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Description Appala's prophecy

Chapter 1

GOSH! Why did math have to be so…… aggravating!?  I Thought as I sat, in Mrs. Korshaw's 7th period math class. I looked up at the clock and to my joy the bell rang. "I'm outta here!" I shouted. "Not so fast" said Mrs. Korshaw "Appala you are the highest scoring student in my class why are you so anxious to get out of class?" "Well……" I said, "I just am losing interest and I kinda wanna transfer to Mr. Long's class". "Well tough because you're not going anywhere" said Mrs. Korshaw. "Wha…wha what do you mean" I mumbled. Suddenly my teacher flew at me no longer a human but, a Dracaenae! In amazement I clutched my head, and then suddenly a bow appeared in my hands and a quiver of arrows on my back. No time to think I grabbed an arrow and shot, what I thought was Mrs. Korshaw exploded right in front of my eyes in an almost beach type of sand dyed hot pink! The bow and arrow disappeared I screamed in complete horror had I just killed my teacher? Had my teacher just attacked me in attempt to kill me? I ran out into the hall just to crash into Carson "omg I am so sorry" I immediately said. I thought in horror to myself did I just run into the head basketball player on centrals boys basketball team?! "Oh it's ok I'm Carson sorry I got in your way" he said with his amazingly beautiful smile. "No, no, no it's my fault I didn't see you there I was kinda in a hurry" I said while I glanced into his eyes their Carmel brown color had gears in my mind gong crazy. "Hahaha ya I kinda realized that" he said and then winked! "Why are you in a hurry anyways? "Oh well I um…. You know what here's my number" I said as I threw a piece of paper at him that read txt me k?
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mango-shiro [2014-05-16 20:13:02 +0000 UTC]

And I don't really get why the monster dust turned into a pinkish colour...

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mango-shiro [2014-05-16 19:57:24 +0000 UTC]

Typical demigods have dyslexia and ADHD, resulting in significantly lower marks in mortal school.  It's a little out-of-fandom to have your character be such a good student.

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brightshadow1222675 In reply to mango-shiro [2014-10-10 00:46:14 +0000 UTC]

she doesnt have dyslexia which will make it harder for her later on, also i have ADHD and ADD i understand but i get well grades myself, we should also keep in mind this is like 2 years old but thanks for pointers and why the fudge not its my story haha

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AlexMCopeman [2013-07-15 18:49:58 +0000 UTC]

Wow i really like this

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brightshadow1222675 In reply to AlexMCopeman [2013-07-16 19:08:33 +0000 UTC]

Lol thx

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Maclafel7 [2013-07-07 22:43:40 +0000 UTC]

This reminds me of Percy Jackson and the Olympians…

It's off to a good start, and I love the title!

The only thing I'd say is that it would be nice if you formatted it more by dividing up the paragraph into smaller ones.

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brightshadow1222675 In reply to Maclafel7 [2013-07-08 00:41:21 +0000 UTC]

Lol thanks
Thanks
I appreciate the feedback

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Maclafel7 In reply to brightshadow1222675 [2013-07-08 23:05:36 +0000 UTC]

No problem. Just let me know when it's too much

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brightshadow1222675 In reply to Maclafel7 [2013-07-09 16:02:09 +0000 UTC]

lol no i really like your feedback

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Maclafel7 In reply to brightshadow1222675 [2013-07-09 23:14:05 +0000 UTC]

Thanks

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brightshadow1222675 In reply to Maclafel7 [2013-07-10 18:55:14 +0000 UTC]

no prob

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MJTism [2012-12-19 23:05:49 +0000 UTC]

Nice... But it moved really fast and it was a bit confusing... There's definatly potential if you take your time with it and add some details. I don't know about you but I like have a picture painted in my mind, there wasn't much of that here so I basically defaulted to imagining this happening in my own school's math hall, that'd be an interesting day...

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brightshadow1222675 In reply to MJTism [2012-12-20 00:44:25 +0000 UTC]

ok thanks for the input i will use it while writing chapter 3 should i do a xmas special on appala and carson? there is also a chapter 2

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MJTism In reply to brightshadow1222675 [2012-12-20 00:59:20 +0000 UTC]

I think it's a little early to do specials but if you have a good idea you could try it.

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brightshadow1222675 In reply to MJTism [2012-12-20 03:43:43 +0000 UTC]

Mmmkkkkaaayyyyy maybe valentines then

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MJTism In reply to brightshadow1222675 [2012-12-20 04:04:17 +0000 UTC]

Good idea!

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brightshadow1222675 In reply to MJTism [2012-12-20 14:15:19 +0000 UTC]

Shanks

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MJTism In reply to brightshadow1222675 [2012-12-20 22:32:55 +0000 UTC]

Welcome.

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brightshadow1222675 In reply to MJTism [2012-12-20 23:40:15 +0000 UTC]

tehehehe working on chapter three and pics of carson and appala as we speak

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Only-One-Rule [2012-12-06 00:38:55 +0000 UTC]

interesting start! maybe more exposition would help as it is the first chapter

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brightshadow1222675 In reply to Only-One-Rule [2012-12-06 01:00:59 +0000 UTC]

thanks ya i think so too i am workin on chapter 2 as we speak

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