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circularthinker — jupiter
Published: 2005-08-21 04:50:47 +0000 UTC; Views: 228; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 5
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i believe i remember a dreammuted tones,
obscurities
through a window
i could see the black expanse
not one star, it's light did show
and that ancient king of planets
the storm,
horrible, alive
did confront me with enormity
but did not show it's one red eye
i arc down
like a microbe on a slide
through the yellow opaque clouds
and taste the darkened side
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I am having a crashing of pre-knowing here... I think... I had a dream about this poem... is that too weird? Im a little scared. But, first stanza esp, I adore.
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it makes sense when you realize that your mind is a 9 dimensional manifold that is topologically bound to a 3 dimensional shadow. our minds are part of the same object. imagine, if you will, dipping the legs of a chair in ink, and then putting the chair on a canvas. the 4 dots think they are individuals, but there is a larger structure of which they are unaware.
lol
thanks for the compliment!
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It is perhaps too early in my life let alone the day to be contemplating chairs and ink and other such madness... but... i THINK i get u
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The imagery, not in how the words were used, but maybe even in the words themselves makes it all that much more alive and...Understandable? That may not me the word, but it's the best I've got.
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well, thank you very much.
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i had a dream where jupiter appeared in the sky around noon. it moved toward earth and passed right beside it. i could see it grow larger, and at its closest it filled the sky. but just as it came, it left. it was a vivid dream and this gorgeous poem made me think of it. and jupiter is the coolest planet so
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thanks so much for the favorite.
that sounds like a potent dream.
i agree that jupiter is the best planet.
it makes me sick with resonance.
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Scary. Where does the void begin, and where do we end? Oh, and Samuel R Delaney kicks ass.
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thank you. i suppose i should give him a read.
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oh dear, using this computer is very much like attempting to engage in a coherant conversation with ones senile grandfather whilst under the effects of lsd. Sorry about the double post there dood.
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that would be oh so very funny.
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Well, a little background here: Samual Delany, who I have recently decided is the author I am most interested in for the time being, is also one of the most clearly intelligent writers I have read. Being that you are one of the most intelligent writers I have read, it would make sense that your work would remind me of his on occasion. This is the first work of yours to do that. It made me shutter. I would buy a book of your poetry after reading even one of these poems.
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Well, a little background here: Samual Delany, who I have recently decided is the author I am most interested in for the time being, is also one of the most clearly intelligent writers I have read. Being that you are one of the most intelligent writers I have read, it would make sense that your work would remind me of his on occasion. This is the first work of yours to do that. It made me shutter. I would buy a book of your poetry after reading even one of these poems.
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i really appreciate that. although i hate to admit it, i wondered weather you would comment on anything and what those comments would be. your new poetry is very, very good by the way.
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Sad. That makes me wonder what you think I think of you.
Thank you! Perhaps I should take the time to post my newer poetry, most the stuff here has been around for a while.
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i did not dread it,
i did not suspect something negative.
although i did expect
you might not say anything.
and on your new poetry,
i would be eager to hear it.
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Thats interesting. I was wondering when, if ever, you would post something new. I have been very curious about how your writing and music for a long time.
Well, thank you. I suppose I will be posting some new writing then.
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