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Catreaa — Ice Flower
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Published: 2018-01-09 00:19:15 +0000 UTC; Views: 1452; Favourites: 107; Downloads: 1
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It was a cold and calm day In Corona's kingdom, there was a storm near and the pegasus who helped controling the weather had got to get rid of it. Sky chaser, A mare pegasus with blue mane, was the one who was told to command the other pegasus and tell them to do their work.Sky flied over to the cold ground, resting for a bit "good job, guys! You're all doing fine!" she said with a bright smile on her face, really proud of their work. The mare stood there, staring at her companions.
But she heard something, she could tell that It was steps behind her, but when she turned around, she couldn't believe what she was seeing: It was the most beautiful mare she has ever seen, her mane and wings sparkled as the snow shines with the sunshine and his body moved like If she were dancing or acting, she was just so pretty.
Suddenly, the mare looked at her. Sky's wings instantly opened with the surprise and her face started to get warm, but her heart started racing when she saw that she was walking over to her.
"The weather looks really nice today, right?" She smiled sweetly to the short mare, staring at her with her beautiful blue eyes. Sky stood quiet, not knowing what to do or say.
"N-nghy-yeah, I-It do-oes..." Sky said half whispering, still looing at her.
The tall mare giggled and put her hoof on her mouth. Sky chaser finally noticed something, her horn! She was the princess Moonlight Glimmer! How couldn't she recognize her when she first saw her?
"P-princess moonlight..." She bowed down, respectfully. Her heart was a little bit more calmed. "I-I am the one who-"
"Has to command the weather ponies to clean the sky, I know, I know" she laughed "and please, do not call me "princess" moonlight, just moonlight would be alright" the princess smiled at her.
"O-oh... Alright" the small Pegasus smiled back "b-but... What Is someone like you doing here? I mean, without anybody around, o-or..." She looked around, nervously.
"I just came by myself to see This beautiful village, I sometimes like to go on my own, without any guards or princess stuff... I only wear the crown because ponies from the castle says that I have to be recognized as the princess..." She sighed, still with a cute smile on her face.
Sky couldn't stop looking into Moonlight's eyes, they were too pure and beautiful, It just felt as If they were all alone and the world turned only around them.
"That's... So brave from you, prin-... Moonlight" she closed her wings, embarrassed.
"Thank you, sweetie" she moved her hair off of her eyes
Sky's heart started to race again, 'sweetie'?
"so, I should go back to the castle, everyone might be worried about me." She said with irony, and turned around, still looking at her "keep doing your great work, dear, I hope I get to see you soon again!"
"T-thank you! Same goes to you!" She waved, looking at her go. Her heart suddenly stopped, why would she say something like that? She's a princess, she couldn't even be able to see her again.
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WOOOOOO
A new ship appeared! (͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)
These two appeared together in my head when I was listening to music ( "She keeps me warm" ) and I wanted to try the idea!
I kinda ship them, Sky Is so smol and the princess so tall xDD
Oppinnions in the drawing & story? <3
(Gonna edit this text tomorrow, I'm writing in my phone ;; )
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Comments: 7
In no way is this critique meant to discourage the artist from drawing. Please also keep in mind, these are my own opinions based on my own drawing experiences.
I personally love the little story that comes with this picture. I feel like the picture truly shows the chemistry between these two.
For the picture itself, I'd say that your anatomy is great! Maybe a few tweaks to the back legs of the two. On the purple one, which I presume is Corona, the one with the cutie mark looks bent in a rather odd way to me. from the rump to the bottom, that curve is rather odd and seems to be an organic bend which bones would not really allow for. For the blue winged and maned pony, which I presume is Sky, her back legs also look rather weird. Again, it is the one closest to the viewer. It has more definition; however, the curves are awkward much like those on Corona. Other than those two, I feel like this piece is really close to pony anatomy, so good job in that!
Another think I would like to bring up is the scarf on Corona and Sky's bandanna is it? To me, it feels super uper duper stiff and sort of.... flat. I feel like you could benefit in adding some more organic curves and "movement" to it since it is fabric and acts rather odd like hair. Also some texturing might help with adding some pop to the picture. I feel like you could also benefit a lot by adding more textures into maybe the hair and fabrics. Although this is a crisp, clean piece, hair is unruly and has sort of a life of its own one can say. It has extra strands flying everywhere and has special shines to it as it flows, waves, curves, falls, etc.
I would like to address 3 other things other than these. Wing structures? Shapes? (Idk what to call them), Shading, and the background.
I like your unique wing structure, but I feel like you may benefit from adding more layers much like what birds have. It would help add some more detail into the piece, but of course, this takes a lot of time e.deviantart.net/emoticons/a/a… " width="19" height="19" alt="
For shading, I feel like it is a rather flat picture. You seem to have a pretty good idea as to where it should go and when, but I feel like some of them are... confusing. The light source to me, would be coming from behind; however, it seems to be coming from almost the... Side and front of Corona. As for Sky, it appears to be coming from the side of her too and down perhaps. This is disrupted by the shadow near the back of the front leg not towards the viewer. I'd recommend also dabbling into some more soft shading and cell shading if you'd like to go more realistic. (sorry if this part is confusing O.o I could try to explain it better if you'd like)
For background, I feel like you could add a lot more pop to the piece with more shading and detailing in it.
Anyways, sorry for the long critique, but hope this helps ^_^
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So pretty! 
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This is really pretty!! Like wow! and i love these designs SO much omg <3
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omgggg thank you sososososo muuuch <3 qwq
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No problem!! I cant wait to see more of them omg? I might even draw one of em when i get the chance >:3c
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there will be new stuff soon <3
omg what? really? I'd love it! QWQ <<<333
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