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mango-shiro [2014-05-16 20:13:02 +0000 UTC]
And I don't really get why the monster dust turned into a pinkish colour...
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mango-shiro [2014-05-16 19:57:24 +0000 UTC]
Typical demigods have dyslexia and ADHD, resulting in significantly lower marks in mortal school. It's a little out-of-fandom to have your character be such a good student.
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brightshadow1222675 In reply to mango-shiro [2014-10-10 00:46:14 +0000 UTC]
she doesnt have dyslexia which will make it harder for her later on, also i have ADHD and ADD i understand but i get well grades myself, we should also keep in mind this is like 2 years old but thanks for pointers and why the fudge not its my story haha
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MJTism [2012-12-19 23:05:49 +0000 UTC]
Nice... But it moved really fast and it was a bit confusing... There's definatly potential if you take your time with it and add some details. I don't know about you but I like have a picture painted in my mind, there wasn't much of that here so I basically defaulted to imagining this happening in my own school's math hall, that'd be an interesting day...
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brightshadow1222675 In reply to MJTism [2012-12-20 00:44:25 +0000 UTC]
ok thanks for the input i will use it while writing chapter 3 should i do a xmas special on appala and carson? there is also a chapter 2
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MJTism In reply to brightshadow1222675 [2012-12-20 00:59:20 +0000 UTC]
I think it's a little early to do specials but if you have a good idea you could try it.
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brightshadow1222675 In reply to MJTism [2012-12-20 23:40:15 +0000 UTC]
tehehehe working on chapter three and pics of carson and appala as we speak
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Only-One-Rule [2012-12-06 00:38:55 +0000 UTC]
interesting start! maybe more exposition would help as it is the first chapter
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