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Artemisumi — Parterre's Kiss
Published: 2009-05-20 15:34:44 +0000 UTC; Views: 13968; Favourites: 698; Downloads: 899
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Fan Art game Visual Novel that I have involve in development...Official Website
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I noticed you're requesting critique on this, and it's a good thing too, because this has a lot of errors.
The first thing I noticed is there's no consistent light source. Their eyes have no depth, they look like they could be floating an inch off their faces for all we know. For the most part, their eyes tend to not be aligned properly, too. (One eye being lower or crooked, that kind of thing.) Their hair isn't affected by gravity or their hair clips like normal hair would be. The girl on the far left's body is twisting in a different direction than her shoulders completely. The pink girl has no neck and is missing half of her thighs. It seems you abandoned the idea of a skeletal structure for the brunet in the middle left of the image, as far as I can tell by her shape, she has no rib-cage or pelvis. You seem to have completely forgotten about the blue haired girl's right arm, the one with a collar bone growing out of it, as it disappears into nothingness behind her breast. And oh boy the breasts. Boobs have weight and substance, and they effect fabric and vice versa. The elastic of a bathing suit top would kind of squish a boob, especially if it was uncomfortably popping out of the bottom like the girl on the far right.
I heavily recommend you study up on your anatomy and color theory.
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Love the idea of hot and sexy women in a visual novel, would love an update on this.
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This project has been freezing
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Do u mean u haven't been working on it???
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This's not anime,It's Visual novel game.
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Visual novel game ? like psx games or ?
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PC...but in the production process.
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so what is about ?? action ? fight ? or ?? something else...
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They all look so sexy and beautiful! 83 ...I wish they were staring at me like that 
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looks sweet what kind of bikini babe game is it
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very impressiv..i jst sooo wanna glomp the one with the darkest hair and midnight blu eyes lol XD
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Ok, I just love all the bikinis. All the designs are nice. Simple, but sweet. Group picture, poses great. I just love this picture. If anything I might love summer pictures being 1 of the best seasons for themes. That or winter since I love how design-y you can be with coats and scarfs and stuff... +fav
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Thanks for the pithy comment
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Yum yum! Those are some gorgeous girls. Can I have the one with the blue hair? She's sooo sexy
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WHERE THE HELL AM I? CAN'T BE IN HELL CAUSE I SEES ANIME FAERY BABES EVERYWHERE....AFTER THAT DAMN FIREFIRE IN ISLAMAASS; I PICKED UP A DAMN RUSSIAN GRENADE A THROUGH IT THROUGH A MOSQUE. THERE AINT NONE OF THE BASTARDS LEFT; WHICH IS A GOOD THING. NOW, TO BURN IT TA HELL!! GRABS GERMAN FULLY AUTOMATIC MP44, STALIGRATENS, PANZERSCHRECKS, PORTABLE 88MM FLAK GUN AND GETS MOVIN!!
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Calm down...This's Visual Novel Game not Real Time Strategy or First-Person Shooting
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Looks good. Very nicely done.
Any chance we can read the game site in English?
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hopeless...
But I will bring to Webmaster for consider it...
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I really like the eyes and hair,I don't mean to effend anyone but usually male manga fans tend to work a lot with the body and draw the rest quit simple
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Fanart charecter from game "Parterre's Kiss"
the Visual Novel game that I can't tell when it will complete
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Aouuuuuwwwwww x)
They're hot and gorgeous ! Nice drawing and colors !
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It's have two pink haired, So did you mean left one or right one?
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My pleasure! Keep up the good work!
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welcome,^^you are truely talented.^^
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