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Some of this looks a little rubbish. I've spent SO many hours on this and I have 2-3 weeks of college left, so I cant spend too much time on these details, I have more paintings to complete and more stuff to do and tbh, i'm so fed up of working on this, I dont want to do anymore!meh, I do wish it looked a little smoother though.
If you can give useful constructive Critique I would be grateful. Don't tell me that the faun's skin looks too shiny, or that the plants look choppy or something, tell me how I can fix that. I'm well aware that things don't look right.
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I don't know what your talking about. The plants look very realistic. Every thing looks awesome.
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This is beautiful!
I adore this style, its just incredible!!!
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aah, this turned out so nice! C:
i really love the skintones and the left hand *__* i just love it when things aren't so detailed and still look so good. * U *
also great atmosphere. <3
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Weell, the one thing that doesn't look right to me is the shininess of the stairs and leaves. I know you wanted to make them look wet, but they wouldn't shine like that as long as it's still raining (so it's overcast). Tone it down a little, maybe with some desaturated blue?
I love the mood 
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I would give tips, but honestly, I see nothing wrong. So I'll spare you my rambling and just say "terrific work".
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I love this one. all in it's whole even if you disagree. It's very mysterious makes you ask questions like who is the Faun where do those gates go too, is the tree his home? I did however have a question about the Harp, are those strings coming out of the top connecting to the tree?
If you want some crit I can offer some even though it's minuet and would only further enhance the wonderful piece before me,... I feel the faun doesn't have much attention in this, I understand he's in the center, but he just melts into the scenery rather than the main focus, perhaps sharpening his outline a bit where needed like shoulder and his feet where his skin actually doesn't touch the tree or ground. the background is fantastic, all the way to the silhouette of the trees on the white sky, You always give the illusion of perspective and define the shrubbery at the base of the steps and around the flawless gate to give that illusion. I love this though all n all with or without the changes if you ever attempt to change or alter this. You're wonderful.
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the strings are coming out the top and bound to the tree. I kind of wanted the faun's position there, playing the harp to look quite permenant, as if he was forced to sit there and play and couldn't do much else.
Ah, the thing is wiht the faun, which is quite tricky really, is that I didn't want him to be the main point of focus. However I don't really have one now I've tried to make him dissapear somewhat. I mostly focused on trying to get an atmosphere here, but it left the technical parts of the picture all messed up. I dont generally like how my people/people-like creatures look so.. i suppose that made me want to have him not stand out so much, but ideally, he should have been the main point of focus in the picture, as it's also where the branches, steps and lines in the gate direct your eyes to.
Thankyou ever so much! I doubt i'll add/change this, i've spent so long on it and cant bare to touch it again, but i'll keep the advice in mind and use it on succeeding pictures. =]
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I'm no good with critiques seeing as I don't have much artistic skill myself...
But I can say that the detail in this is amazing. Really, it's amazing. Particularly on the bark of the tree, and the plants in the background; I can definitely see that this took a hell of a long time.
And also looking again, I notice a lot more detail! It takes more than one look to appreciate this!
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I'm glad it keeps your attention going for longer than a glance
Thankyou for the comment, critique or not =]
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anyway, I just thing the gesture and seating arrangement and where the first step starts and the tree trunk ends are the only things i would critique. Besides all that, this is really quite beautiful
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Thankyou
Your critique was useful!
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I'm glad! XD I really do try to look and think critically at illustration
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I love it. The overall composition and concept is very beautiful. Criticism: The fawn's outsteched leg produces a bit of an awkward gesture. I don't know if you have already or not but try looking up pictures of goat or ram legs and perhaps approach the gesture differently? The reason why I feel it is awkward is because you also can't quite tell where the tree trunk ends and where the stairs begin. I'm not sure if there is some form of information there my eyes arent picking up or what but to fix this I say that you should get rid of the bark texture on the far left that looks like its on the first step? I'm not sure how to describe its location, hopefully you pick up on what i'm referring to. Perhaps also make his seat a little more apparrent as well. i cant tell what exactly the platform he's sitting on looks like or what it is that is coming out of the tree. Perhaps adding a little more darker values around his thigh might help? Sorry if this sounds vague xD; its trial and error in the brain @@
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it is a bit awkward hmm.. I assume I originally intended for it to be a sort of outstretched human leg with goat qualities, yet it looks sort of misplaced. yea that area is kind of a mix of step being built onto tree.. and the seat being made of tree... things kinda.. blending into one another.
Thankyou!
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mhm, totally makes sense. It looks great to me to be honest but I knew you were looking for a critique so i tried hard to find something to nitpick 
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I actually love this, I can't see a single bit I think is 'rubbish'. So much beautiful detail
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i wish i could say something more constructive, but all i can say is - This is amazing!
you have done a tremenduos work here
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Don't worry about it, thankyou =]
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Dear Goddess. This is so beautiful! I love the detail you've placed into the trees and bushes; it's so realistic and beautiful. However, what strikes me most is probably the lighting and the rain; it just gives the image so much heart and love. It honestly looks magical.
The only critique I'll give is on the bush closest to the gates; maybe make it a little less bright by using the same technique as you've done with the one near the fawn. Distinguish the shadows just a little bit more could be a possible improvement!
But other that that, I personally think it's fantastic; perfect. I adore the steps so much, especially where the stone has worn away. Keep it up, Tai!
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Thankyou ever so much. The one near the faun is a little soft in my opinion and the other is too choppy, I need a happy medium!
I think the worn away steps may be my favourite bit =]
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The steps are indeed amazing <3.
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This is absolutely breathtaking! Such detail in everything such as the water running down the steps or the webs hanging from the harp and the fawn. Such a sad feeling yet beautiful scene.
Good luck on your college finals!
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Thankyou ever so much for the comment and the good luck, haha <3
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The most critique I can give is that because you have a background with such sharp edges and contrasts, the faun is kind of lost since it has very earthy tones and not much contrast in comparison. I don't know if it was intentional for him to blend in with the enviorment, but a few sharper details on the faun would've made it stand out more. As it is now it's a bit hard to know where to look, which isn't necessarily a horrible thing.
I love it in general. It's amazing. <3
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I agree, there's no definate place to look, it's all a little confusing. The faun was intended to blend into the environment, but originally through having bits of bark and stuff attached to him, now it seems a bit half way.
Thankyou so much =]
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You're welcome! And I don't blame you for being tired with working on one piece for very very long, eventually you turn "blind" and get all @_@.
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Yea, I think that happened here, spent far too long on it and just lost the intention i had for the picture. I ended up drawing details on it for the sake of them being there, rather than focusing on the whole picture and how it was meant to look and things.
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Totally understand.
Sometimes it's good to take a small break from a piece, work on something else or just relax your "creativity muscles", then you can get a fresh perspective on it when you pick it up again.
I still love this piece.
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Yes indeed, I totally agree!
And thankyou! Even though I still dislike it, haha!
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Glad you do
And shush you, it's awesome. XD
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GUH! You scare me with your constant awesomeness! It has such a lovely atmosphere to it in that it seems warm even though it's raining. I'm totally digging the trees in the background too, for some reason, I really like the way you've made them slightly blurred. Also those steps are made of love, the light shining on them just seems so inviting! I honestly think this is my favourite of your pictures, it makes me a little sleepy. Although that could just be the cold talking....
It's so hard to think of any critique, the only thing I could even begin to think of as possibly a slight thing would be, as Tania said, the red between the fingers on the faun would have just made them a little more distinguishablebleble...(I have no idea how to spell that.)
But thats like the only thing i can see D: D: DONT HATE IT WOMAN. I love it!
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Nawww, I'm glad it has atmosphere! This is kind of the result of my whole 'atmosphere' project haha!
haha I kinda wanted to avoid attention on the hands. They were the LAST thing I drew and really couldn't be bothered with, haha. I'm glad to hear all this from you, even though I guess i've looked at this far too much to appreciate it at all. As you said, we are our worst critics, too. But hey! One more picture is one more step in improving.
I hope you're feeling better =[
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I actually really like the choppy plants. I like the rain alot too and the overal composition. I think darker shades on the undersides of the branches and on the left of the trunk would help with making the tree less flat. I think a little red between the fingers on the faun would have served as extra interesting detail. Overall you've got a good execution of depth and I really like the varied marks you've used for the rain D:
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Hehe i tried to not draw attention to the faun's hands, they were the last things I drew and really couldn't be bothered with. XD
You like the choppy plants? *looks again at the choppy plants* I assume you mean the ones in the light?
The goldeny-red ones at the back look really flat to me =[
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Noo, xD the golden and red ones at the back are actually my favourite. All the plants look fine. I think it's just mainly the tree trunk that needs to look less choppy, which could be achieved by more blurred shading.
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Really? hmm I dunno about the tree looking less choppy, but certainly more 3D.. it really is flat.
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Unfortunatley I can't offer any critque or constructive critisism, because who am I to judge art? I would have no bloody idea what I'm talking about!
But I must say I love this work. Thought provoking.
You also can't go wrong with a harp. XD;
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Haha, fair enough. =]
Thanks for that though.
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No prob dudette!
Did I mention I love the way you've drawn the rain?
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awh, I like the rain too, but rain is easy haha
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