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pretendygirl [2015-09-18 17:04:14 +0000 UTC]
The moment I read this, I just knew it had to go in my favorites!
But seriously , I really like how the poem slowly goes from being all happy and positive, to showing the child's fear of her mother abhorring her for loving another girl.
The repetitive phrase, "Mummy mummy", is often used by children in instances of nagging.
I personally enjoyed the usage of said phrase in the context of such a serious situation as a child fearing being disowned.
Over all, I really liked this poem!
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notofthisearth [2013-02-23 00:44:27 +0000 UTC]
Well Done...
Billy
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HaloneWolf [2012-12-16 22:47:02 +0000 UTC]
This is do good Im pretty sure I'm bi but I dont know what my parents would think I know they don't hate gays but I'll tell them in a few years
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NotenSMSK [2012-09-07 15:55:38 +0000 UTC]
It was good but the ending came a bit abrupt. I would have liked a bit more of the mummy mummy going on.
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eye-liner-lover In reply to NotenSMSK [2012-09-07 22:26:18 +0000 UTC]
Thank you I agree about the ending wasn't to sure on how to end it :/ do you have any suggestions?
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NotenSMSK In reply to eye-liner-lover [2012-09-09 17:32:10 +0000 UTC]
Well think of it this way... after mummy mummy I know she's the one, go into as if mummy is slowly starting to disagree or show resentment... something like:
"mummy mummy,
please do not frown
mummy mummy,
I know you will like her
mummy mummy,
please trust me
mummy mummy,
please don't hate me"
Or something like that.
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So-Nyann [2012-09-07 12:01:30 +0000 UTC]
I can see myself in this text ;_; Thank you for this ...
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Zoey113 [2012-09-07 06:33:01 +0000 UTC]
This is so cute :3
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angeluchiha7 [2012-09-07 04:43:05 +0000 UTC]
awwww cute
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kevinlee11 [2012-09-03 10:34:50 +0000 UTC]
I feel like this poem features a speaker who is trying to get her parent(s) to accept her for who she is. The language employed by the speaker contrasts itself; on the one hand she uses an expression tied to a child's nagging ("Mummy, mummy"), but on the other hand she is talking about two serious subjects: love and rejection. Love comes in as she is describing the girl whilst rejection is referred to at the end wen the speaker begs her mother to not "hate me". I think this is a wonderful poem. Keep up the good work!
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