murphyx [2003-01-07 14:03:18 +0000 UTC]

this sums up one of my greatest fears..you said so much in so few words. Really good.

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apricotpoet [2003-01-06 07:23:32 +0000 UTC]

Thanks s'much for your comment. You are Exactly right! I wrote the poem as if it were a rain drop and I am so glad that you picked up on that. It means that I achieved part of what I strove for. Very satisfying indeed. You also made me think of this poem in a new way - the whole water is life & purity- I did not even think of that when I wrote it and it is great that I can discover something new in my own poem.

Thanks for the input I appreciate it.

Tracy

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fishwife [2003-01-03 10:32:28 +0000 UTC]

This is lovely-- a really nice slant on the whole 'not just a statistic' idea. Especially with the allusions that using water brings--life, purity and so on. I love the simplicity of it- minimalism works brilliantly here. Also-and this may be me talking out of my rather large backside but bear with me- the visual symmetry of the poem's form makes me really happy. It's almost like a raindrop falling on a puddle--at first there's just a tight, clean lined raindrop, and then there's an explosion of words and sentances as the rain hits the puddle, which eventually settles into the mereset of ripples on the surface. I like, I like alot.

Linds.

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infiltrator15 [2002-12-20 11:30:07 +0000 UTC]

so little... and yet it says so much...

dont we all feel like raindrops sometimes, landing in puddles, spreading and mixing, eventually meaning nothing, losing all our potency?
it's a horrible feeling...
yes, 'may you never be a puddle.' i'll drink to that.

this is well done.

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