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caimito — I need you to know by-nc-nd
Published: 2009-11-19 01:25:51 +0000 UTC; Views: 1480; Favourites: 33; Downloads: 18
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Description I need you to know that this usually vibrant city has been a deep shade of grey since you left. You thought I wouldn't notice if you slipped the light from my eyes into your suitcase when you took flight, but it's gotten so dark that I can't find my way. I'm tripping over words and knocking into bruised bones in an effort to find a light switch, but I'm starting to realize you are the switch and my eyes will just have to adjust until you're back in my arms and making me shine.

But I need you to know that I'm standing on the edge, and that I could fall from these crumbling walls and into your kiss in a heartbeat, but I've mastered this balancing act, so you'll never see me falter. But every so often, when I think you're not looking, I'll take a deep breath and steady myself, and I need you to know that in those moments you're so breathtakingly and imperfectly beautiful in your vulnerability that my daydream of us seems closer than ever. I need you to know that even though your hands have been unsteady and my heart's been playing hard to get, you've still managed to sweep me off my feet and into this fantasy, and now all I want is your lips against mine and your heart safe in my chest.

And I need you to know that this is the closest I'll get to whispering this in your ear because the tones in your voice and the sparkle in your eyes and the brush of your hand are intoxicating, and when we kissed goodnight you silently pulled the words from my lips until I'd forgotten what it was I ought to have said. And I need you to know that when my heart was pounding and I was holding tight to my glass and avoiding your eyes in favor of your lips, what I was really trying to say is that this isn't just temptation, that I'm yours, and I'll still be here in the morning, if you'll let me stay that long. But my mind never could compose the words my heart was dying to say so I'd watch you walk away again and again. And I need you to know that I lied when I told you it was nerves, it was really just foolishness that gave you the wrong impression.

So above all, I need you to know that I've finally found the words, and if we're lucky, one of these nights we'll shine again and I'll trace these secrets on your lips and your hands and your heart and show you what I've been trying to say all along:
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Comments: 25

DreamMeL [2010-01-16 18:44:21 +0000 UTC]

"avoiding your eyes in favor of your lips"
So preetty

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caimito In reply to DreamMeL [2010-01-16 19:03:18 +0000 UTC]

thank you

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DenBen [2010-01-16 00:26:30 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much for writing this. It prettied up my day
But really, this was a very beautiful read. It really pulled me in, so to say? Haha I lack more accurate words than those.

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caimito In reply to DenBen [2010-01-16 01:55:30 +0000 UTC]

thank you soso much, i'm glad it prettied up your day! any words like yours are accurate in my mind...they're greatly appreciated

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DenBen In reply to caimito [2010-01-16 04:17:47 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome

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DailyLitDeviations [2010-01-15 20:00:22 +0000 UTC]

Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) and has been selected as our “ Pick of the Day”. It is featured in a news article here: [link] and on our main page.

Keep writing and keep creating.

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caimito In reply to DailyLitDeviations [2010-01-15 20:02:20 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much!

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DailyLitDeviations In reply to caimito [2010-01-17 15:46:57 +0000 UTC]

It was our pleasure.

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SkyBlueTattoo [2009-11-30 01:07:02 +0000 UTC]

I'm going to try my best to write a coherent comment, but right now I'm staring at my computer screen in shock. I feel like you put all the things I wish I could say into words. I relate so much to this piece, and I didn't even know some of the things I was feeling until it was right in front of me, and I was reading it. Above that, this was beautifully written. It was smooth, and easy to read, but also very strong and attention grabbing. Everything about this is perfect. Don't change a thing.

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caimito In reply to SkyBlueTattoo [2009-11-30 06:36:37 +0000 UTC]

wow, i'll try to write a coherent comment back to this! i'm incredibly stunned and flattered by your comment...thank you SO much, it means so much as a writer to have people relate to my work the way you have. it took a lot to actually get this written, and it's so deeply personal to me, and i'm so glad it can be so deeply personal to someone else as well

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SkyBlueTattoo In reply to caimito [2009-11-30 07:25:07 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome! It really is an amazing piece of literature.

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caimito In reply to SkyBlueTattoo [2009-11-30 16:37:11 +0000 UTC]

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Asherlee0099 [2009-11-22 06:31:37 +0000 UTC]

This is gorgeous.

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caimito In reply to Asherlee0099 [2009-11-22 18:12:06 +0000 UTC]

thank you SO much...for the comment, the favourite, and the watch

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choirsoftheheavens [2009-11-22 02:17:46 +0000 UTC]

it's brilliant! the imagery of a poem that reads like prose. perfect balance there!

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caimito In reply to choirsoftheheavens [2009-11-22 18:12:27 +0000 UTC]

thank you! i'm glad you enjoyed it

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choirsoftheheavens In reply to caimito [2009-11-22 18:30:32 +0000 UTC]

i'm glad i found it.

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caimito In reply to choirsoftheheavens [2009-11-22 19:11:17 +0000 UTC]

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thefluffemsrule [2009-11-22 00:17:02 +0000 UTC]

This is so beautiful. You have no idea how much I am relating to this piece of work at the moment. Thank you for putting my feelings into words that I could not

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caimito In reply to thefluffemsrule [2009-11-22 18:13:52 +0000 UTC]

thank you...it's so nice to know that the words that are so close to me can have so much meaning for someone else too

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thefireflyliberation [2009-11-19 05:03:01 +0000 UTC]

i don't even know how to coherently reply to this piece.
there are so many different things i loved about it.
holy wow.

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caimito In reply to thefireflyliberation [2009-11-19 05:14:14 +0000 UTC]

wow, really? i was honestly sitting here thinking it needed to be reworked a bit. but thank you thank you! it's so great to get such great feedback from someone whose writing i admire so much

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ringosgal78 [2009-11-19 01:28:25 +0000 UTC]

this is beautiful :]

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caimito In reply to ringosgal78 [2009-11-19 01:31:17 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much

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ringosgal78 In reply to caimito [2009-11-19 01:31:52 +0000 UTC]

my pleasure

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