapping up math, though admittedly I put it off forever. And I'll finish history next semester. I haven't had science in almost two years which breaks my heart. But I had psychology which involves science and I decided to hell with it all of it and I'm taking an astronomy class next semester which I'm excited about.
Thank you very much!
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Really very beautiful. ^^ I quite enjoyed reading it- the imagery it brought to me was fantastic
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Thank you! I'm glad you think so!
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