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Published: 2010-01-25 19:52:48 +0000 UTC; Views: 1612; Favourites: 17; Downloads: 15
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The fishermen know that the sea is dangerous and the storm terrible, but they have never found these dangers sufficient reason for remaining ashore-vincent Van GohBackground Credits:
Water And Gulls by =rockgem
No photo effects this time. I usually mess with them.
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"No more lonesome gazing at the moon any more
in your arms I have understood what my life is for
binded by something deeper longer than time
my heart is yours and yours is now mine".
So sweet!
Beautifully written!
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First of all, I really like the appearence of it. Simple and sophisticated. You were able to capture the essence of the poem and the beauty of it by just the waves and the birds. The colors, the font choice are all fantastic. I'm not familiar with your other work but I'm glad you didn't use any effects on this one. Sometimes that can take away from the poem itself.
Speaking of the poem itself, I enjoyed it. Being the picky person I am I THINK you have a typo in the third stanza "youR cared for me" It honestly doesn't matter - just something I picked up and thought I should let you know.
Just as well with the appearence, I really liked how you kept it simple. It seems to walk a very fine line between detailed and wordy but it just comes out on the right side. My favorite line would have to be in the third stanza:
"There was a danger in bracing the storm alone"
I think this really captures the love between these two people. Another favorite would have to be the last line:
"When the storm blows over we start to plant again"
Great metaphor!
I find the entire poem to be a metaphor in itself. Whether that was your intention or not I'm not sure but I seem to compare the hardships of the storm to anything that can go wrong in a relationship and the storm blowing over and "plant[ing] again" as the two people forgiving each other and starting over - proving how true their love is and how they CAN get through anything.
I feel like I'm rambling at this point so I'll stop.
Amazing job!
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*screams* You're right,what an awful typo. I'll have to make the whole thing again just to fix it ;_; Thanks for letting me know.
You interpreting it perfectly. The passing of a storm can be associated with a lot of things in life- all the things that go wrong that sometimes you just need to wait out.
Thanks for liking! I appreciate it.
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you're welcome!
sorry that you'd have to do the whole thing again
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I really like the style of this poem. It's honest and well thought out.
There were two lines that I thought could've been reworded. The first one is based more on opinion than the second.
For the line "Breaths felt numbered on my stone-cold heart": first of all, I'd like to say that this adds some nice imagery and emotion. I just thought using "for" might be less awkward than "on" (unless you're literally picturing numbers on the heart, I guess).
The line "No more lonesome gazing at the moon anymore" was elegant and expressive, but I felt there was some double negation with "no more" and anymore". A quick rewording is all that's necessary if you're up to it.
Either way, I think this poem has a very sentimental effect on the reader, and that it's well written.
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Oh yes, you're absolutely right about both points of view. But shhh...maybe no one will notice
Problem with visual lit is editing is a real pain. But thank you so for your comment, I give you cookie
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you're welcome
WAHH I LOVE COOKIES. i will nom it now
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i've been so waiting to see some works on this literature template 
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Thank you 
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Thanks! For the link as well
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I really adore this as a visual literature piece. The storm in the background (even if in the making at this point) is a beautiful way to reference the storms going on in the piece--not only physical, actual storms, but also the emotional storms I can sense lurking on the horizons of someone else's heart.
I do agree, however, that the lightning flash made your words a bit more difficult to read and decipher. However, I feel that you could keep the white/black aspect by changing those few letters/words to black text when going across the white of the background.
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The poem, in itself, is also wonderful. It reminds me of a series of pieces I have in regards to one of my characters. I can imagine that this might be echoing a "garden" of your own...the hovering, protective soul attempting to keep the blossoms (worked so hard for in the beginning of the romance) to remain standing upright and strong. I also adore the fact that this is a rhyming piece...it seems to fit PERFECTLY with the idea of a storm raging in the background, as if the thunder and the lightning are helping to accent the meter of the piece. Great work!
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Thank you
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I really like this poem--it has strong, vivid words that you feel emotion to!
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YAY visual poetry. (although if the image isn't yours, you've gotta give credit somewhere. and if you just took it off google [as opposed to a stock photo site which is meant for that sort of thing], that's a copyright no-no.)
love the title font, although the rest of it could have benefited from a black stroke to make it more legible.
wrote something a lot like this once, back in 10th grade...love the idea of breaths "feeling numbered."
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Er-- Okay, my bad. I'll start crediting from next time, or mentioning google or photobucket. My photo editor sucks, I have to learn adobe. Thanks for your comments.
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xD no problem.
most of the time it's just a good plan to use stock photo sites and skip google altogether. (turning on the graphic-design-major devil's advocate again.) google image search finds almost everything that's been posted on the web, and just because you can find it on an image search doesn't mean you're allowed to use it. an artist automatically owns whatever he/she posts to the web (hence why if anyone took your writing off this site it'd be illegal), and some of them get annoyed really easily. free stock photo sites or providers (there's a lot on dA!) are just safer.
adobe photoshop can be scary at first, but if you poke around it enough, it'll start to make sense. (I teach Photoshop over the summer at a local school, so if you have any questions, drop me a note!)
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Hahaha yeah you're right
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just downloaded a trial of CS4 and it's making me want to bang my head on the desk...oh computers, why must you be so temperamental? xD
I'll figure it out eventually, but sometimes it feels like these things were designed to frustrate us skill-impaired mortals.
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Your teaching it. You ought to be a professional. *shrugs* Everything makes want to bang my head on a desk... even filing my nails.
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xD
I own CS2 and taught on CS3 last year; this CS4 business is all new to me. it's just the cameraRAW functionality that's crapping out on me...-pokes it-
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CS2 CS3... CS4.... They're all CS to me
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programming? sweet. that's what my dad does for a living. see, that stuff makes no sense to me: I tried to learn it once and got dizzy.
annnnd I just fixed my photoshop. huzzah!
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It's very easy, once you get past the dizziness. I think I'll keep track of you, so I can bother you for help.
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I REALLY like this, a LOT
And it does have a meaning, I would say, that this seems quite obviously to be a poem about love, the lightening being everything to try to put you down, but when the other came,
he (its easier to say he than the other) made the suffering easier,
he made it seem as though the storm was nothing but a light drizzle,
He made everything better.
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Thank you
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^-^
Well, you don't HAVE to, but you'll look like a....bad person if you don't XD
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Bleh... doubt anyone wouuld notice XD
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XD
Fine BE a bad person!!
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WEll, you said it just then, and before then...
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Yes it has... to me at least.
And I think it's quite clear from the poem itself.
However, white font on a black/white background is a bit painful to read at times, third stanza in particular...
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Flash of lightning in the background-I didn't notice that before. It's blinding!! Thanks alot
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