Comments: 13
11god11 [2009-10-26 04:03:56 +0000 UTC]
your words make me nervous
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Robsonnet [2008-02-09 04:42:47 +0000 UTC]
I am most impressed. I'm going to have to read it several more times before I'll get a clear impression of what's actually going on, but I'm definitely feeling the flow and suspect my right hemisphere could probably tell me. The alliterations felt a bit much at first, but not quite so much as to turn me off from what you were doing.
I will have to see what else you have written. I see this is from a while back.
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circularthinker In reply to Robsonnet [2008-02-12 01:43:50 +0000 UTC]
thank you robsonnet.
everything in this gallery is quite old. i am mostly writing song lyrics and performing with my guitar nowadays, but please look around! i will appreciate anything you have to say.
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circularthinker [2007-07-26 05:34:37 +0000 UTC]
holy shit, i is badass.
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inflorire [2006-12-23 05:40:54 +0000 UTC]
First two words: Black death. Dark much?
But I really like it. A lot. I like it so much that a lot gets it's own sentence. Especially the park after "striking a match that bestows its sulfur flash"
I don't know why the imagry there really struck me, very effective word choice we'll have to talk about this sometime.
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Mr-Doobs [2006-12-19 07:47:28 +0000 UTC]
Cool poem.
Kinda reminds me of a friend of mines pieces.
I was also reminded of this graphic novel I once read.
Wherin people who were forgotten by society slipped thru metaphorical cracks in the sidewalk and ended up in a spiritual limbo like plane.
(If you were wondering the book was "Midnight nation"by j michael straczynski , and no, I dont get a quarter from every book soldor anything, Im not even promoting it, it was kinda weird and "culty" and had kind of unsatifactory ending. so there I'm not trying to make you read it or anything, so get off my back, Jeez!)
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circularthinker In reply to Mr-Doobs [2006-12-19 07:52:12 +0000 UTC]
IT RUBS THE LOTION ON IT'S SKIN OR ELSE IT GETS THE HOSE AGAIN!
um, thank you.
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Mr-Doobs In reply to circularthinker [2006-12-19 08:47:34 +0000 UTC]
No, no the friend I was refering to was not Buffalo Bill, his poetry is terrible, and besides I no longer consider him a friend(we had a falling out recently due to the state in which he returned my vintage singer sewing machine in, which I had lent him in good faith)
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caries-caeli [2006-12-17 01:41:19 +0000 UTC]
Utterly chilling. I love it when a poem reads like dense prose, as this clearly does. I could read this closely seventeen times and still have plenty to think about.
You' killin' me dog
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