Ask-Antworker [2018-12-02 21:39:25 +0000 UTC]
Well this was certainly a good read. I enjoyed it. As for feedback, the only thing I would suggest is maybe checking for grammar and flow. There were a few marginal errors here and there in regards to that, but even I do that sometimes, so it's nothing terrible. On a more positive note, I really got the heebie jeebies reading the part where the twins appear in her room for the first time. I could almost feel a pair of cold hands over my own mouth reading that part, so nicely done.
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