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Published: 2009-04-02 22:36:50 +0000 UTC; Views: 2196; Favourites: 30; Downloads: 33
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For the Club Comic Project over atWe're making a comic, page by page; each of us adding to the story. Kinda like how by a campfire, someone starts a story, then the next person continues the story and so on and so forth...
So I'm just getting the ball rolling...
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Ash looks like Goku in the last panel, doesn't he?
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Togepi isn't as light as it seems
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either that or its got some muscle that isnt used often
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Sure! What sort of role would you like to have? Writer, artist, or colorist? or some combination of the roles?
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artist or writer would be good
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Will this comic be a AAML, a Looney Tunes/Pokemon Crossover or both? Because that would be amazing.
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it's whatever the club decides
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Cool beginning!
nice drawing and cool colo.
I am looking forward to see more of your project^^!
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This is a really good idea! A collectively-made comic!
This way, everyone involved gets an opportunity to show and practice their artistic talent and style... and, from what I've heard so far, the development of the story is very free and open! So, anything could happen... no limits on the creators' cleverness and imagination...
Exciting! I wonder what'll happen next? Heck, I wonder what's happening NOW? Where are they? Why are they there?
And, I wonder what the comic as a whole is going to look like? Will it have a generally unified look, or will it be a crazy mish-mash of different styles?
Well, on this page, the characters' anatomy and poses are well drawn. The shading is quite good, too. When I look at it closely, it's not quite as neat and smooth as I like it, but nevertheless it's effective. It's effective at giving the appearance of early morning light.
The shadows are quite well drawn, except on the last panel. Those ones could have been drawn better - especially around Brock. His shadow looks like a dark colour that's been slathered around his legs, rather than a realistic casting of shade.
I quite like the way you painted the soil, with its texture and different tones. The first panel is alright, but maybe you could have drawn the sun with a fuzzier outline, or a lighter outline, to give more of an impression of heat and bright light (still, the faint, subtle light emanating off the sun looks nice). Also, those clouds look very rough. Maybe more time could have been put into their shape, and maybe they could have been drawn with an outine in a fainter colour and had softer, gentler shading - to give the impression of lightness that you usually get from clouds.
It's impressive when a comic can tell a lot about a situation - and even tell a story - even though it doesn't have any words or dialogue... and this comic page of yours is like that!
Even though none of the characters talk in this page, you can tell quite a bit about them, their situation and their relationship with each other - even if you've never heard of Pokemon or Ash, Pikachu, Misty, Brock and Togepi! The way you've drawn them all in such relaxed, casual positions, and the way you've drawn their facial expressions as quite content and happy... these suggest that they're all at ease with each other, and that, whatever they're doing out in open countryside, they're probably doing something that they freely chose to do, or at least something that they WANT to do.
I imagine it must take thought, and effort, to show situations and relationships between characters without explaining them with dialogue, so well done!
The best of luck to the 1stpoketrio-club in this brilliant new project of theirs!
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Well, I only have Open Canvas at my disposal as of now, so there's only so much I could do with it. But yeah, I would have liked to do more with this page.
Hopefully this project works out, so far it's having a slow start...
anyhow, thanks for your analysis ^__^
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Arrrrrgh! I'm so sorry! I didn't mean to post this ridiculously long comment TWICE! Once is probably more than enough! Oh, geez, sorry. I'll try and delete one of them.
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Well, I've checked to see if I can delete my comments, and it turns out I can't. Sorry. If you don't want my comments cluttering up your deviation, it looks like it's up to you to hide them, da-wabbit.
Again, sorry if I caused any annoyance. I didn't mean to spam you.
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This is a really good idea! A collectively-made comic!
This way, everyone involved gets an opportunity to show and practice their artistic talent and style... and, from what I've heard so far, the development of the story is very free and open! So, anything could happen... no limits on the creators' cleverness and imagination...
Exciting! I wonder what'll happen next? Heck, I wonder what's happening NOW? Where are they? Why are they there?
And, I wonder what the comic as a whole is going to look like? Will it have a generally unified look, or will it be a crazy mish-mash of different styles?
Well, on this page, the characters' anatomy and poses are well drawn. The shading is quite good, too. When I look at it closely, it's not quite as neat and smooth as I like it, but nevertheless it's effective. It's effective at giving the appearance of early morning light.
The shadows are quite well drawn, except on the last panel. Those ones could have been drawn better - especially around Brock. His shadow looks like a dark colour that's been slathered around his legs, rather than a realistic casting of shade.
I quite like the way you painted the soil, with its texture and different tones. The first panel is alright, but maybe you could have drawn the sun with a fuzzier outline, or a lighter outline, to give more of an impression of heat and bright light (still, the faint, subtle light emanating off the sun looks nice). Also, those clouds look very rough. Maybe more time could have been put into their shape, and maybe they could have been drawn with an outine in a fainter colour and had softer, gentler shading - to give the impression of lightness that you usually get from clouds.
It's impressive when a comic can tell a lot about a situation - and even tell a story - even though it doesn't have any words or dialogue... and this comic page of yours is like that!
Even though none of the characters talk in this page, you can tell quite a bit about them, their situation and their relationship with each other - even if you've never heard of Pokemon or Ash, Pikachu, Misty, Brock and Togepi! The way you've drawn them all in such relaxed, casual positions, and the way you've drawn their facial expressions as quite content and happy... these suggest that they're all at ease with each other, and that, whatever they're doing out in open countryside, they're probably doing something that they freely chose to do, or at least something that they WANT to do.
I imagine it must take thought, and effort, to show situations and relationships between characters without explaining them with dialogue, so well done!
The best of luck to the 1stpoketrio-club in this brilliant new project of theirs!
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LOL, poor Ash! I wonder what will happen in the next scene- any time frame on page 2?
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the teams have a month time-limit
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Yay Togepi!!! I luvs Togepi! I'm really glad that that's what's in the egg that Cynthia gives you in Platinum. (Nothing against Happini, but Togepi's cooler. as are it's evolved forms.)
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Togepi is my fave baby pokemon ^^
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Yay Togepi! And Togetic is pretty good, too. Haven't really used Togekiss yet, though I plan to evolve mine as soon as it learns a couple more moves I want.
Togepi was what led to my double-duplicate team I had once in Silver. Namely, two fly types (Lugia and Togetic) two water types (Red Gyarados and Totodile's evolution) and then two others that I don't remember, except that one was either Onix or Graveler. The other might've been Machoke. But the three that I'd almost always have regardless of starter were Lugia, Togetic, and Red Rampage (as I always named him).
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Is it just me, or is it kinda sad that I can still remember that stuff this well?
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Great work!
Poor Ash -_- I know the feeling of having something jump on you first thing in the morning.. (Damn cats ¬¬
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cool idea, I wonder if it will get out of control like most camp stories I remember having xD
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not too out of control i hope...but i hope for some fun randomness
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so great
i really love Ash 
Togepi is cuuute XD
Misty brock and pika too
*luvz*
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Heh, dang I should have volunteered for this!
Amazing work!
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YAY typical Ash 
Is the whole story without text? Oo I only wanny know...
Great first page!
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No, there could be talking.
Just that the program that I have is not so great with text...I misss photoshop
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Why don't you have Photoshop anymore?
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my desktop that has photoshop died...so I'm using my laptop and it has no photoshop...just mspaint...and open canvas...
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EDIT XD I love Togepi here! It's sooo cute
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