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benr1989 In reply to notrust [2004-01-27 05:03:57 +0000 UTC]
yes me too
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DeathbyFire [2004-01-26 20:01:41 +0000 UTC]
This is very interesting. The poems are almost like the poem "Anyone lived in a pretty how town" (think that's it) that u showed me. They can be interpreted as if you are talking about God and/or religion betraying you, or someone else, like a significant person in your life.
Well I like the first one more though, as you said, it seems to stray off from its "purpose" but the ending of the first one has more imagery in the end and I just seem to like it more.
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benr1989 [2004-01-26 10:01:27 +0000 UTC]
im a dumbass, the second variation i posted wasnt right, forgot the ending lol,,, fixed it now
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bitchinblack [2004-01-26 07:07:14 +0000 UTC]
I feel that in both, there was too much emphasis on the other person, and not on the speaker. Because in essence, poems like these are about you. But all in all, they are both good.
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benr1989 In reply to bitchinblack [2004-01-26 10:02:57 +0000 UTC]
yeah i know wat u mean, also a huge purpose of this poem [perhaps even more than the obvious one of betrayal] is its one of them anti-religion poems. Not that i have anything against religion, but as Anton Lavey once said, religion isn't what brings closure to one
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