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Published: 2007-09-27 03:55:02 +0000 UTC; Views: 3268; Favourites: 37; Downloads: 59
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Well, as always give me your advices ^__^I'm little confused about last panel - I'm not sure, I said it right.
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I aree with Xahras
and omg XDDD hahaha "now please! Lie (not lay ;3 it's past tense) my angel!" he says and throws her onto the bed XDD
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LOL! I was thinking "Isn't it 'lie'?"
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I think the last panel should say, "After kissing a guy, death doesn't look so scary." What you wrote technically works grammatically but using present tense flows better.
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rofl that is the greatest thing I've heard, that last line X3
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My translations (I know, it gets old):
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1: OK
2: OK
4: OK
5: "What is this? Waterskin?"
7: "Prepare to die, Altan-Dashi!"
8: OK
9: "After kissing a guy, death doesn't look so scary!"
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Great job! And I can't wait to see what happens next!
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Foreplay, Altan, foreplay! "Great pleasure" my ass...
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Ah, men always forget about foreplay...
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Foreplay is a must, always.
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Is that 'women' a dude? O_o I totally didn't notice it if she is a he.... Still a fragging awesome comic, though. xD
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Hehehe, thanks ^__^
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i love altan's personality. such a smartass. :]
and about the last panel, at first i read it "after kissing a guy" instead of "after i kissed a guy". the way you have it makes it seem like he's telling someone the story, instead of living it.
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That last panal is PRICELESS. Actually, not much wrong with this, at least that I can see. Good job!
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All the mistakes were already pointed out.
I like the mix of humor and action this page has.
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I don't think West K was entirly right. He could say 'What is it' if he thought out loud and didn't recognize the object at first.
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A better line might be: "I will show you great pleasure"
Also: "What is this? A waterskin?"
"Are you ready to die, Altan-Dashi?"
And "After kissing a guy, death doesn't look so scary."
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I thought what he said in the last panel was pretty funny. Great art as usual.
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aww come on kissing a guy isnt that bad....you know you like it...lol
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I guess, you'll like my next comic - it will be drawn by me, but script will be written by more professional writer.
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you said it right, I'm sure. It's amazing as always.
Only one that I can see that's messed up is the middle one, middle row. "What is it?"
I think it should be, "What is this!?"
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