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davidfoxfire — Scarlet PI--Strip 9
Published: 2004-11-18 03:13:03 +0000 UTC; Views: 5561; Favourites: 29; Downloads: 96
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Well, some of you noticed a change of the shade in Jim's shirt in the previous page. I brainstormed about a sunset comming through a window. Maybe I worked on that idea with Scarlet's hair.Related content
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So interesting to read all of this again!
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You know, you should really experiment wiht a few more panels to a page. Your 2-3 p2p style is really wearing on me.
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Um...
Didn't she talk before?
Also, I can see what you were trying to do in the second panel, but it kind of backfired on you dude. He came off looking almost... froglike.
And is it me, or does Scarlet look especially cross-eyed in the first panel?
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I think that's not so much a faux paus on the writer as it's Jim's brain trying to take all of this weird stuff in!
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Hmmm. Foreshortening trick. In the previous page, Jim stumbled over the upturned table and landed on the sofa, and in this page, he manages to lean up to see Scarlet's head somewhat better. It was a very awkward pose.
As for what Scar said, riddle me this: What would you expect Scar to say when she wakes up in someone's home, it's owner freaking, and with her head off no less?
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Agreed, it is a most strange pose. Perhaps it's also the angle.
I don't know what I would have her say, just to me it felt "funny" but that could just be her way of speaking.
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Oh dear me, there isn't a nice way to say this Davey, but panel two seems....painful to imagine. Jim's legs seem to either be coming up from either side of him, at a rather high angle or he is doing the worlds most painful splits in existance. Also, you can see the couch outline clipping through his legs. There as well seems to be something odd about Scarlet saying "I think we should introduce ourselves, shall we". Jim's right arm (our perspective the one on the left) seems to be suffering from some sort of swelling. Either that, or his right is suffering from some sort of shrinkage. The rest is good, I don't have any other complaints besides that, maybe a little bit more detail on his ears
It's ALIVE! ALIVE!!!
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