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ella-vereThe Stepmother's Tale
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Description I found a man in my garden bed,
Picking herbs for his wife, he said,
For she was hungry and heavy with child.
"For greens, your daughter is mine," I smiled.
So after the birth, I took her away
To a tall, doorless tower where she would stay.
I was her mother, she my one care--
"Rapunzel, Rapunzel, let down your fair hair!"
But then a prince came and stole her young heart,
So I cut her long locks and let her depart.

I took her tresses for my own
And saw how beautiful I had grown.
Then I wondered: could I, too,
Find a prince so valiant and true?
I married a king, to my delight,
With one daughter named Snow White.
Though his age was quite obscene,
I was his happily cherished queen.
Until -- "Mirror, on the wall,
Who is the fairest of them all?"
Was my stepdaughter fairer than I?
Jealousy declared that she must die!

I followed her deep into the forest
To where dwarves mined; "Hi ho," they chorused.
Disguised, I fed her an apple so red
That after one bite she was thoroughly dead.
That mirror, mirror, in my hand
Heralded me the belle of the land!
But then a prince came riding past;
Snow White arose, and then -- alas!
His Majesty banished me from his home
And once again, I had to roam.

Desolate, desperate, and depressed,
I let a cottager give me rest.
He made me his bride so I could care
For his young children, a docile pair,
Yet he loved them too well; my envy raged.
If I could not kill them, their deaths would be staged.
I left them in the woods alone,
But Hansel dropped a trail of stones.
They returned the very next day--
Why would they not stay away?

Next I turned them out with naught but crumbs,
Relieved when they did not return for months,
Though I should have known they were not gone,
For it seems my plans will always go wrong.
Nevertheless, my hopes were bold
Till the children returned weighed down with gold.
Shocked and disgusted, I then spurned
Them all and left before I could be burned
Like the witch in the house made of gingerbread.
So again I wandered; again I wed.

Still my story remains the same,
Nothing changes but the name
Of the girl.  Ella is another beauty
Whom I can only hide by keeping her sooty
Among dirty dishes and the fire's ashes.
But then she had to go batting her lashes
At -- whom else? -- a prince.  He fell
In love as if by a fairy godmother's spell
And my stepdaughter left me behind
Just like all the others of her kind.

Just like those who came after and before,
Twisting me till my cruelty became lore.
Why do they have happy endings?
Why is my life the one that is rending?
Are they better than I?  They act as if
They think they are, so haughty and stiff.
Why do they not love me?  Because I am not
A true mother?  Because I forgot
That I am not one of them, that to belong
In a fairy tale of my own I must sing the song
Of others?  My anger grows hotter.
I only ever wanted a daughter.
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Comments: 156

Christine992 [2016-12-20 20:43:41 +0000 UTC]

This is incredible! Did you do this yourself?

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utriv [2015-09-29 08:54:59 +0000 UTC]

What a great poem!

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MLP-Girl7 [2015-09-28 19:48:46 +0000 UTC]

This is simply beautiful. I've always wondered what the villain's side of the tale would be. The pace was swift, the writing was concise but descriptive, and the rhythm and rhymes were stupendous (hey, I used a big word! ). I absolutely love your piece. Well done!!!

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St-Aloysius [2015-08-13 18:25:26 +0000 UTC]

Fantastic! The rhythm is on fire and the creativity is endless.

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VisionCat12345 [2015-02-01 16:01:19 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful. I like how you connected them all and made stepmother likeable.

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MerRE-art [2014-01-09 16:57:46 +0000 UTC]

fascinating!!!! i love it!

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TheMoorMaiden [2013-08-10 22:24:44 +0000 UTC]

I love this! I love fairy tales, and what I really like here is how you've made the 'evil stepmother' the same woman throughout several different stories. The rhyme scheme is wonderful, the entire piece flows off the tongue like a nursery rhyme.


Wonderful piece, the DD is well deserved.

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wispy-blue [2013-08-10 21:40:08 +0000 UTC]



i hope you don't mind my humble feature:
your lovely piece is handpicked. (link)

thank you,

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ella-vere In reply to wispy-blue [2013-08-17 03:37:30 +0000 UTC]

oh my goodness, i'm so flattered!!  thank you so much!  <3

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77DragonHearts [2012-11-14 22:51:15 +0000 UTC]

This is awesome and hilarious, I find villains fascinating as well

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toska9 [2012-05-18 12:16:43 +0000 UTC]

This is refreshing, in both its voice and its perspective.
Yes, we do forget the 'villains'- after all, they are people just like us!
Well written, best read out loud, I find!
Thank you for posting this!

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DailyLitDeviations [2012-05-18 11:42:40 +0000 UTC]

Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by =DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here: [link] Congratulations on your DD!

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by ing the News Article.

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Autumn-Equinox [2012-04-12 22:46:38 +0000 UTC]

So cleverly thought out, and such an enjoyable read! I especially like the singsong feel to this- excellent work!

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JaesunMichele [2012-04-11 13:32:38 +0000 UTC]

i think you would love the tv show 'once upon a time'

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Comorbidity [2012-03-15 16:11:28 +0000 UTC]

I love this--Ive read it so many times!!

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forestdreamz [2012-03-09 04:50:51 +0000 UTC]

You deserve your DD. Good job!

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iamsarahjo [2012-03-08 00:34:43 +0000 UTC]

wow. this is epic.

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HaveTales-WillTell [2012-03-03 23:52:53 +0000 UTC]

The rhyming gives this a singsong quality, a perfect complement to the nursery-rhyme topic. And I very much appreciate the trope-twisting theme.

Congrats on both the DLD and DD features.

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aluckystar [2012-03-03 18:14:47 +0000 UTC]

Wow, I really liked this.

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LiliWrites [2012-02-01 14:53:48 +0000 UTC]

Your work has been featured here !! Congratulations on your DD!

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ella-vere In reply to LiliWrites [2012-02-01 15:33:34 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much!!

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Lottie-Girl [2012-01-30 22:11:38 +0000 UTC]

I like your point of view, great poem.

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izzylubb [2012-01-25 02:00:05 +0000 UTC]

Wonderful! I thoroughly enjoyed this!

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ryoko-mitsirughi [2012-01-24 06:06:31 +0000 UTC]

This is a piece, that without dispute, is quite deserving of a DD. I have never been so enchanted for the tale of a villain before as I have been now with your literature. I mean I have with visual aides but that doesn't require much cognitive thinking to understand the tale being spun. I am absolutely in love with this literary jewel. Bravo and I cannot wait to see more of this.

I know I am not a professional orator, but I am enthralled by this piece that I would hope you can allow me to give it a spoken voice. I post all my orations on my youtube site: [link] You are more then welcome to check it out if you would like before making a decision. I would be honored if given a chance to orate this but I would hold no grudge if you said no.

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AdrianosArt [2012-01-24 05:20:01 +0000 UTC]

Superb work! My favorite line is the last. The very thing that she wanted most led her to her own demise. Perhaps she shouldn't have been so greedy. Congrats on the DD!

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Cheesedoctor22 [2012-01-24 04:50:21 +0000 UTC]

Great job

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EnshroudedVixen [2012-01-24 04:21:15 +0000 UTC]

This~
Is pretty effing amazing Well done!

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brassteeth [2012-01-24 04:20:48 +0000 UTC]

Brilliant. Congratulations.

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WreakPeace [2012-01-24 04:17:12 +0000 UTC]

Brilliantly written!!

I love how she never quite 'gets it'. You clearly illustrate the futility of repeating the same failing pattern over & over... only to wonder at the similar outcomes!! Wonderfully Done!!

A well deserved DD!

Congrats!!

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EverlastingCelestial [2012-01-24 03:54:27 +0000 UTC]

This amazing! A beautiful and heartbreaking take on an "evil" woman, notorious throughout all fairy tales.

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hawktakesflight [2012-01-24 03:53:14 +0000 UTC]

Clever, very clever. Love how you snake in and out of different tales, especialyl with Hansel and Gretel - you don't say exactly which tale they're in till a good halfway through the stanza. Very engaging read -

Congratulations on your DD!

hawk

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Screwed-In-The-Head [2012-01-24 03:40:47 +0000 UTC]

This is amazing.

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starsafterlight [2012-01-24 03:20:46 +0000 UTC]

I love it when people tell the story from the villain's point of view. It's also very fitting that this comes in a poem, not prose. It's great I love it!!

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TheFebruaryHorse [2012-01-24 03:16:12 +0000 UTC]

This is amazing and so wonderful to read! You did very well on this. I selfishly wished it would go on, though! Congrats, and keep writing!

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PINK-ROSE14 [2012-01-24 03:03:51 +0000 UTC]

Spectacular. You are an amazing writer.

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rosuto-kia [2012-01-24 02:55:11 +0000 UTC]

I LOVE IT! It potrays villians the way I see them, evil with their reasons.

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WorkerBees [2012-01-24 02:41:34 +0000 UTC]

this is way cool. you caputred the villain and all of their aspects pefectly!

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ThatDeadGirl [2012-01-24 02:39:38 +0000 UTC]

This is really amazing and beautiful. I love how the wicked stepmother rides the ribbon of her story through all the familiar tales. Artfully done.

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92DeAdLoCk [2012-01-24 02:19:33 +0000 UTC]

Great use of words and the links between each verse is great
awesome piece loved reading it
No one wants to be a villain but it's the great villain that makes a great story!

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WickedSenses [2012-01-24 02:04:59 +0000 UTC]

This is what true literature is! This work is AMAZING! Congrats on your well deserved Daily Deviation!

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girlnextdoor61 [2012-01-24 02:03:54 +0000 UTC]

I love this, so, so, so very much!
Brilliantly written, and who doesn't love a good fairytale-especially one as this!

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xDeadxNxGonex [2012-01-24 02:01:42 +0000 UTC]

Wow....This is genius! I love reading inventive literature, and this surely is that and so much more! It has rhythm, grace, wonderfully flowing words, and an overall awesome feel after reading it! A toast of congratulations is definitely deserved here!

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spooningthefrog [2012-01-24 01:49:05 +0000 UTC]

Wow! This is amazing~ I love how you brought different fairy tales together to create a story. The twist in how the story is told is truly remarkable. This is one of the most creative writing pieces i have seen here on dA, I'm really glad i came across this.

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Euxiom [2012-01-24 01:45:34 +0000 UTC]

Haha this is really neat!

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kayleero [2012-01-24 01:31:21 +0000 UTC]

Congrats on the DD, this is a great poem and it is well deserved!

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BeyondJen [2012-01-24 01:17:01 +0000 UTC]

This is a really fantastic story told perfectly through your poem. I really enjoyed the unique twist you put on each fairy tale, weaving them into a single story. Very creative!

Congrats on the DD.

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roxx0209 [2012-01-24 01:13:53 +0000 UTC]

Wow, that was mind-blowing.. I loved the perspective of this poem 'cause I have always thought that villians are evil not by their nature as for the so many wrong twist in their lifes, so I can say this work is truly awesome. Congrats on you DD, you really deserved it!!...

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BloodMoonEquinox [2012-01-24 01:03:10 +0000 UTC]

Amazing perspective on the "evil stepmother" archetype! The poem is very well constructed, too, and I enjoyed reading it. Great job, keep up the good work, and congrats on the DD! You deserve it!

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gem-gem-gem-gem-gem [2012-01-24 00:44:47 +0000 UTC]

extremely well worded.

faved

congrats on the DD and DLD

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Puppylove20007 [2012-01-24 00:42:07 +0000 UTC]

I love how this shows the stepmother's point of view on what happened. Honestly, all the fairy tales told us was that she was wicked and cruel. This brings a whole new light to the story! Magnificent!

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