nareia [2004-08-27 07:13:38 +0000 UTC]

spoken aloud, this would be...
incredible.
{{but i wholly disagree.
*shrugs*
}}of course, you probably knew that when you pointed me here
i have respect for what this piece is, and think it is written fantastically.
however i have issues with it ideologically... *shakes head*
powerful emotions tho. good job. really moving.

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DampeS8N [2004-06-05 07:03:25 +0000 UTC]

Been long enough.... so for those who wondered and didn't get this poem... I wrote it in response to the feelings I had when some asshole priest I was talking to tried to tell me that I belonged to god and that by trying to defy him I was not only damning myself (which he felt I didn;t care about) but that I was tearing at the heart of god.... what he didn't understand (and many christians don't understand) is that I know what he believes but that doesn't mean I believe it... he (and they) tend to believe that I (or we in the sense of any non-believer) that I know he is write but want to be defiant..... I had to write something...so having just thought up the concept of impromptu poetry on DA as a form of performance art... I took the idea and ran with it..... I'm considering performing this piece at poetry readings.......

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Axsuraziel [2003-12-21 07:11:03 +0000 UTC]

I like it but I got lost about halfway through. oh well. you're good there's no doubt about that.

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chaosmuse [2003-12-05 02:54:36 +0000 UTC]

okay... um... woah.

where'd you come from??? and... and... how'd you get so GOOD!?!?!? you asked ~ rockin-steadily what was wrong with it... but... i don't think there's ANYTHING wrong with it. except maybe a spelling error, and i think it got cut off...

this is damned good.

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rockin-steadily [2003-11-26 02:51:00 +0000 UTC]

holy guacamole! this one is awesome...so many powerful images bombard the retina...so many forceful words attack mine ears...this one is awesome its even better cuz its inpromtu

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