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Published: 2008-10-11 16:38:52 +0000 UTC; Views: 893; Favourites: 14; Downloads: 5
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Description And I wondered why you didn't curl your lips up
in distate,
when I lit up as you sat down beside me.
You with the trendy blonde hair, eye makeup
and peach coloured skin.

Oh a quick betrayal of everything I had you
pinned as,
like a moth to a display board,
you were just another office girl.
So surprised when the ring of words,
you slipped so sensuously between your lips,
read the same as my addiction's fuel.

Of course you smoke the golds,
the one's for girls.
I smoke the reds,
for those of us who just wish death,
slightly quicker than the rest.

You sat beside me, as we confided silently,
two addicts and an easy way out
on a warm Saturday.

You looked anxious,
like you wanted to talk.
I felt like writing you this,
there and then,
with a note at the bottom saying;
"Just talk, it'll be easier that way.
Silence doesn't become you."
And other such poetic nonsense,
which you'd have promptly ignored,
so I just sat with my eyes behind pages,
written by a man who's better than me.

I'd read to you, from my new book of verse,
if I thought you'd have the time, or the taste for
another being's sadness, upon his fabled mountain.

Instead I kept my new eyes down,
not letting them stray too often to yours,
dark rimmed as they are,
I thought you'd catch me, smile at me,
then I'd have to smile back,
and I feel as though my face would crack,
my new teeth fall out and I'd lie faith down,
in the dirt and cigarette ends,
beneath your fashionable boots.
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Comments: 14

ThyGod [2008-10-28 09:51:39 +0000 UTC]

*flails*

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ThyGod [2008-10-18 17:47:13 +0000 UTC]

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spiker17 [2008-10-14 23:44:33 +0000 UTC]

I am almost completely mesmerized by the way you spin stories. You perfectly capture a simultaneously cynical and accepting tone. Fantastic job.

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CaptainOzz In reply to spiker17 [2008-10-15 22:23:41 +0000 UTC]

Thankyou, your comments mean a great deal to me!
-Ozz

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spiker17 In reply to CaptainOzz [2008-10-17 00:30:09 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad they do; sometimes I'm not sure if they get read. ^^

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CaptainOzz In reply to spiker17 [2008-10-27 16:51:44 +0000 UTC]

Always read, seldom replied.
Though a poet, I can't often reply as quickly as I'd like to.

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Lillith-Sweetblood [2008-10-13 05:37:49 +0000 UTC]

I like it.

although. not all girls smoke golds.

I smoke Reds.

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xSwEetxBlAsPheMyx [2008-10-12 13:28:01 +0000 UTC]

I'm so impressed by this, one of the best things i've read on this sight for such a long time. I love the way you move between paralleling and sharply contrasting two people on a bench and the insecurities revealed so naturally and subtly. An obvious favourite.

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CaptainOzz In reply to xSwEetxBlAsPheMyx [2008-10-12 14:21:06 +0000 UTC]

Ha, thanks! If you like this, which I assume you do, pick up one of Leonard Cohen's collections, I draw inspiration for pieces like this from his work.

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xSwEetxBlAsPheMyx In reply to CaptainOzz [2008-10-12 17:21:36 +0000 UTC]

I think i did read something, ermm, Death of a lady's man..possibly, very much liked it.

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Tyroshai [2008-10-12 09:54:31 +0000 UTC]

Ah...York...

This happens often.

I miss it...

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rider-on-the-storm [2008-10-12 08:37:04 +0000 UTC]

as long as shes isnt a hipster.. whatever that is.

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whisperinthetrees [2008-10-11 22:26:50 +0000 UTC]

Often, the most poetic occasions are those that seem ordinary.

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Lynnelle [2008-10-11 19:53:12 +0000 UTC]

This is really amazing!!
the imagery, the words!!!

It really blew my mind away

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