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bezzalair — DC: Chapter 9 pg. 319
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There's going to be more explaining than action in this chapter.Death Chicken Pages: bezzalair.deviantart.com/galle…
Death Chicken is (C) to me (Caylee) and Lyssa dumbsquared (my editor).
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Too late for the world to regret the countless amount of chickens they just dumped into DFC!
I think for the third panel with Patch's shocked face, you don't really need the "Huh?! (yes I think having the exclamation mark would seem appropriate with the question mark)" in there. The face itself shows enough of the meaning/surprised state of emotion like a "show, don't tell" thing. If you wanted to fill up the negative space, then just pull up the "background gradient" a little further in/towards the top right corner so the gray/black hits/fills the area. Otherwise, just making the dialogue into an actual speech bubble seems better for consistency reasons.
Just to clarify, is Hester's facial expression angry or concerned in the second to last panel? It looks like sort of angry (scrunched up wrinkles in forehead, clenching teeth, etc.), but I wasn't entirely sure. Probably just me though.
REALLY nicely done page though! The fifth panel is arguably not as good as the other panels in leading the eye through the page. However, the lighting for the third, fourth, and last two panels are executed really well. The "scene" paces out very smoothly between the panels and just the overall execution just feels aesthetically enticing to look at (panel variety, technical executions, etc.)
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Haha,
I did an edit to what you've mentioned about the "huh?"
That's an angry face on Hester.
Hmm, your right about the 5th panel. I need to remember to make an easy-flow for the reader's eye... hmmm! Next time I suppose!
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That lack of a nose in the last panel, wow. It is amazing how much a nose influences a character's face.
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This is quite an interesting turn of events. I've been wondering for a while now how the human world and the chicken world relate. Thank you for finally clearing that up. That was a good plot point to finally make, and I do believe with proper timing as well.
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I'm going to do a lot more explaining in this chapter about what's going on in the human world.
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That is exciting! I'm very interested in seeing some world building.
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BUT THERE IS HOPE! Oh my lord, if I wasn't surrounded by people I would have died laughing. That's beautiful. Absolutely beautiful.
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haha, quoting the speech bubbles does sound much sillier when said out loud. xD
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Can you imagine some news reporter saying this? I could hear this wonderfully over-the-top voice saying that with this little point into the air and a raise eyebrow pose of awesome, like, I HAVE JUST SOLVED ALL OF YOUR PROBLEMS 
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Uh oh...now they know where to find the remaining chickens...
I really love the expression in the last panel though XD
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Haha, yeah. His face changes a lot without his nose there. xD
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For every action, there is an equal and positive reaction...and I think these guys are just realizing that.
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Indeed. I wonder how this will turn out for them.
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