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Dawn22Eagle — AU headcanon: Raven's parents

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Published: 2016-09-13 20:22:58 +0000 UTC; Views: 2397; Favourites: 60; Downloads: 18
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Description I'm back with some more headcanons! Ain't you happy?!

Soo, I decided to draw all of my adopted next gen OCs' (Hev might be an exception... but we'll see) and opted to start with Raven Dusk, Luna's adopted bat pony daughter. Warning guys, the story below is really really sad. Like, really really depressing - I like to torture my favorite characters with tragic backstories, so yeah. Be prepared.



The stallion and mare above, Steelworker and Crepuscular Wish, were a happy couple living in a very small town outside Equestria, in the North regions. Despite a few bigots glowering at them because of Wish's appearance and species, they'd planned on getting married and go live somewhere else with their first foal, whom the mare was already carrying. Unfortunately, invaders occupied the small town and the area around it just days before the couple's wedding, but nobody was exaggeratedly worried since barbarians and soldiers usually spent little time there before moving away (seeing as there was absolutely nothing valuable there). Steelworker protected his mare fiercely in the first few fights, but the arrival of the clan's leader changed everything. 
He was a peculiar looking stallion named Oasis, a violent and cruel battler whose origins were both Zebrican and Equestrian. His striped pelt betrayed clearly his Zebra heritage, and he belonged to the race called "zony" (zebra+pony) or "zonkey" (zebra+donkey), gifted of incredible stamina and adaptability. Though Oasis was extremely young, he was the most experienced mercenary among the ones who attacked the village, and didn't lose any time in making his intentions clear.

The moment Steelworker noticed the way the stallion hybrid lay his eyes on Crepuscular Wish, he knew they were both doomed. Blocked and fleshed with daggers, Steel wasn't able to do anything as he watched Oasis walk away, the chained bat mare few steps behind him. The heart-broken glance she threw at him was the very last they shared: she never managed to know what his destiny was, even though she can easily imagine it.

The invaders fled that same day and went back to their nomadic lifestyle dragging Crepuscular Wish with them. They often set up tents or more complex camps, and the mare always stayed in Oasis' luxurious lodging. When Wish, previously treated decently and left alone most of the time, started giving clear signs of her pregnancy, she was abused horridly and left to starve until Oasis was sure she'd lost Steel's foal. At that point, the mare had lost any hope and simply accepted defenselessly whatever her troubled fate presented her.

More months passed painfully and as soon as the exotic stallion decided he'd given Crepuscular Wish enough respite, Oasis' savage mistreatements began once more. Within the distance of some weeks, he let her catch her breath and seemingly forgot about her for shorter and shorter periods of time. After a whole year, Wish realized her greatest terror had become reality: she was pregnant with Oasis' foal. Conflicted thoughts and feelings raced through her mind: suicide was among the most considered, but she was certain that if she was caught during the act or if she failed in any way she would've suffered much worse. She eventually decided to wait and see how the tragic event would play out, behaving once more as a numb and helpless victim. 

As the birth date got closer, Oasis started acting in a much more pleasurable way, treating the mare he'd violated as if he loved her and carefully ignoring the subject of the incoming baby. When the foal was born, a very small bat filly with her father's detailed markings and white socks (with the only difference that she had spots instead of stripes), the beatings and carnal assaults started again. It went on for a few more weeks, then Oasis suddenly stopped and was reminded he had to get rid of his bastard child as soon as possible, no matter how. Since the barbarians had reached the Everfree Forest during their travelings, he decided to leave the weak filly at the opposite edge of it, the part facing the small town of Ponyville. Now completely devastated, Crepuscular Wish didn't even try to fight her abuser anymore and let herself die in agony.
Shortly after, Oasis lost his life (though nobody knows if purposefully or not) during a bloody battle with the Royal Guards, who'd finally located the despicable criminals. The rest of the clan was imprisoned, but Wish's corpse was never found.

Fortunately, a few days later the Princess of the night noticed a young bat pony filly hidden in the woods, and rescued them to take care of her as her own child.



See? I'd told you. Tragic, I know, and probably cliché as well. But the idea really hit me so I couldn't help but add it to my AU. Tell me what you think about it and the drawing itself! 
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Comments: 16

teabloom [2016-10-12 00:31:57 +0000 UTC]

To be honest, I have never read a tragic backstory that has been this well done. With most characters, these stories of abuse are taken lightly, and they hardly ever affect the characters in a negative way. In Crepuscular's case, we can see how negatively these events affect her, and even push her to suicidal thoughts. What I'm trying to say is, you really wrote her tragic backstory well. You made it very believable, and though it was angsty, it wasn't overly angsty. Nice job!

I do enjoy Steelworker's design. Though it's simple, what's there is nice. However, I believe you would benefit from making his eyes a lighter red, or perhaps even changing them to yellow or light orange? I think that would help them pop a bit more, but that's just a suggestion.

Crepuscular is designed very well. Her colors go together nicely. The dark blue of her mane goes nicely with her lighter colored coat. However, I must criticise the drawing you did of her at the bottom, where she's chained up. The coloring is a little too dark, and it makes the snout disappear into the hair almost, not to mention her face does look a bit squished. However, the shading on the metal collar isn't bad, and the hair is lovely as usual

Finally, Oasis looks absolutely bad ass. Usually, when I am presented a pony with all these body markings and accessories, it looks cluttered, and the colors often clash horribly with one another. Here, however, Oasis's scars and stripes are distanced evenly enough from each other so that they don't look cluttered in the slightest. Not to mention the colors you chose go nicely together because they are slightly darker or lighter variations of one another. And I love how his hair ties and eyes are the same color. It ties the whole thing together. On one final note, those plates on his legs look hella cool.

Amazing job on this one Dawn!

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Dawn22Eagle In reply to teabloom [2016-10-12 11:44:20 +0000 UTC]

Ahh, how I'd missed these long poems of yours <3

First of all, thanks a lot for everything. I always find your small critiques very helpful ^^
The story was pretty difficult to write. I was actually planning on writing a sort of one-shot about it, or something like that, but I often have trouble "balancing" tragedy and realism when it comes to these kinds of things. I'll see what I can do. I'm happy I managed to do it while writing the headcanon, though!

His character probably won't be shown anywhere else. I just wanted to show how Wish's mate was, and how he clearly wasn't Raven's father. You might be right on the eyes, though I don't think I'll worry too much over his design, which I created in like 10 seconds.

I wanted to make Crepuscular's colors a bit darker than Raven's, but it was hard not to choose the exact same shades. I ended up opting for that dark blue-ish, which probably wasn't a good idea since it completely mixes with the mane's violet... But whatever. The drawing you mentioned was meant to remain as a sketch, so I can understand why Wish's face looks kinda off as you said.

Oasis' design is probably among my favorites, I had a lot of fun with it. It's terribly difficult to render any time, but I guess it's worth the effort after all :3

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Sylph264 [2016-09-26 22:08:13 +0000 UTC]

Considering how evil he is, I really hate to say it, but I seriously love Oasis' design. Your choice of markings and accessories is perfect as far as I'm concerned. ^^ Your story is very well written! Wish's imprisonment was horrifically tragic, and your writing is able to make that abundantly clear while still retaining enough focus to continue telling the tale. Well done. ^^

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Dawn22Eagle In reply to Sylph264 [2016-09-27 18:35:00 +0000 UTC]

Again, thank you so much :'3 As I've already told you a million times or so, your comments always make my day <3

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DingoBreath [2016-09-17 06:52:54 +0000 UTC]

oh wow this was really sad lol. i love it. i like reading more dark heacanons from people! it inspires me to do a more realistic direction to my next gen.

i really feel for raven's mom...what happened to her body?

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Dawn22Eagle In reply to DingoBreath [2016-09-17 12:09:16 +0000 UTC]

Thank you a lot <3 That's what happens when I read too many II World War books lol

Her body was probably hidden in the woods not too far from where Oasis abandoned Raven, so the royal guards wouldn't find it (they effectively didn't).

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MissAppolonia [2016-09-16 19:55:26 +0000 UTC]

A pity Oasis is such a cruel individual, as he also is a handsome one, especially with his mane down.
A wonderfully dark backstory, thank you for sharing.

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Dawn22Eagle In reply to MissAppolonia [2016-09-17 12:02:36 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much :3
I always regret giving bad guys handsome designs, but I was too tempted XD

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Sin-of-Invidia [2016-09-13 20:44:25 +0000 UTC]

IT'S SO DARK I LOVE IT

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Dawn22Eagle In reply to Sin-of-Invidia [2016-09-14 15:16:34 +0000 UTC]

Thank you <3

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Artevotti [2016-09-13 20:37:33 +0000 UTC]

oh no
oh N O

mi dispiace così tanto per Raven! e anche per Crepuscolar wish TmT
Oasis è così un figo però
solo che è stronzo

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Dawn22Eagle In reply to Artevotti [2016-09-14 15:18:15 +0000 UTC]

Oasis è sexy, ma ben poco raccomandabile ahimè
Adesso però Ravey è con mamma Luna! Non ti consola la cosa? Anche se rimane quasi scorbutica come Radi XD

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RavenHeart1984 [2016-09-13 20:33:53 +0000 UTC]

poor steelworker,poor crepuscular wish,poor baby.

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VampMaiden [2016-09-13 20:32:45 +0000 UTC]

holy shit


i feel really bad now



poor Crepuscular ;w:

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Dawn22Eagle In reply to VampMaiden [2016-09-14 15:16:47 +0000 UTC]

Sorry :C

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VampMaiden In reply to Dawn22Eagle [2016-09-14 17:24:58 +0000 UTC]

Its ok xD i read it at my own risk

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