HOME | DD

CloudNumber8 β€” Beyond The Horizon
Published: 2012-06-09 16:53:51 +0000 UTC; Views: 4382; Favourites: 180; Downloads: 57
Redirect to original
Description We ran out of our homes
And our dream quelling streets
Until mud under foot
Had replaced the concrete

From suburb to city
On to the countryside
We were running away
But not trying to hide

The world was still spinning
Faster than we could move
Though our hearts were breaking
Our poets' words would sooth

We left a cloud grey town
And in time reached the sea
Our home for so long
Evolution tells me

To the deepest warm blue
From the coolest pitch black
Shackles fell with each stroke
With our dreams still intact

Surrounded by fishes
Guiding us from the deep
Every league of ascent
Reinforced our belief

That it's the world, not life
That we were running from
The edge always hidden
Beyond the horizon

One day we will get there
From the Earth we shall fall
And in to the sunset
Our shadows will crawl
Related content

[ TEXT ]


CloudNumber8 - Evolution Reversed

[ TEXT ]


ScarletDevil1503 - Expectations

[ TEXT ]


WordOfChen - The Feelings That Linger

[ TEXT ]


DearPoetry - Constellation
Comments: 85

Papership-Lonewalker [2012-10-09 18:04:27 +0000 UTC]

What I feel by reading this is beyond all I could ever feel in my life time

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

CloudNumber8 In reply to Papership-Lonewalker [2012-10-10 21:52:05 +0000 UTC]

thats so kind and its really nice that it touched you

thank you

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

AMPEugenie [2012-08-15 20:58:14 +0000 UTC]

aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhh thats enjoyable

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

CloudNumber8 In reply to AMPEugenie [2012-08-16 16:21:30 +0000 UTC]

yay glad you enjoyed yourself thanks!

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

Nightfarer [2012-06-16 21:28:39 +0000 UTC]

We'll never can get to the edge of our world. We always see the horizon in front of our eyes and don't find the way to get beyond our radius. Trying to run from place to place to find a paradise, we won't ever reach.
It's a deep poem with an important message with is protraited in wonderful pictures of wide spaces although we are caged in small places. The nature is restricted and replaced. At least we just can be free when we're dead... can look beyond the horizon. There's so much content in this poem!

A lovely poem about nature, wideness and freedom.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

CloudNumber8 In reply to Nightfarer [2012-06-16 22:44:52 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much.

I am really happy about all the things you mentioned. I am glad they came through and were picked up on

a wonderful comment

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

DariaGALLERY [2012-06-14 19:14:05 +0000 UTC]

wow....sunny....this i like so much.....yeah....our lifes....we run and run........changing places........so true

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

CloudNumber8 In reply to DariaGALLERY [2012-06-15 17:53:56 +0000 UTC]

thanks Daria, glad you like it

hope you are feeling now too

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

DariaGALLERY In reply to CloudNumber8 [2012-06-27 16:19:04 +0000 UTC]

yes my dear))))))))))) i feel)))))

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

Vegetabelle [2012-06-12 00:04:10 +0000 UTC]

So lovely!

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

CloudNumber8 In reply to Vegetabelle [2012-06-12 01:56:55 +0000 UTC]

thank you Kerry!

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

Vegetabelle In reply to CloudNumber8 [2012-06-12 03:15:28 +0000 UTC]

You are so welcome!

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

Icerose27 [2012-06-10 14:54:25 +0000 UTC]

Wow... so beautiful!

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

CloudNumber8 In reply to Icerose27 [2012-06-10 18:30:11 +0000 UTC]

thanks so much

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

Icerose27 In reply to CloudNumber8 [2012-06-10 20:16:44 +0000 UTC]

No problem!

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

Pimsri [2012-06-10 13:57:02 +0000 UTC]

incredebly beautiful!
very well writing! what a poem! <3

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

CloudNumber8 In reply to Pimsri [2012-06-10 18:30:19 +0000 UTC]

thank you!

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

Pimsri In reply to CloudNumber8 [2012-06-11 14:01:56 +0000 UTC]

no plob!

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

TinnaAres [2012-06-10 08:42:08 +0000 UTC]

beautiful.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

CloudNumber8 In reply to TinnaAres [2012-06-10 11:59:07 +0000 UTC]

thank you

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

0hgravity [2012-06-10 05:48:16 +0000 UTC]

nice imagery and rhyming. reminded me of arcade fire in the very beginning there.
nice work!

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

CloudNumber8 In reply to 0hgravity [2012-06-10 11:59:33 +0000 UTC]

oh thats cool, i like Arcade Fire thank you

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

0hgravity In reply to CloudNumber8 [2012-06-10 18:19:07 +0000 UTC]

awesome!
you're welcome

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

kilgrimx [2012-06-10 04:54:15 +0000 UTC]

I just started using DA gain and was pleasantly surprised to find something so great so quickly. Awesome imagery!

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

CloudNumber8 In reply to kilgrimx [2012-06-10 12:00:00 +0000 UTC]

aww thank you thats really nice to hear

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

KazumiMai [2012-06-10 02:14:44 +0000 UTC]

The rhyming makes the poem sound beautiful. And the story is sad but inspiring at the same time.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

CloudNumber8 In reply to KazumiMai [2012-06-10 02:34:09 +0000 UTC]

thank you. I am glad you enjoyed it

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

SILENCE866 [2012-06-10 01:03:43 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful. 'm listening to that song from shreck te one that fiona sings? should you ever decide to read this out loud, you should play this in the background.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

CloudNumber8 In reply to SILENCE866 [2012-06-10 01:11:00 +0000 UTC]

i have thought about doing that. Maybe putting them on youtube with music behind them i will keep that song in mind

thanks

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

SILENCE866 In reply to CloudNumber8 [2012-06-10 01:12:42 +0000 UTC]

lol cool thx s'all I ask

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

funkeygirl [2012-06-10 00:38:32 +0000 UTC]

I love how the couple struggles with the world, I think the sentence "And in to the sunset, Our shadows will crawl" is to refer the end of their youth, just like autumn, right?

I really love poetry, but when I try writing some, I always end doing a descriptive one

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

CloudNumber8 In reply to funkeygirl [2012-06-10 01:10:17 +0000 UTC]

thanks for the comment. I like to leave the meaning up to the reader. I suppose its different with each person. You are pretty much on the lines what i was thinking though

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

funkeygirl In reply to CloudNumber8 [2012-06-10 01:23:12 +0000 UTC]

I have future doing poetry!! thanks

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

mailaine [2012-06-10 00:14:05 +0000 UTC]

thats awesome!

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

CloudNumber8 In reply to mailaine [2012-06-10 01:09:22 +0000 UTC]

thanks!

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

danyangel8 [2012-06-10 00:03:57 +0000 UTC]

this is so pretty!

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

CloudNumber8 In reply to danyangel8 [2012-06-10 01:09:14 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much!

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

JustAnImitation [2012-06-09 21:56:46 +0000 UTC]

Just absolutely beautiful prose,

"To the deepest warm blue
From the coolest pitch black
Shackles fell with each stroke
With our dreams still intact"

Outstanding.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

CloudNumber8 In reply to JustAnImitation [2012-06-09 22:01:29 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much

I really appreciate it

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

FoolsGolde [2012-06-09 21:52:15 +0000 UTC]

beautiful imagery, i particularly like "to the deepest warm blue" and "into the sunset our shadows will crawl"

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

CloudNumber8 In reply to FoolsGolde [2012-06-09 22:01:40 +0000 UTC]

thank you

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

FoolsGolde In reply to CloudNumber8 [2012-06-09 22:24:32 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

VampireLoveYou [2012-06-09 21:33:49 +0000 UTC]

amazing, i really love how your narrating this in to a short story with beautiful words ^^ absolutely loved this piece

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

CloudNumber8 In reply to VampireLoveYou [2012-06-09 22:02:08 +0000 UTC]

thank you

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

VampireLoveYou In reply to CloudNumber8 [2012-06-09 22:16:28 +0000 UTC]

your welcome

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

MySocksRock [2012-06-09 21:33:41 +0000 UTC]

"One day we will get there"

lovely.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

CloudNumber8 In reply to MySocksRock [2012-06-09 22:02:32 +0000 UTC]

yep, one day

thank you

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

Rationalist-v-Artist [2012-06-09 21:18:20 +0000 UTC]

I like how the persona of the poem moves from the city to more natural surroundings. I also like your use of colour in the "warm blue" and "pitch black". It really gives a sense of imagery to the poem.

Your final two quatrains are beautiful, and offer a unique view on human experience. I loved those two stanzas especially

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

CloudNumber8 In reply to Rationalist-v-Artist [2012-06-09 21:26:19 +0000 UTC]

thank you for a lovely critique

I am glad you enjoyed it

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

Alois-Noette [2012-06-09 21:00:26 +0000 UTC]

The simplicity of this works oddly well. "Dream quelling streets" somehow avoids clichΓ©β€”I applaud that.

Last like of stanza 3β€”our poets' words would soothe, I think...

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1


| Next =>