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nixenator [2005-08-29 18:01:12 +0000 UTC]
oooh i really like this one!!! it's wicked awesomtastic! i wonder if you know who this is *evil laugh*
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aoshi-shinomori- In reply to faithdivine88 [2004-10-11 18:29:02 +0000 UTC]
Woah, thanks for the very enthusiastic great comment, compliments to your imagery also, what a great comment... thanks again.
Aoshi
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mutilatedapathy [2004-04-07 06:38:04 +0000 UTC]
wow.....pretty.....and tragic....
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aoshi-shinomori- In reply to mutilatedapathy [2004-04-07 23:06:47 +0000 UTC]
Thanks, I didn't really think it was that tragic though, thanks for the comment, it's good you enjoyed it.
Aoshi
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interzonepolice [2004-04-03 17:40:46 +0000 UTC]
not horrible. too many commas though. punctuation is good, but overpunctuation is not.
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aoshi-shinomori- In reply to interzonepolice [2004-04-03 17:43:10 +0000 UTC]
Thanks for the help, I'll have to incorporate that into my next poem, I like to use commas to emphasise my writing though, if you like this I recommend another poem of mine called With me Wherever I Go.
Aoshi
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aoshi-shinomori- In reply to interzonepolice [2004-04-03 17:51:33 +0000 UTC]
I know Suture, I have read a lot of his work and he is definetely someone to help make my work a lot better, thanks for the link.
Aoshi
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Meggierocksmysox [2004-03-22 04:44:14 +0000 UTC]
good I like it gives a great visual
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chovinunfo [2004-03-21 03:47:05 +0000 UTC]
If you pin it yourself it will... MWAHAHAHA! Anyways, at least PPP will be on your side... Then again, the staff has more authority to kick your ass out of school, so... Umm... Happy Saturday Night!
Sag
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chovinunfo [2004-03-20 21:21:52 +0000 UTC]
Gee... I wonder which one... Hmm... Erm... Nope, can't decide... Post the Campion one...
FLASH FORWARD- ASSEMBLY, 2 WEEKS FROM NOW
"Will the person who goes for Aoshi Shinomori please report to Mrs. Green of myself at the end of assembly?"
Kin Ho and Saffie laugh uncontrollably...
FLASH BACK... Just back enough to the present...
Saf
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aoshi-shinomori- In reply to chovinunfo [2004-03-20 21:25:07 +0000 UTC]
Hehe, let's post the Campion poem then.
It wouldn't get put up on the board.
Aoshi
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chovinunfo [2004-03-20 21:11:54 +0000 UTC]
It's pretty nice, actually... Kinho's just a big-headed critic... Lol, just kidding... about the critic part... Anyhow, I perfectly understand what you're saying, why just last night I wason my forum posting about that with other people! Good job, and may you join our anonymous poem-postings!
Saf
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aoshi-shinomori- In reply to chovinunfo [2004-03-20 21:17:42 +0000 UTC]
Which poem should I post, this or .... Campion.
Lol
Aoshi
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kinho [2004-03-20 04:10:50 +0000 UTC]
well i think its a nice poem and idea but needs to be worked on
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aoshi-shinomori- In reply to kinho [2004-03-20 21:07:22 +0000 UTC]
Of course it needs to be worked on, it's only my second poem.
Aoshi
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AoikiHashimoto [2004-03-20 03:22:50 +0000 UTC]
Wow, beautififical! hehe new word *huggles* XOXO
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