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Blueskye27 β€” wither
Published: 2010-01-04 03:44:32 +0000 UTC; Views: 461; Favourites: 19; Downloads: 3
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Description time has no stake
in the reality of now

(and now is
Β Β all we have)

years can pass
in moments

(like when you
said goodbye)

in seconds,
I changed

(from a soft-skinned
smiling girl)

into an old crone
with a shriveled

heart
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Comments: 37

haijinik [2010-08-17 17:41:41 +0000 UTC]

terse and expansive, all in one go.

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PrettyCrazy [2010-02-05 10:42:58 +0000 UTC]

As we all do...

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Miarath [2010-01-19 20:01:06 +0000 UTC]

Beautifully done.

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spoems [2010-01-14 05:20:19 +0000 UTC]

sad and terrible and beautiful.

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TwistedAlyx [2010-01-10 02:42:44 +0000 UTC]

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Blueskye27 In reply to TwistedAlyx [2010-01-10 15:27:32 +0000 UTC]

Thanks.

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TwistedAlyx In reply to Blueskye27 [2010-01-10 15:33:32 +0000 UTC]

Welcome.

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TwistedAlyx In reply to Blueskye27 [2010-01-10 15:33:27 +0000 UTC]

Welcome.

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b1gfan [2010-01-10 00:14:44 +0000 UTC]

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Blueskye27 In reply to b1gfan [2010-01-10 01:37:29 +0000 UTC]

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PeterTBexley [2010-01-05 20:41:41 +0000 UTC]

Poised and mature yet aching

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Blueskye27 In reply to PeterTBexley [2010-01-06 01:41:10 +0000 UTC]

Peter! I haven't seen you in a long time. How are you? How's Ben?

Thanks for the lovely comment.

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PeterTBexley In reply to Blueskye27 [2010-01-06 07:57:11 +0000 UTC]

Hi Cindy - yes, had a bit of a break - decided dA is still the bees knees.

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yohkai [2010-01-05 12:07:35 +0000 UTC]

"years can pass in moments"

Yet some slip through our grasps in seconds. Very thought provoking.

Excellent piece Cindy!

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Blueskye27 In reply to yohkai [2010-01-06 01:41:22 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, Miles.

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frazzled-mage [2010-01-05 04:17:17 +0000 UTC]

So I thought i would leave the parenthetical phrases out the third time i read the piece. What a stark contrast, and what a powerful piece.

jfk

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Blueskye27 In reply to frazzled-mage [2010-01-06 01:43:07 +0000 UTC]

You read it three times? That's a compliment all by itself. Thanks, sweet.

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frazzled-mage In reply to Blueskye27 [2010-01-06 03:19:07 +0000 UTC]

Well it is an exceptional piece...ty for writing it.

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YouInventedMe [2010-01-05 02:44:17 +0000 UTC]

"time keeps on slipping into the future"

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Blueskye27 In reply to YouInventedMe [2010-01-06 01:43:38 +0000 UTC]

Unstoppably...

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XxWreckoningxX [2010-01-05 01:37:48 +0000 UTC]

Amazing. And there's just something about the way you write such small lines and simple stanzas that catches my heart.

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Blueskye27 In reply to XxWreckoningxX [2010-01-06 01:44:14 +0000 UTC]

That's so lovely of you. Thanks.

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XxWreckoningxX In reply to Blueskye27 [2010-01-06 05:12:11 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome.

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loverz116 [2010-01-04 16:59:27 +0000 UTC]

this is truly beauitful in it own simple way.

:]

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Blueskye27 In reply to loverz116 [2010-01-06 01:44:23 +0000 UTC]

Thanks.

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loverz116 In reply to Blueskye27 [2010-01-06 01:45:41 +0000 UTC]

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AlecBell [2010-01-04 08:51:59 +0000 UTC]

Beyond comment, Cindy.

Small, but perfectly formed, every word just where it oght to be.

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Blueskye27 In reply to AlecBell [2010-01-06 01:44:43 +0000 UTC]

What a lovely compliment. Thank you, Alec.

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AlecBell In reply to Blueskye27 [2010-01-06 01:46:43 +0000 UTC]

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RawPoetry [2010-01-04 05:08:52 +0000 UTC]

I love how you tied the whole thing together with the passing of time, well written

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Blueskye27 In reply to RawPoetry [2010-01-09 17:43:34 +0000 UTC]

Thanks.

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VisualPoetress [2010-01-04 04:54:41 +0000 UTC]

Very emotional, great work Cindy hope your new year is going well

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Blueskye27 In reply to VisualPoetress [2010-01-09 17:43:53 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, Michelle. Hope 2010 is great for you, too!

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jsting [2010-01-04 04:36:01 +0000 UTC]

love the last six stanzas. and, as usual, the title! the first two stanzas escape me a bit; although i like that they're a philosophical setup. i like the structure of the parentheses too. maybe continue the structure? (with a shriveled heart)

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Blueskye27 In reply to jsting [2010-01-06 01:46:02 +0000 UTC]

It was the idea of turning old instantly that set me going, but I can see it without the first two stanzas, too. You have such a good eye. I'm trying to start writing again. I've been abysmally lazy...

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jsting In reply to Blueskye27 [2010-01-06 03:39:57 +0000 UTC]

Oh, I didn't mean that the first two stanzas don't belong. I think at the time I first read it, my brain wasn't fully working. But then again, when is it ever fully working anyway. I think the poem is better because of the first two stanzas because it lends deeper meaning to the rest of the poem. I'm glad you're back at writing. The world is better for it.

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Blueskye27 In reply to jsting [2010-01-06 12:58:55 +0000 UTC]

I think your brain works pretty well most of the time - better than mine. hee.

The world is better for it...that's the nicest compliment I've had in a while. Thank you.

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