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BCRich40 β Improving Skills - Part 15
Published: 2012-10-09 19:33:45 +0000 UTC; Views: 39784; Favourites: 354; Downloads: 494
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And it's finally here!I have really mixed feelings about this comic. It feels like I have taken a step backwards, but in the other hand, I can see the improvement in so many levels. So if you can't see any improvement in this comic, I swear it's still there! It's just not visual.
The last panel was pain in the ass. I basically had to create Twilight out of nothing, because the sketch sucked so much. There's some annoying minor flaws, but nothing too serious.
I have nothing else to say about this part. There's nothing special, but it's needed to carry the plot forward. Next part won't be a long one either, but I'll write a journal entry about that during next few days. I believe there will be some major changes.
And if you would be so kind, could you point out any grammar mistakes you can find from the comic? That would help to improve my English skills, and it would make reading more comfortable. Thanks!
Enjoy!
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yep, Twilight is cute when she is sleeping. actually, i think most ponies r cute when they sleep. except for my OC, since, well, noopny has ever seen him asleep, and only a hoof full have seen him at all.
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ITs not cute...
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ThatΒ΄s what you say.
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Well its true.
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I never said she looks cute when sleeping like she does in the last panel of this page, did I?
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uhh. In the f-first sentence you did.
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I just said she looked cute when sleeping. I never said she looked always cute when sleeping, or that she looked cute sleeping like this.
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...*Grumbles*
Atleast thats one not going crazy ove rme sleeping.
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Still why go crazy over me sleeping. ITs only sleeping
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Well, if it looks cute, then itΒ΄s cute sleeping. And I donΒ΄t go crazy over people sleeping. IΒ΄ve got enough trouble with me not sleeping...
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But at least I have some ways to spend my time when I canΒ΄t sleep, so the time is not completely wasted...
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Seriously, I hate wasting time. If I canΒ΄t do anything usefull, IΒ΄m pretty stressed out and stuff. Many people tell me to relax, lay back and let things happen without me for a while, but itΒ΄s actually this relaxation that stresses me.
Probably the reason for my insomnia: When I sleep, I canΒ΄t do other stuff, so my subconscious tries to not sleep.
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Same with me. when every i dont have anything to do. I go crazy.
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Sucks, right?
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Yea. when i have nothing to work or be responiable for i go nuts.
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What does he looks like when he's asleep?
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he usually turns invisible or uses an illusion spell to look like a pillow, but sometimes he just looks like a sleeping pony.
also, whatever u do: never ask him to tell a ghost story.
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Never? Why? Does he have some PTSD-like problems with ghosts?
I presume more can be read about him in your gallery, right?
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nope, there is nothing about him in my gallery. also, he doesnt have problems with ghosts, but he sort of causes problems with ghosts. u see, his special talent is casting illusion spells, which he can do pretty well, and he sometimes works as spy, or makes a house appear haunted so it can be bought by the guy who told him to make it appear haunted. but when he tells a ghost story, they end up similar to Beyond Belief: Fact or Fiction. u cant tell if they are true, and he doesnt like to reveal this information.
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There's a very good reason why they would look at the sky when addressing someone they can't see: They assume that person is not underground.
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please let this comic go on forever "squee"Β Β Β
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Now that I think about it, have we ever seen how Twilight is when she is sleeping in the series?(I mean, does she move around a lot,Β kick her sheet of in her sleep, or wrap herself around it like a tortilla?)
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I love how Twilight sleeps in this strip, it's both halarious and adorable.Β
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Panel 3: bucket appears* Panel 4: *twilight pukes* Panel 5 & 6: * twilight dripping with it.../ bucket disappears* So... the creator has the bucket emptied after that, right...? ^^ LoL
Gorgeous story and improved art in the meantime, truly a joy to read this kinda stuff. Best comic i've seen so far. Unexpected turns and lots of funny moments. Love it /)
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Poor thing, I just wanna hug her! (After her nap of course.)
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And she takes her bath, and teeth. Right?
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Ooh yeah, That too.
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Mister creator is so nice giving Twilight that bucket.
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I was thinking on that and it leads me to believe that he can read minds lol.
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I was eating when I witnessed twilight throwing up.
Hey creator, can I have a bucket?
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Really awesome comics. But does it have the end??
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Why did twilight think it was a good idea to get drunk in the first place?
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it was only to show Dashie what happened when she was under a cider influence
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Not the best way to show her.
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maybe but its not really that far out of character, there have been moments where she's acted silly in the show.
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There's acting out/insanity, but in the US (or a lot of not-entirely liberal countries), its quite different to be drunk. Let's put it like this: ethanol (the thing that makes potato juice whiskey) is the oldest psychoactive drug known to man.Β
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yeah of course, however you have to remember that this comic could need to cater for more than one culture without being offensive.
so using the term cider not only relates to both worlds (equestria and earth) but it also helps to clear up that he is starting to reveal that
the current characters are indeed in a world that their not familiar with.
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Yes, it's cider, but it IS alcohol. And that alcohol has caused arousal in Rainbow Dash, making the worst character start hitting on the third best character and earning a spot on the short bus.
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