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Description Acceptance is a valued thing in all worlds. In ours it is a forgotten thing.
They have always said that our world has a lot in common with yours.
Stepping in should require no adjustment at all.


                                       Welcome to World No. 0042

Also Known As: Two Types and Technology
(Because Most Inhabitants Think That’s A Stupid Name, It Is Affectionately Referred To As: Triple T)



   PART ONE: The Beginning of An End


   Calling us ‘Mottley’s Crew’ started as a joke, and there was only one reason the name stuck as assuredly as it did:
   Iggy’s purity.
   He’s 100% genuine Cynimpial, which makes him slightly more memorable than most people. We should have been ‘Camille’s Crew’, but obviously they’d never heard of alliteration.
   So we were ‘Mottley’s Crew’ and thus we remain.

   I believe a little backtracking might be in order.
First there was me: Camille Mason. I was born on the fourteenth of Septambe in the Year of Enamelle – which makes me nineteen years old.  
   My mother died when I was three and didn’t have any living relations so I ended up in Art’s Orphanage; and then the State Orphanage; then Helping Hands Orphanage… then there was the one I can never remember – and finally Raldon’s Orphanage.
   By that time I was seven, very angry and very ready to meet someone like Harry.
   He’s a bit of a wonder, really. Once you meet him chances are you’ll never meet anyone quite like him again.
   He appeared at Raldon’s a month or so after I was sent there – a skinny, dirty-faced five year old who rang the doorbell, said ‘Hi!’ when Ms Raldon answered, and waltzed right on in. Everyone was terrified of him at first, probably because he smiled constantly, didn’t blink much and ate more food than would have been considered possible for someone so thin.
   He vanquished my growing cynicism with one look from his huge, cheerful cerise-coloured eyes and from that day onwards we were nigh inseparable.
   I was always there to defend him when he was bullied, which only happened in the beginning because everyone eventually realised the only reason you could ever dislike him was because you couldn’t dislike him.
   Naturally you would assume that a young child with such charisma and curious yet pleasing aesthetics (he cleaned up well after being so filthy the day he arrived) would adopt out in an instant. But Harry had decided he liked it with me at Raldon’s and devised a cunning plan for botching his interviews. This is how it usually went with obvious variation as Harry got older:

   Potential Father: Hey there, kiddo, you’re Harry, aren’t you?
   Harry: Yes!
   Potential Mother: (simpers)
   Potential Father: (beams) Well, Harry, can you tell me a little bit about yourself?
   Harry: I’m gay, sir.
   Potential Father: … Do you know what that means?
   Harry: Yessir.
   Potential Mother: But you’re six years old.
   Harry: Yes. I am. I’m also gay.

   And for some reason that put them off without fail every single time. I got in trouble when he first did it because Ms Raldon assumed I’d planted the idea in his head. But Harry had picked it up all on his own, and when he was fifteen I discovered he no longer considered it to be a joke.
   ‘I’m not leaving. I rather thought I’d made that inexplicably clear.’ Harry was seated in the interview room with Ms Raldon frowning at him from across the table. I stood in the doorway, waiting impatiently. Dragonball Z was about to start.
   ‘I don’t mind that, Harry. You know the deal, though. You’ll be sixteen in a few weeks and you shall have to get a part-time job like Camille.’ Harry nodded and moved to get up but Ms Raldon raised a hand and drew a deep breath. ‘I just wonder… was it necessary for you to be so rude to all those parents?’
   ‘Sylvie,’ Harry said evenly. ‘They were rude to me.’
   ‘Oh Harry, stop it! I know you’re not –’
   ‘I am.’
   Ms Raldon paused, processing. ‘You are?’ Harry nodded again, smiling grimly. ‘Oh.’ Ms Raldon said, somewhat defeated.
   ‘Indeed.’ Harry let out a small giggle and joined me at the doorway. I was staring at him with my mouth open.
   I didn’t say anything until we were seated on the couch with Iggy and Xeeva.
   ‘But…’ I managed. And that was as far as I got.
   ‘Why else do you think I never fawned over Xeeva like all the other boys?’ Harry said quite serenely, curling his knees to his chest and turning on the TV with the remote.
   ‘What?’ Iggy asked. Xeeva, who was seated on the floor, turned to glare.
   ‘I’m gay.’ Harry said, unphased and flicking through TV channels at lightning speed.
   ‘Yeah, we know. Total fag. Though I do think that one’s getting a bit old. Next time tell them you have leprosy or something.’ Iggy muttered, his attention returned to the screen.
   ‘Iggy, I don’t think he’s kidding.’ I told him bracingly. Harry grinned as realisation dawned with painful slowness on Iggy’s face.
Xeeva rolled her eyes and said, ‘Gross,’ while I smiled sheepishly and Iggy slid himself to the farthest reaches of the couch away from Harry.
   I’ll be honest and say I still didn’t believe him. Not until the whole Simon thing happened – but now isn’t the time for that particular story. Although I will say this: Iggy gave him the most beautiful black eye I’ve ever seen.


   Oh! My bad. Xeeva and our name-sake, Iggy.


   Iggy also rang the bell.
   Ms Raldon had opened the door, and there he was: kneeling on the doormat, gazing defiantly up at her, his little arms wrapped around and even littler Xeeva, whom he was clutching to his heaving chest. They were both soaking wet despite the sun setting in the clear sky behind them.
   ‘I saw it.’ Iggy panted. ‘She was in a bag and they chucked her into the river.’
   Ms Raldon dropped to her knees and reached out to take Xeeva from him, but he refused. He rearranged his arms, heavy with his sopping jumper, around Xeeva’s shoulders. Ms Raldon opened her mouth to make a second appeal when Harry and I came down the stairs behind her.
   ‘Fetch some towels, will you?’ she said urgently. Our first glimpse of Iggy and Xeeva was short lived as we backed away down the corridor, horrified by the fear in Ms Raldon’s usually calm and collected expression. I distinctly remember seeing one of Iggy’s bare purple feet sticking out from behind his folded knees and wondering if he was deathly ill or diseased or both.
   ‘Has she told you her name?’ Ms Raldon asked while we were gone. Iggy shook his head.
   ‘What’s your name?’
   ‘Ignacius Braums Mottley.’  
   Despite all, Ms Raldon later told me, she couldn’t help but spare a moment to blink.
   ‘Well, Ignacius –’
   ‘Iggy.’
   ‘Iggy. I can’t help her unless you let me carry her inside.’
   ‘I’ll do that.’ He said stubbornly as we returned. ‘I carried her here.’ He stood then, lifting Xeeva as he did so. Ms Raldon fussily wrapped a towel around him as Harry and I exchanged a glance. This boy was remarkably stronger than he looked. It was then I remembered his foot and took my double-take. Sure enough where his pants ended there it was, a dull shade of puce. His other foot was encased in a muddy sneaker… he must have lost the other one –
  ‘Hey!’ he barked in my direction, amber-coloured eyes flashing dangerously. ‘Stop it!’ Satisfied with my apologetic flush he turned back to Ms Raldon. ‘Where can I put her down?’
   For the first time Xeeva stirred. If it hadn’t been for her breathing and occasional shuddering before I would have thought her dead. Her eyes, previously screwed tight shut, opened. She blinked twice, sighed, and shut them again.
   ‘Through here,’ Ms Raldon broke the silence that followed. ‘Down this corridor.’
   She led the way. Harry and I trailed behind.
   Iggy gently placed Xeeva on the couch and readjusted the old coat wrapped around her body. He then turned to look at us and seemed to shrink slightly under our gaze. He no longer appeared remotely capable of carrying even the smallest girl. He was thin, malnourished, his dark, wet hair lank and dripping. His eyes, although striking, were exhausted. He drove his hands into the pockets of his faded jumper, but not before I noticed they were purple too.
   Ms Raldon moved forward and touched her hand to Xeeva’s forehead. Xeeva stirred once more and uttered a little whimper.
   ‘She’s alright.’ Ms Raldon said, more to herself than anyone else. ‘We are going to have to get you both dry clothes.’ She directed at Iggy with surprising sternness. Iggy bristled.
   ‘No way.’ He growled.
   ‘I’ve already noticed, dear. No one’s going to do anything to you here.’
   Shocked over again by the hollow, aching sadness in Ms Raldon’s tone I wished she would explain what was going on. ‘She is too, isn’t she?’ Ms Raldon indicated Xeeva with a nod of her head.
   ‘And what if she is?’ Iggy demanded.
   ‘Then I’ll take her in. I do not discriminate and I never have. Iggy,’ his ears, which were longer than any I had ever seen, pricked as she said his name. He appeared disarmed; surprised by her caring. ‘Will you be staying too, then?’ His ears fell as he hesitated. He watched Xeeva.
   ‘Yeah. For a bit, I guess.’ He murmured.
   ‘Ok. Harry, can you go find them some dry clothes?’ Harry darted off, leaving me feeling even more uncomfortable in his absence. ‘How old are you, Iggy?’
   ‘Seven.’
   Seven?! He couldn’t possibly be seven; that was Harry’s age. Harry could barely lift our dog, and she was tiny.
   ‘And how long have you been on the streets?’
   ‘Since I can remember.’
   ‘What about your parents?’
   Iggy scoffed. ‘Gone. Off somewhere making more Cyns to dump.’
It sounded like he said ‘sins’, but the way he said it made me sure he was talking about something else... Or something more.
   ‘Her legs are clear,’ Ms Raldon said, nodding to Xeeva again.
Iggy bent over her and carefully rolled her onto her side then pulled away the coat. She was wearing a singlet top that had ridden up on her waist and thin shorts which could only be pyjamas. Her pallid tea-coloured skin gave way to a shocking continuation of her spine: a tail of nut-brown fur.
   ‘Her hands are fine but her feet aren’t, look,’ Iggy pointed solemnly and Ms Raldon and I leant in. Sure enough her feet were a shade darker than the rest of her skin. I examined them closely. Their texture didn’t look like fur, but then neither was it skin. It looked velvety and I was gripped by the urge to test if this was true. Perhaps I would have if I hadn’t been so afraid that this was a top-secret, highly-contagious medical condition.
   ‘Just her feet, and a tail’s perfectly manageable. That’s hardly a reason.’ Ms Raldon whispered furiously.
   ‘I know.’ Iggy agreed sadly.
   Harry returned and I hastily sidled over to him as he presented Ms Raldon with the clothes he had found. The other children had followed him and were standing back, curious.
   ‘Henry, Emily, Rosalie – back upstairs, now!’ Ms Raldon ordered. They slunk away, disappointed. ‘Iggy, this is Harry and Camille. They’ll help you with her. I just need to make a quick phone call.’ She handed the clothes to Iggy and crossed the room to the door of her office.
    ‘Gonna tell the police to come pick me up and take me to a reserve?’ Iggy called mutinously after her. She turned and smiled.
   ‘No. But keep up with the attitude and I will.’ Satisfied by his wary glare, she closed her door. Iggy moved his eyes to us, his expression unchanging.
   ‘Call me Cam,’ I offered with great trepidation.
   ‘I’m Ignacius Braums Mottley, but… yeah.’ He replied begrudgingly.
   ‘Hi Iggy.’ Harry smiled.
   ‘Xeeva.’
   Iggy turned back to the couch instantly. She had rolled onto her other side to face us. I will never forget how small she looked in that moment, or how her thin, navy-coloured hair clung to the clammy skin of her face. Her hazel eyes were huge, even bigger than Harry’s, and they were filled with fear.
   ‘Xeeva LeAmi, ten Hawley Close, Benjamin Square, five-zero-double-two, twelfth of Julay, Year of Copper.’ She recited breathlessly in a voice even smaller than she was. We remained silent, stunned. Harry calculated, and then asked:
   ‘You’re six?’
   She nodded.
   ‘Benjamin Square?’ I repeated, hushed. ‘You live there?’
   She nodded again. I didn’t hesitate. I ran for Ms Raldon’s door and wrenched it open without knocking.
   ‘Ms Raldon!’
   ‘Shh,’ she held up a finger angrily and continued talking into the phone. ‘Yes, I’m well aware of that, but there is no denying…’ The voice on the other end cut her off.
   ‘Her name’s Xeeva LeAmi. She’s from Benjamin Square,’ I blurted out.
   Ms Raldon’s eyes widened and she remained perfectly still for a moment before placing the phone in the receiver without saying goodbye to whoever she’d been talking to. She picked it up again and dialled a new number.
   ‘Hello, listings for LeAmi in Benjamin Square, please?’ she asked politely. We waited. The voice on the other end returned but I couldn’t hear what was said. ‘Thankyou. Goodbye.’ She put the phone down more gingerly this time. ‘They say there’s no one living there by that name.’
   ‘But… why would she lie?’ I felt the anti-climax weigh heavily upon me. Ms Raldon sighed. It was a long time before she replied.
   ‘I guess Xeeva LeAmi is what we’ll call her.’ She slid her keyboard over to her and tapped the name into her computer. ‘I’ll call the police and tell them what’s happened. They can do a wider search for LeAmi but I don’t think they’ll find anything.’
   ‘She’s only six. Why would she lie?’ I repeated myself more forcibly.
   ‘It doesn’t matter. What matters is that we believe her.’ She fell silent, watching me. I understood. I was not to ask any more questions. ‘I’ve got to call Jack. I’m going to need help taking two beds upstairs from the storeroom. I suppose he can help with dinner, too. Will you go make sure Harry is being helpful and not talking their ears off?’ I turned dejectedly. ‘Run them a bath, Camille!’ Ms Raldon called after me.
   I dragged my feet for the short stretch of corridor and returned to the common room. I froze when I reached the doorway, transfixed by what I saw. Iggy’s dirty jumper lay discarded at his feet, and he was pulling his tattered long-sleeved shirt over his head. Harry was babbling happily and holding a dry t-shirt ready.
   ‘…but the food is nice – wow!’ Harry gasped as Iggy dropped his shirt on top of his jumper. ‘That’s so cool!’
   Iggy blushed and wrapped his arms around himself. ‘What’s wrong with you?’ he said. ‘Nobody thinks that.’
   ‘But it’s so cool,’ Harry noticed me in the doorway. ‘Look Cam! Isn’t that neat?’
   I was looking. Unabashedly, now that Harry had given me an excuse to stare. Iggy’s arms had the same velvety sheen on them as Xeeva’s feet, and they were purple to his shoulders where they blended into his normal-coloured skin in a myriad of mottled spots.
   ‘Gimme the shirt, please,’ Iggy muttered, rather desperately. Harry handed it to him.
   ‘I’m sorry.’ Harry apologised, confused. ‘Your skin’s just really pretty.’ Iggy grew redder still.
   ‘You’re weird.’ He laughed nervously as he sat down to pull off his one remaining sneaker. I noticed with a jolt that he had a tail much like Xeeva’s, only perhaps a little scruffier.
   ‘Are your legs like that too?’ Harry asked. Iggy froze in the motion of tugging off his sock.
   ‘Well, yeah.’ He looked up at Harry, highly affronted. ‘I don’t want you to see.’
   ‘Alright.’ Harry screwed his eyes shut and held out the pair of pants he’d brought down. ‘Cam, you shut your eyes too.’ Harry called. I already had.
   After a moment of listening to the shuffling of clothes Iggy said we could open our eyes. Xeeva was bundled up on the couch, wrapped in every towel we’d brought. She was also clutching a steaming mug of tea that was so big for her she had to rest it on the edge of the couch. Her hands shook with the weight of it when she brought it to her lips.
   ‘I got that for her,’ Harry explained. ‘It’s green. Iggy didn’t want any.’ Iggy now sat protectively next to Xeeva on the couch, watching her drink.
   ‘Uhm,’ I hummed nervously. ‘Iggy… are you… sick?’
   ‘No.’ he replied. I was relieved he didn’t appear offended. ‘I’m pure.’
   ‘Pure?’ Harry repeated, nonplussed.
   ‘Pure Cynimpial. Don’t you know what that is?’ We shook our heads. He didn’t seem surprised, though. ‘Your grandparents at least must have had a lot of Cynimpial in them. Neither of you have the right cartilage shaping in your ears; and your noses are fairly dark.’
   ‘We don’t have any grandparents.’ Harry said.
   ‘Oh. Neither do I.’ Iggy shrugged.
   I hadn’t understood a single thing he’d just said. I’d heard of Cynimpials before: we were taught in school that they were the native People of Triple T. But that was all they taught us. I’d never realised that Cynimpials looked different to everyone else. That was when it dawned on me: if Iggy was pure Cynimpial; and Harry and I had Cynimpial in us… what was the rest of us? That question set many things in motion for me, but the answer shall be explained at a later stage.  
   I’m not sure if it’s worth mentioning, but that was also the day I became truly aware of just how cruel the world can be.
   But anyway, plenty of time for angst and morbidity later. Back to Xeeva.
   I mentioned our dog before, didn’t I? (Never fear, this is relevant) Well, Ms Raldon bought her as a puppy from the shelter as a present for us all shortly after I’d first come to Raldon’s. We all agreed that it was very appropriate we should own an orphaned dog. We named her Millie. She was a tiny, silky-haired, grey mutt and for the first few days, whenever she wasn’t sleeping, she followed me everywhere, too afraid to be alone.
   I was overjoyed. I believed then that she had chosen me as her favorite and her protector and that we would be together always. But as soon as Millie got used to her surroundings she grew more independent, and she eventually matured to be proud, haughty and far too clever for own good. Of course we all loved her regardless, it was better than having a dumb dog. But she was never very affectionate… more like a cat.
   With Xeeva it was exactly the same. (See? Told you)
   For the first few months she barely said a word, and she clung to Iggy (who had continued to stay on past what anyone would consider “a bit” of time), Harry and I like we were surrogate parents. Though after awhile she grew up, and taught herself to enjoy her own company. Regardless of her aloofness later, I know that it was at this stage we all bonded so tightly. It was also then that we were dubbed ‘Mottley’s Crew’.
   Jack, Ms Raldon’s boyfriend, would call us that when he came over.
   ‘There they all are, doing nothing in the way of getting adopted ‘cause they’ve got each other,’ he’d laugh kindly. I always liked Jack. ‘What a motley crew.’
   Eventually he realised its potential as a pun, laughed until he cried, and never called us by our real names again. We became a single unit. One. Together.

   Let us return to the present. I’m nineteen, remember? Iggy and Harry are seventeen, and Xeeva is sixteen. We are older, wiser (possibly) and closer than we’ve ever been. Especially today. Today has been a total nightmare.
   And darn it all, it’s about to get worse.
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Comments: 73

ZCEC [2012-01-26 01:32:52 +0000 UTC]

omg, i LOVE THIS!!! i loved it so much...i read this entire first chapter to my mother because, gosh darnit, it was cute and funny and right up our alley.

i have decided to start reading this because i fell in love with the pictures you have for this (especially FarrerexHarry!)

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Eeba-ism In reply to ZCEC [2012-07-25 21:25:20 +0000 UTC]

Oh my gosh -- thank you!! Sorry for such a late reply, my inbox is terrible mess. Thank you for reading, and I'm glad you like it! Please extend my thanks to your mother, as well! <3!

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ZCEC In reply to Eeba-ism [2012-07-25 22:25:17 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome!! Also, I was happy to see new chapters~! (I actually freaked out and mom was like "What is your problem?!" and I just pointed excitedly at the screen and giggled)

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anissadeanna [2010-05-31 19:47:26 +0000 UTC]

wow, my friend sent me a link to your page to read your stuff. She was write. you are good.

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Pardoxismminant [2010-01-17 18:21:03 +0000 UTC]

I liked^^! The part with Harry reminds me of my friend. I used to live in a place where the library had some clubs and stuff. I went there once, saw my friend, so I went to say hi. This other girl named Katie was there.

Me: Sup, Cully. Hey, Katie.
Cullom: I have something to tell you.
Me/Katie: What?
Cullom: I'm gay.
Me: Okay.
Katie: Nice one, Cullom. But for real, what?
Cullom: I'm serious, I'm gay.
Katie: 324u9q8hrosfhse8rhqewofhsdfn!!!??!

It tells you a lot about some people's personalities.. But anyways, first part reminded me of that.

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Meowis [2009-12-22 04:20:46 +0000 UTC]

Ok, I know your characters now O: Surprisingly, I like Xeeva o.o And I didn't thik I would. I guess things will change through the story xP

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Eeba-ism In reply to Meowis [2010-02-08 11:10:31 +0000 UTC]

Well.. she's pretty consistent in her nastiness.. so if you like her now perhaps you'll continue to like her D: Which would make you a rare individual

Thank you so much for reading <3 c: .. and sorry for such a late reply

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Meowis In reply to Eeba-ism [2010-02-08 19:17:08 +0000 UTC]

Well, I've finished reading and she's still between my favorites = ) And nevermind, I can wait

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Meowis [2009-12-22 03:07:41 +0000 UTC]

Ok, I'm finally (after who knows how many time of watching) giving myself time to read this = ) I hope you fear my opinion *puts glasses on and sits properly*.

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Eeba-ism In reply to Meowis [2009-12-22 03:17:57 +0000 UTC]

I do indeed fear your opinion.. especially because the beginning of the story was written so long ago.. and.. I'm a fearful person in general

*brings you tea/coffee/your-favourite-beverage out of subservience*

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Meowis In reply to Eeba-ism [2009-12-22 03:37:39 +0000 UTC]

Oh, I know, I know, I'll try to be gentle *huge somehow disturbing grin*

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MomoCullen [2009-11-27 09:19:42 +0000 UTC]

Ooohh I'm liking this. It's very original, and the writing is very unique and good. Off to read more!

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LovelyVendetta [2009-11-23 17:47:07 +0000 UTC]

Is there a reference-like sort of reason that this world is no. 42?

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Eeba-ism In reply to LovelyVendetta [2009-11-23 23:40:09 +0000 UTC]

... You've read/seen Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy, haven't you? xD

That's why I picked the number 42.. but that's not going to have any significance in the story, it's just a number :3

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LovelyVendetta In reply to Eeba-ism [2009-11-24 01:04:49 +0000 UTC]

Ahaha, yes, I'm quite the fan of the books. They just make me so happy (I mean, really, "the ships hung in the sky much in the same way that bricks don't." It's just so beautiful). And I figured it was no more than a reference; I just found it funny, always being on my forty-two watch.

On an alternate note, I've spent the last few hours of my life reading the remainder of this story-- WORDS CANNOT SUFFICE my deep, DEEP insane love for it. Ferrere is just so adorable, and Cam's wit is so lovely to read. Also I have to admit I've laughed unnecessarily hard at most of the one-liners. xD

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otter-party [2009-10-15 23:37:35 +0000 UTC]

SDKJFHSDKJFH i can't believe i hadn't read this yet. i've just been whoring all of your MC drawings because i love them so much, and now i finally have the STORY behind them. <3333

it's so lovable.

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mathgeek5 [2009-10-09 22:08:27 +0000 UTC]

ok, so I have even finished the chapter yet, but I just have to say right now that my name is Sylvie, and I have never met another Sylvie or read about a character named Sylvie or even met some one who could pronounce my name on their own without prompting, so officially love you for using the name Sylvie. im going to go finish reading now.

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Eeba-ism In reply to mathgeek5 [2010-06-27 04:02:24 +0000 UTC]

I have never met a Sylvie, either!

(this reply is nearly a year late.. which is pretty epic even for me.. I'm so sorry lol xD )

I just wanted to say: thank you so much for reading

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mathgeek5 In reply to Eeba-ism [2010-06-29 01:16:08 +0000 UTC]

Of course!

And maybe that's a record .... don't know how you'd find out though ....

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tysandri [2009-10-02 03:22:49 +0000 UTC]

I admit I haven't been as faithful about reading this as I should have, but I decided tonight to sit down and start reading it from square one. In the past I've skipped around and read bits and pieces, just never the full chapters all at once.

ANYWAY!

You are a great writer!! I was really amazed that you're so well-developed; I figured you could, but I love your style of writing. ^^ I had no idea it was in Cam's POV; that was rather interesting, I must say. I think my favorite part was the descriptions of Iggy's range of wonderful expressions when he showed up with Xee on the doorstep hhahah poor kid.

One thing I thought I should let you know--I got so confused in the middle when Harry first showed up and it said he was seven. I thought I was reading that Cam was 19 at the time Harry arrived, and Harry was 7, and I was like "Wowww that's a big age gap " then I saw later at the end it said Cam was 19 when Iggy and Harry were 17. I dunno if that was on accident or whatever or maybe if you wanted to clarify that when Harry and Iggy were 7, she was 9 or something. cx I just thought I should point it out in case someone else got confused.

Then again I'm a retarded reader haha. Wonderful story, and forgive me if I spam your inbox for the next couple days reading these. ;__;

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Eeba-ism In reply to tysandri [2009-10-02 10:27:04 +0000 UTC]

And my inbox shall delight in your spam C:

Heeh, I've done the same with you and Black Dawn. I meander over to your gallery quite often and look through the pictures. I'll admit I'm notoriously bad at reading stories over the internet, only because I struggle to stare at the screen for as long as I need to. What I tend to do is, eventually, stick the whole story together on a word doc and print it out. I shall most definitely stop dallying and do this with Black Dawn naow xD

I'm surprised the age thing is the only thing you found wrong with this chapter. I wrote it so long ago nearly the whole thing makes me cringe now.. but I'm glad it's just an easy-going story so I don't feel the need to urgently back-track and fix everything to my current standards. I like to think it gets better as it goes on.. there are SO MANY plot-holes in the first few chapters.. try not to trip xDDD

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haius [2009-08-06 05:36:42 +0000 UTC]

DONE! but you are not online... and I do not know your email... and my comments are in red so I can't upload it here... or, for that matter, anywhere I can think of, and have you see.

anyhow. it wasn't hard to get through quickly. you have sucked me into your horrible web of suction and I will never escape ever. also the pressure was sort of on after you finished my sketch so fast.

HOO-RAH. I wish you were online.

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Eeba-ism In reply to haius [2009-08-06 07:56:57 +0000 UTC]

lol I said I'd note you my email and I didn't. I fail. I'll do that now shall I?

I WONDER IF YOU'RE STILL HERE.

It's pretty amazing that I finished that sketch so fast. Please don't hate me if I'm never, ever that quick again.

Yay! Web of suction!

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haius In reply to Eeba-ism [2009-08-06 16:17:53 +0000 UTC]

no, I did in fact manage to pull myself away. IT WAS DIFFICULT. But I did it. Because now, eight hours later, I am at work. Not doing my work. Because MY PRIORITIES ARE IN THE RIGHT PLACES YO.

maybe if I only give you sexytime stuff to draw you'll be the faster artist you've evar been. but that would also be a leeetle bit awkward. but I guess I could post more if that's what you want...

DID YOU LIKE IT? WAS IT GOOD? DID YOU HAVE A GENUINE EMOTIONAL RESPONSE?!!?!?!! BLARGHLBLAGRBALBALRLLRASGABLawkfbqwuiefb

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Eeba-ism In reply to haius [2009-08-07 10:35:01 +0000 UTC]

I did like it! I think I would have liked it a lot more if I knew the characters better and if I'd been RESPONSIBLE and actually read more than the first chapter before I dived right into the sexual angst. Maybe in hindsight you shouldn't point me towards to the sexy-shtuff 8D

That is unless.. like you say.. you think it might drive me to churn out pictures faster. So yeah, I go for sex, but I also go for angst and fluff and I love majorly character-defining moments. I should probably get to know ur peeps better first :3

I also wanted to say.. seeing as this will be the only reply I can make to you tonight as I have to go to bed early and get up at the crack of dawn tomoz.. that I ADORE your beta-reading. You know how I was all honest and told you I was scare-ed? Well. Your editing is amazing, especially the grammatical stuff, because you seem to be post-modern enough to let me have my little "i'm being artsy with the grammar-ness" here and there without CORRECTING everything.. because quite often I intentionally screw with grammar.

WHICH ISN'T TO SAY I'M ACTUALLY ANY GOOD AT GRAMMAR, CUZ I AIN'T.. like.. when you saaaaid....

‘I’ll do that.’ ((COMMA!!!! also, the "he" should not be capitalized. it's part of the same sentence and not a proper noun.)) He said stubbornly as we returned.

I have ALWAYS wondered about that!! Y'see, we just didn't get taught that in school. I think I've done it differently like every single time so I'm sorry for that. Also, I always write "thankyou" as one word. Some people do that, believe it or not.. and I've stuck with it owing to a darling little argument I had with my English teacher about it one time. If I was actually going to try and give this story to a publisher, I might considering going through and changing it.. but in my mind, "thankyou" is one word. Let's not have that fight *smiles pleasantly knowing we'll have it anyway*

Besides, I agree with everything else you've said. No joke, everything. Even those bits where you're like "i know you said you picked this word, but..." because you're RIGHT. *huggles you*

lol just in general I maintain my warning that the starting of MC is dodgy. There are SOOO many plot-holes, try not to trip xD I'm quite confident you'll pick up on them, though, and be like "FIX THIS" and I shall cower and obey.

Any requests for your next sketchlez?

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haius In reply to Eeba-ism [2009-08-09 06:49:01 +0000 UTC]

I don't care enough about thankyou/thank you to argue it. For the first 18 years of my life I spelled awkward with a U - "aukward" - and even after I found out I was wrong, I stubbornly insisted... even still insist occasionally... on spelling it MY way because MY way is the RIGHT way. So, yeah. i might point it out if I forget. or maybe just to be obnoxious. I do that sometimes.

I'm glad you're happy. I've showed your picture off to the few people that I actually can, considering the subject matter, and they were all duly impressed. You can post it if you wish. Or not, if you don't. I was a bit worried you'd be like, "NO! NO! You are WRONG and I refuse to take ANY of your advice as valid so THERE," so I'm glad you're not. I... I try to beta as I would like to be beta'ed, so... yeah. I try not to be too harsh while still being honest? I was sort of hoping you'd be a worse writer, frankly.

In fact, and this brings us to your parting question, I had a bit of a crisis on Friday because i was trying to decide, and then I was thinking about what you mentioned about getting to know the characters.... and I was thinking how your people seem fairly genuine right off the bat, and then I got all angsty because I seem incapable of writing happy people and not having it seem cardboard, and... yeah. But by the end of the day I had remembered how much I love my poor angsty hero, and then forgot my crisis, so it's all good now. Lordy I'm such a GIRL.

The moral of this story is twofold. Firstly, your characterization is spot on. (Did I say that already? Well, it is.) Secondly, I could not decide what part I wanted you to draw next. Thusly, I arrived at a conclusion which may be more than you bargained for, but, whatever. I think I'm just going to send you the whole story and you can skim through and draw whatever strikes your fancy. The danger to this is that you'll be scrolling through and see a phrase like "bare muscles" or "sexual encounters" and be drawn automatically to it, like a moth to a little electric moth-zapper thingy. And also that you'll be like, "Seriously? This girl is nuts! Does she think I'm MADE of time?" but.... yeah. so. I have yet to cut out all of the unfinished/stupid parts, so if you really don't like this idea, you'll have an hour or two to stop me. assuming you're online on a sunday evening... afternoon... whatever it is....

otherwise... FUN FUN FUN!

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haius [2009-08-05 05:11:48 +0000 UTC]

I HAZ START REEDIN TIHS

For some reason i was surprised by 1) it's in first person and 2) the narrator is Camille. I guess maybe since all you draw is the boys I sorta expected, until the "camille's crew" bit, that it would be Iggy, Harry, or... well, actually, no, I didn't expect Farrere to narrate. It's also in a much lighter tone than I expected. Yep. I'm not very far. I'm gonna hafta email it to you when I'm done, I think, because... I was sort of dumb about how I started writing comments... and, yeah, devArt wouldn't like it. So.

BUT this will not be for some time yet. But I AM reading. ...and commenting XP

kidding! kidding. ...sort of.

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Eeba-ism In reply to haius [2009-08-05 06:46:30 +0000 UTC]

UH-OH. We're off to a shaky start xD Cam doesn't get drawn much because I don't really indulge in drawing myself. Farrere would a dreadful narrator, I'm glad we agree. I shall note you mah email :3

I reads ur stuff, too. Read that first chapter-ee bit.. aaand then may have possibly read that "hero looses his innocence" bit because of what you said about it..

But, like, I suck at commenting, so I r drawing u a pichure :3 Will be finished soon. You may not like it xD

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haius In reply to Eeba-ism [2009-08-05 06:53:27 +0000 UTC]

crap, I am a little scared.

I happened to already have figured out which you looked at, because they were the only three with any views marked for today - one view each, and that was you. tis one of the luxuries of being unpopular.

but look here, you. i'll have you know these people always wear clothes. always always always. what's the word? "nevernude". I even tried to draw a nudie pic once and just... couldn't. I almost succeeded, but the cleverly-hiding-the-naughty-bits pose I was aiming for didn't work out and sort of turned into an EVERYTHING view, and... and there's a big blank space. and I honestly can't even imagine anything there. I'm horrible. I should never have tried.

...do you, like, need references or anything? did you find them OK? you have me really worried now.............

Cam == Eeba? srsly? tsk, tsk, marysueage.

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Eeba-ism In reply to haius [2009-08-05 07:10:48 +0000 UTC]

I used to be like that. Then I realised Farrere is, like, the horniest thing since.. um.. something really horny. A rabbit? It's really funny how that honestly does work with his character. I'll stop spoiling things, shall I?

You keep readin' thur and I'll draw mah pichure. Be not afraid, there is no nudity.

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haius In reply to Eeba-ism [2009-08-05 07:23:30 +0000 UTC]

I only thought so, since some months ago you practically begged me to tell you someone naked to draw. but I was already offline so I didn't.

Rabbits are horny, yes. very much so. as are un-neutered male dogs. and bonobos.

I'm not going too read any more today (yesterday?) since I have to go to bed. and also since I'm on the wrong computer. I'll get back on it while I'm taking a break from my #@%#$^^^$#$%#$ data manipulation. FFFFFFFFFFF. My job is SO DAMN INTERESTIN' YEE HAW.

well, good. ...now I'm trying desperately to figure out what I should be wary of............

pfff. look here, I need to take a shower and go to bed... I hafta drive tomorrow, y'know...

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jemmi8Q [2009-06-19 06:45:28 +0000 UTC]

AUGH i finally get around to reading this and i have nothing more interesting and generic to say than its awesome asldkfjlaskdfjlk

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The-Wall-flower [2009-05-26 15:05:51 +0000 UTC]

I'm so glad I started reading this. ._.
My mind's a little blank from the utter awesome that this chapter is, so all I can really come up with for a comment is this: You can write damned good first-person. The personality is there, the opinions, the personal perspective, it's believable. Just...everything!

I'll write a more rounded and constructive comment in later chapters, as I have to go read chapter two right now. >3

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Eeba-ism In reply to The-Wall-flower [2009-06-30 03:18:33 +0000 UTC]

Ack, my reply is over a month late.. I'm so sorry.

Thankyou so much for the comment on my first-person It's something I've had to practice, so I'm glad my efforts are paying off.

Also.. thankyou so much for reading I hope you enjoy the rest

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The-Wall-flower In reply to Eeba-ism [2009-06-30 15:08:12 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome.

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Penutbutterjellymw [2009-02-09 00:42:12 +0000 UTC]

Well, I was supposed to be sleeping, but this just put an end to those plans...*waddles off to read next chapter*

Aw man, I'm already hooked. I love your work...XD

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Eeba-ism In reply to Penutbutterjellymw [2009-02-23 04:15:56 +0000 UTC]

Thankyou kindly .. I hope you didn't stay up too late c:

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deadGarland [2008-12-11 03:32:34 +0000 UTC]

Rachel loaned me her account so I could read some Kingdom Hearts comics that she fav'edand this. First off i'd like to apologize to Canada and Australia for whatever she has done to offend you guys. By now she is probably banished from already.Second your story from what i've seen is vey well put together. Your characters are very in depth for a first chapter, and hope you got into further depth. It was slow like all first chapters should be and yet it wasn't just one huge explaination or several complex flashbacks. You are on your way to becoming a wonderful writer. Third, i' going to beat the HELL OUTTA Rachel! Fourth I now cannot, willnot, and neverwill love Harry, Fifth gay people rule!

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Eeba-ism In reply to deadGarland [2008-12-11 03:56:10 +0000 UTC]

Why can you not love Harry?

Aye gay people rule... aaand Rachel sounds like she's in trouble xD

Canada and Australia will pull through, and thankyou for the compliments xD

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deadGarland In reply to Eeba-ism [2008-12-11 04:13:18 +0000 UTC]

Rachel found i was gay b4 any of my other friends did, she never went into a shock or said she did/didn't approve or give me the "i don't care" speech she sent me gay porn as a joke, instead. and she hasn't stopped. She's already emailed a picture that drew of two dudes snogging. And she's already asked if i've gone and looked at you profile (its been 2 days) And the moment i say yes she'll speak about harry i just know it!

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Eeba-ism In reply to deadGarland [2008-12-11 04:43:37 +0000 UTC]

That was good of Rachel to be that way about everything, sending you porn 'n' all. You shouldn't be so angry with her xDD

Not that I'm saying people shouldn't react the way she did, just that a lot of (mistaken) people don't.

You lurv Harry, ah know eeeet

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deadGarland In reply to Eeba-ism [2008-12-11 21:34:08 +0000 UTC]

It gets annoying after awhile.

Don't send gays porn! Or anyone else for that matter.

No! Actually i'm fond of Xeeva and her brother.

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Eeba-ism In reply to deadGarland [2008-12-13 00:26:42 +0000 UTC]

Ah, of course you like Xeeva.... xD

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imaginaryending [2008-12-04 17:16:28 +0000 UTC]

This is GREAT!!!!!!! Ridiculously well-written!!! You describe things without being tedious, and it sounds like a REALLY interesting story. I'm deffinitely going to keep reading.

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Eeba-ism In reply to imaginaryending [2008-12-08 10:58:15 +0000 UTC]

Thankyou so much .. I worry that sometimes my description is tedious, so thanks for reassuring me on that front xDD

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deadGarland [2008-11-08 00:58:52 +0000 UTC]

Wow, great story I agree about the name MC.

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Eeba-ism In reply to deadGarland [2008-11-11 05:00:06 +0000 UTC]

Thankyou for reading!! And yeah, about the name lol... xDD But I think I'm finally getting used to calling it Mottley's Crew.. only took me a whole year >_>

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Mulle999 [2008-10-23 17:57:34 +0000 UTC]

SO I FINALLY GOT TO READING THIS.
and I must say...
I LOVE IT

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Eeba-ism In reply to Mulle999 [2008-10-24 01:16:37 +0000 UTC]

Eeeep, thankyou!!! And you took the time even though you had homework and everything xDD

(uuh, but the first chapter's boring lol >< )

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Mulle999 In reply to Eeba-ism [2008-10-28 15:32:28 +0000 UTC]

welcome hehe yep xD

(NO IT'S NOT! now we'll see when I get the time to read the next chapters XD)

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