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CDing93 — The New Masks
Published: 2011-10-28 15:11:09 +0000 UTC; Views: 198; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 1
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The masks have fallen by the waysideunused, forgotten, and outdated.
Bombastic aesthetics hang in their place
glitz, glam, and razzamatazz
High notes and show tunes,
the death of musical emotion.
Sing your heart out,
but use only volume
Dialogue has died along
with comedy and tragedy
sex and drugs and rock n' roll
hold the old ways in a choke hold
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I love the meaning of the poem, but somethings just dont fit to my mind. Like the last line in stanza 1 "the glitz, the glam, the razzamatazz" didn't seem to fit to me with the rest of the stanza (it could also be because my brain stops and tries to read razzamatazz because i've never seen that word before). the flow of the second stanza seems a little off and the very last line "hold the old ways in a choke hold" is good, true, and uses good imagery, but for some odd reason, it just doesn't fit the word flow of the first three lines of the stanza. Other than that, great sensory detail, pretty good word choice, and you get your point across. Not a bad poem.
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I took out the "the"s in the 4th line just now because it was a bit too wordy and broke up the pattern I wanted to set with the second line. And it's understandable because "razzamatazz" isn't exactly a common word haha.
I get what you're saying about the second and third stanzas, but I really can't think of a way (right now, at least) that would get the point I wanted to get across better.
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yeah. I honestly don't either, sorry 
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Eh, I'll find a way eventually. But once again, thank you so much for the faves and feedback
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