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some of my favorite things arecats and books and eyepatches and
writing groups of words that i call poems without
using backspace, not once.
this is not a poem.
sometimes i don't like
cats and books and eyepatches because
i am too sad to like them because
it is hard to like things when you are sad but it is
easy to love things when you are sad
or be sad when you love things
i'm not sure which one it was
my memory isn't so good:
i want to make you
blueberry muffins with ras(p)berry jam that
taste like your mother made them.
i want to talk about that one movie we saw
where that guy killed the other guy
and we both laughed and for a minute i forgot about
how i sometimes don't like
cats and books and eyepatches
because i am too sad to like them.
but i am no baker
and you do not miss me
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Comments: 19
The emotion in this poem is so wonderfully and clearly conveyed. Amazing.
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this is what i try to do with my writing, more or less.
except i change my ideas, and i can't let my writing be too choppy, so it makes even less sense (and in a bad way, at that).
so i take lines/paragraphs that don't fit, or have a different theme(/idea/are about something else) and write a whole new poems, starting or incorporating it.
but anyway! this is good. it made me smile. c:
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i on the other hand, am a lazy sonuvabitch who can't be bothered enough to put effort into my creations, which is why i am a poem-writer and not a poet. : (
+ thank you! : )
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it makes you sad to think
...about the jfriends.
they jlive so far away and you,
when you got back home,
had no-one to greet me.
do i know what it is like?
you come home from a
camp
from a week of experiences, new,
of finding out about yourself
and having (drama), for the first time ever,
and all you really want to do is etell somedbody.
you don't havve anyone to tell. even your frineds,
the ones who live on the other side of the computer screen,
aren't the types whom you could tll about that kind of
thing. it's lonely, really.
you don't like it, being all alone .
you aren't alone, of course; you have rineds.
but all of your friends live faraway. beyond their
electrical boxes of pixels.
hey can't go to your house and hug yhou
when you're sad.
they're wonderful, wonderful pepole., but they aren't...
the same... as the friends you can touch and see and hear.
so you write the camp story in your journal and hope that
some day
you'll met a friend with whom you could share the story.
some one who will listen and ask questions and think and really care.
but by then, the camp story
may have no relevance to you
and you may not care about it.
title: "replace all the 'you's with 'i's."
Sorry about the typos, and the TL;DR and non-poeticness of the group of words.
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that was lovely, it wasn't tl;dr-y in the least. i do love the minds here on deviantart. <3
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woah. spontaneity has never been this good.
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<3 <3 <3!!!
you are sweet.
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<3<3<3!!!
you are too. 
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I will definitely be trying this challenge. It's going to be the death of me, I bet.
This is absolutely gorgeous though. I don't know if it's just me, but it really captures the sense of missing the simple things, for example making someone blueberry and raspberry muffins. I don't know if I'm making sense, I'm probably not, but just know that I love this.
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thank you! 
and no, you're making no sense at all. but that's okay; sense is no fun.
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haha, nonsensical fun is always the best.
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The title caught me right away..
I love this.
It so simple but so full of emotion.
Just, wow.
I always love your writing...
The end is so sad.. I got attached to these people in the few moments I read about them. What you say is so true to life. It is hard to like things when you're sad.. but you can still love people when you're sad, and maybe, sometimes, that's what made you sad in the first place.
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thank you
it's so nice to have people understand what you meant when you write something that doesn't make too much sense, and for that i thank you dearly.
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You are so so welcome. You're one of my favorite writers here on DA, for sure.. I should feature you again sometime. ^_^ You just come across so incredibly honest in your writing, and you manage to keep it simple and oh-so meaningful... just, you blow me away.
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