NeoCriMs0n [2010-03-12 05:27:24 +0000 UTC]
Can I add some Critiques, too? Just like when I add comments in your Fanarts.
Of course, this is not to insult your Original Character, it is to avoid your Original Character being a Mary Sue. People hate Mary Sues.
And I don't want your Original Character to be hated, of couse.
Mary Sue = Perfect Original Characters with no Flaws and Negative Qualities. These Characters often have Dramatic Back Stories, other Characters are all overwhelmed with his/her Qualities. Even Villain Characters that are Evil are overwhelmed with him/her. If any Character doesn't love him/her, that Character gets an extremely bad Portrayal.
A Good Character's Key is that you pick Character Traits that will make people have different opinions of him, be it hated or loved(Just like Ky Kiske and Jin Kisaragi, not everyone loves them).
Don't put all the traits, positive or negative it may be, just so your Original Character will be "Cool"
People hate those, and will not appreciate those kinds of Characters.
Have balance; there are characteristics that should make him (examples) deep, awesome, conflicting, fitting for his role, funny, etc etc- Not all for the sake of being the idealized character you want or else he will become a Mary Sue.
I'll list the Negative Qualities of my Original Character("Seia Konigawa") for you, as an example.
- Seia has a Naive Attitude. In fact, Seia doesn't even know the True Nature of the Outside World, and how truly Harsh it is. Because, he had put Fascination on his mind first.
And Seia's Funny Attitude!
- Seia goes Crazy/Psycho if he can't drink atleast 3 Cups of Tea in a Day! XD
See? My Original Character has flaws too! Because, perfection is absolutely impossible. It's not all about being awesome.
thought me all of this.
To summarize it all, I think you should revise your Character and make him more well rounded and deep.
I hope my Critique managed to help you, and remember that I don't like your Original Character to be hated. So I'm giving you a very friendly, but honest Critique.
Remember, everyone hates Mary Sue Characters. So, do your best to avoid your Original Character becoming one.
If you have any Questions, or if you need more Advices, you can consult me anytime!!
With that said, God Bless and Good Luck!
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