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BCRich40 — Improving Skills - Part 23
Published: 2013-07-25 20:24:02 +0000 UTC; Views: 40739; Favourites: 286; Downloads: 478
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It took a little longer this time, but it's finally here! A bit more serious part this time.I have really mixed feelings about this part. There's one panel which has just about everything wrong, but otherwise this comic looks quite good. Don't get me wrong! I can still see some minor mistakes in it, but they aren't half as bad as they normally are. You can point out any visual errors if you want to, but it's pretty pointless, since I'm aware of most of them already. So the comic is visually quite okay, but the dialogue is... eh... pretty horrible actually. I had some problems with converting my thoughts into words. It wasn't the first time, and it probably won't be the last either... Better luck next time.
Big thanks to my pre-reader, !
Enjoy!
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So many feelings... so much cuteness! I'm so confused!
Not much else to say beyond that I'm noticing your pacing and dialogue become much more natural. I suppose such an emotional page forces one to watch their step, and I say you handled it near perfectly. The joke at the end doesn't even feel out of place.
Bravo. Bravo!
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We can only see three hooves, WE CAN ONLY SEE THREE HOOVES!!!!
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The other hoof is under my right one.
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Uh....whats that on Lyra's tail?In panel 16.....
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nothing just turn usually displays in comics (She turned to the other side) I'm sorry for bad english
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That thingy? Oh, you see on Panel 15 she was facing the other way? Yeah, that's the turning cycle :3
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Twilight seems to fall asleep much more often than the other two combined.
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Magic can take the energy out of you.
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Woah woah woah! Did Lyra somehow just manage to vanish behind Dash?
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Dash is really a portal in disguise
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UMM.......
be careful what you wish for, dash!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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erm ...well dash that depeneds if u like being a book about........stuff...like..um...erm.......haying.....yes haying....
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"I wish I was that book"
Me
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D'awww, sweepy Twily, and Dash wants to be her book!
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You've added alot of depth to these characters. I'm really enjoying this.
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This is slowly becoming some kind of soap-opera awkward romance thing. Can we go back and revisit the adventure aspect? Because I'm starting to feel like that one guy from the Office. www.youtube.com/watch?v=umDr0m…
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Oh, Dashie, you have no idea.
Still, you'll be in her dreams, I bet. That ought to help force her to admit her feelings.
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that last panel... soo.. sad and funny at the same time, heh.
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You´re really improving your skillz.
Great job!
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this is turning out amazing, i love it how in the story both twiligth and rainbow dash start to think if the other is rigth for them, it has a really good story line to it, great grafics and lots of funny parts in it, keep up the amazing work, and also when will the next page be out and when do u think that both twiligth and rainbow will relize that they like each other, or even that?
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I'm not sure when the next part will be out, because there has been a lot of delays lately. Also, the part 24 will be a bit longer than the last three comics, so I have some extra work to do. Let's just say that it will be ready in 10 days, since I want to get it ready before my birthday. I don't promise anything though.
To your second question... Well, I'd rather not tell you anything about it, but you'll probably get your answer after a year or so. I hope you are patient.
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A YEAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ok that kool, LAWL cant wait for the next one!
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If you need critic, I'd say that the eyelashes are little too long. Shorten them a bit and they look "natural", you can take a look at some episode if you don't get my point
Altogether, I never read virtual comics. Never. But somepony here has changed that fact, damn you >
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Ripset ovat "liian pitkät", koska minä haluan niiden olevan pitkät. Se on vain minun tapani piirtää. Lopetin myös mallin ottamisen sarjasta joskus sarjakuvani 15. osan jälkeen, jotta saisin luotua itselleni persoonallisemman piirrostyylin.
Niin, ja tervetuloa Internet-sarjakuvien maailmaan!
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MORE!
MAKE MORE!
I'M RWADING SINCE PART 1!!
SINCE PART 1!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I GET IT NOW!!!!! WHEN TWILIGHT WAS READING THAT BOOK AND THEN LOOK RIGHT AT RAINBOW DASH, IT MUST HAVE BEEN TALKING ABOUT POSSIBLY THEM TWO TOGETHER. if not than im stumped
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God I remember that episode.
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love this comic cant wait for more i need more
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I would recommend grass "crawling" over the mat, nature is not strait and if you to put anything down some blades would bend back over it. carry on the good work (even if it is a little too "shippy" for my posonal tastes at times)
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At least it's not FlutterDash.Hate that shipping,mainly because I hate RD.
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Asshole. Nobody cares about your trash opinion.
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