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Eevee445 — Naruto-NGNR Chapter 3 page 16
Published: 2008-04-24 03:53:37 +0000 UTC; Views: 3010; Favourites: 22; Downloads: 18
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Another update, hope you like it.sorry for the long time it took. I wasn't intending to take that long in fact this page was suppose to be submitted last Thursday unfortunately the file got corrupted in the last second.
Also on the side note ….as much as I love to draw Large Ears, I have decided to change Ayami's design a little
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Gahhhh!! A new page~! and a whole week went by as well =__=
Nadu please kick that guys a$$!! Hope he's ok-that cut looks bad..I hope it's one of those cuts that bleeds more than it should because it's not that deep!! * cheers from the side lines*
*seriously..hope that wound isn't bad....* T_T
Ayami will seriously have to appreciate him a lot more after this~ O_o
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you'll see what's gonna happen in the next page so please keep cheering from the side lines
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Can't wait as usual!! * GO NADU XDDD* 
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Hehe I've just gone through all your pages,
And I love them!
Honestly it is really good ^^
There was one thing that made me giggle though,
You say it takes place 300 years after the naruto arc,
But Kumiko and Azuka are with Naruto, Sasuke and Kakashi XD
But they appear here too ^^
They must be very old XD
Sorry for bringing it up
I'm not critizing this because I love it! (:
I'm deffiantly going to keep reading ^^
Good luck with it all!
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thanks
about Azuka and Kumiko they are totally diffrent from ND and it's a totally diffrent storry
and you dont have to appologyse for it becuase some time I have the same thoughts (comming back from the grave 
thanks again and I'm really happy to a have you as a watcher
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Hehe your most welcome ^^
I seriously love your manga (:
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badguy going to get his but wooped =.= haha nice job
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Wee. This is where the fun part begins, isn't it?
Preferably textless fun. Don't mean to be mean or anything, but I'm a stickler for proper English. No capitalization except on names, and no punctuation except for long series of dots, and the occasional question mark. Then unnecessary dots between "OK" and two between that and the question mark!
.. Yeah, sorry about that. These are just the kind of things I notice right away.
Besides that, the art is great. And you did a good job at the action in the previous channel, and fantastic on the background, so I'm most eager to see how this fight scene will unfold.
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errrmmm...
sorry English isn't my first langage, and I'm pretty bad at writing my self.
I really apreaciate you pointing them out though, I'll fix it as soon as I get home (which is after 8hrs approx)
it will be the third time fixing this page
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Luckily for the most part you have the language down, just some punctuation and mechanical issues. I will note that that list up there is listing the things that I noticed were inaccurate, it didn't really say what you could do about some of them.
To make it a bit easier here are the basic rules: always begin a sentence or a name with a capital letter, to end a sentence put a single period, exclamation mark, or question mark. If you add more than one period as you did repeatedly, it implies a long pause. Generically it's usually three periods, but there isn't any set rule for this.
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well thanks
hey I have changed it (for the thired time) hope this look ok
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Awesome! Besides the "form" "from" error that you already have been told of, it's perfect. Honestly, little errors and typos like that will pop up in any average English speaker. Heck, I'm in a higher institute of learning and I'm studying English, and I made an error like that on my last big essay.
Besides those few little mechanical errors in writing, you seem to have English down.
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DAMMIT
ok I've just changed it, thanks a lot for the help
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Heheh.
Alright. NOW it's perfect in grammatical and mechanical sense!
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Oh crap! I totally forgot about catching up on this doujin....glad I did, it roxs!
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take it easy
and thanks XD
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D: Oh noes, he better kick some ass for that >D
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D'8 Poor Nadu-kun!!! The fifth panel is my favorite! It's so well draw and gives you a feeling of extreme seriousness. Oh, and how he took the hit for her! *hopeless romantic* Lovely work!
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thanks
"*hopeless romantic*" <= iLol
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PS. For some odd reason, shark tooth dude reminds me of Kisame. *wonders if they're related*
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OvO *wonders if she's on to something*
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I like this page, the drawing is nice and clean, and the story is getting real exciting ^_^
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Hehe......Hehe..... Buahahahahahahaha!!! Baka! Hes the one who'll be dieing!
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you're battle-sence
is almost right
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Drats, almost XDD Well, almost is still good.
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Well, I will, for the first time try to give you some advice 
This is not on your drawings, but your...grammar, if that is the right word to use. You tend to forget adding question-marks (?) after someone asks a question. For example: "Are you OK" should be: Are you OK?"
I just wanted to point it out, always remember question marks after someone asks a question
Regards Hakorotos 
PS. This is'nt really a big deal, but I just said it, don't know why really...
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thanks for the advice
and thanks for pointing them out
I have just changed it, hope it's ok now
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Great shots! I like how you only revealed a lil bit of Nadu's face. We see the blood, but we can only imagine how bad it is. Such a wonderful guy, helping her out after the ego crushing escapade. 
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