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Published: 2005-07-02 09:42:02 +0000 UTC; Views: 161; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 11
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sadness breaches broken wallsim colder than i should be
ive dug the depths and searched forever
but i still cant find whats missing
you tell me that you know me
that 'he' is what i need
ive already tried, ive looked there
but thats just not where it hurts
all around are hungry eyes
lustful smiles, flirtatous remarks
people you tell me love me
want me
i tell you so often but you just dont see
these shells of feelings are not what i need
but i can blame me as much as you
because i still dont know whats missing
im having one of those days
where i feel so detatched
so far from all around me
ive got what i need to keep me alive
but not enough to keep me happy
stop pretending you know what it is
false love to fulfill me
you act as if its just a game
if im not with 'him', im sad
my life does not circle who holds my hand
who hugs me, pretends to love me
you tell me youre like me in so many ways
but we are very, very different
i cant be with anyone
i wont listen to you
go and flaunt yourself for your false fulfillment
while i look for whats still missing
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Comments: 26
Thank you very much! The best thing is, I've found what's missing
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awww you're so welcome and i'm glad to that youve found it!
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cool, very nice, very familiar feelings to everyone, put very eloquently by yourself....good job!
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That's so well written as usual. You have such an amazing talent to express your emotions. n_n I hope the tiny bit of sadness hides itself away for a loooong time.
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FANKS!
But...
I hate to say that it's...
Seems to be getting bigger. The worst part is that I don't even know what it is.
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Awww. That sucks. Sorry to hear it. Maybe you should cry. I did last night I don't know why I did either.
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I HATE it when that happens!
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Thank you so much! For the comment and the fave! Ahh thankies!!
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I AM SO SORRY TO POINT THIS OUT BUT: (sp) flirtateous --> flirtatous. sorryyy...
anyway, you need to know that the same people who say these things, offer these "crotches" to lean on, are just trying to help . . . ignore their suggestions when appopriate yeah, but don't overlook their intentions. of course, people will inevitably attempt to take a shot while they perceive you as weak and willing and "in need of someone", but it's a matter of personal strength i guess. don't listen to the majority, because more often than not the majority is wrong (because the majority follows the lead of each other and sometimes the blind lead of one figurehead).
that being said, find the people who truly care. i like to think i'm one of those people . . . always here for you when you need me to be. what i can offer to help, it's yours. take it; i still owe you so much anyway.
the writing has a nice feel to it, almost in a kind of "journalistic" sort of way; the grammar is loosely executed, the structure is very reminescent of diary entries, and the emotive lexicon accentuates the "personal" atmosphere of the piece overall. well done Tobes, you're a pro xD
anyway, i hope things get better for you. um. if you want to sink deeper into depression, read my latest poem >< "Sky Tears" yikes. i'd like to know what a pro like you thinks of it too
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I...I've read it. I wanted to tell you that it made me cry, but I didn't know how. But anyway...it did. I just didn't know what to write. I'll read it again now that my mood has improved three-fold, and try to coherently comment
This poem...I had one person in mind when I wrote it. Mainly Nicola. She's my friend and UGH every time I work, she's nagging me to go out with Ian. I have people at school, telling me that so and so were checking me out and this other dude that likes me, and what a great guy he is and how we fit and blah blah BLAH. It just makes me SO ANGRY.
I guess I can't say that they don't want what's best for me, but the problem is that they don't quite know what that is. When I'm sad, they automatically think it's because I'm not with somebody. I hate it that some people see it that way...that I'm so shallow-minded as to only think about who I can be with next. Nicola jumps from guy to guy as if it's some sort of game...
Then she'll make a joke about how she slept with this guy some night after being with another guy beforehand, and I won't laugh, and she'll tell me that I need to 'cheer up'. She said that there are plenty that she knows would like a 'chance' (what the hell? like I'm too good for them or something? *sigh*) with me, so I can 'pick and choose'
She makes them sound like toys. No one seems to get the fact that I. Just. Can't.
...but thank you, Josh.
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. . . meh.
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that's gorgeous. it's so well written without being offensive. it's really really good. i love it. xxxx
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Thank you so much for the comment and fave! You rock!
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hehe thankyoou! but i mean it! it's really great!
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Thank you...
On some days it's worse, I think. I'm not sad in general...it's just that I hate it when people dictate to me what I should be doing.
Oh well. Thank you
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