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Published: 2006-10-01 20:06:20 +0000 UTC; Views: 107; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 1
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Description sniffling like mad, inhale, inhale, inhale
sigh.
crick in my neck, like nails in some clay, alarming the minds eye
peeling away at the cold edges, fraying
missing wishing longing
a dare unsaid
words on my lips, wanting to spill out like water from a cup,
sploshing sloshing flowing forth, forward, toward
next to that one thought...dripping all over, soaking and drowning until the deed isn't as it once was
mistakes.
regrets.
shit.
walkin along that railroad tonight, moonlight seepin into flesh, lukewarm, hands cold, face warm, blushing at the thought of that one moment..repeating
recycling, returning flustered and flushed.
sigh. walking, slowing down to find that patch of grass to sleep.
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Comments: 6

iceangelally [2006-10-18 02:51:39 +0000 UTC]

Dude, I love how you have freedom with your lines. I think it works wonderful like that, I personally cannot fragment my poems, I'm just not creative like that.

Love it!

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iceangelally [2006-10-18 02:51:38 +0000 UTC]

Dude, I love how you have freedom with your lines. I think it works wonderful like that, I personally cannot fragment my poems, I'm just not creative like that.

Love it!

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aminusy [2006-10-01 23:21:10 +0000 UTC]

ooo...sorry for the double post...

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aminusy [2006-10-01 23:20:15 +0000 UTC]

OOOOO...you capture the way the human mind works so well!!!!...I'm jealous...*favs*

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aminusy [2006-10-01 23:20:02 +0000 UTC]

OOOOO...you capture the way th human mind works so well!!!!...I'm jealous...*favs*

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artismylover In reply to aminusy [2006-10-03 03:36:15 +0000 UTC]

aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah. thank you. i really like this poem now that i read it later on. at first, it just came out, sort fragmented, and in pieces, and i just strung it all together. then someone told me it was too fragmented and jumpy, but i like it that way ive decided.

however, i am not sure this is the way the human mind works, maybe mine, but not everyone

p.s. the fav is MUCH appreciated. goodness ^_^

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