pretendygirl [2015-09-18 17:04:14 +0000 UTC]

The moment I read this, I just knew it had to go in my favorites!
But seriously , I really like how the poem slowly goes from being all happy and positive, to showing the child's fear of her mother abhorring her for loving another girl.
The repetitive phrase, "Mummy mummy", is often used by children in instances of nagging.
I personally enjoyed the usage of said phrase in the context of such a serious situation as a child fearing being disowned.
Over all, I really liked this poem! 

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notofthisearth [2013-02-23 00:44:27 +0000 UTC]

Well Done...

Billy

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HaloneWolf [2012-12-16 22:47:02 +0000 UTC]

This is do good Im pretty sure I'm bi but I dont know what my parents would think I know they don't hate gays but I'll tell them in a few years

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LittlePenguinTula [2012-09-14 14:14:59 +0000 UTC]

I really like this. It's simple and unique and eye catching all at the same time xD I don't like poems that are trying to be too 'artistic'. Normally the better ones are the ones that are artistic JUST because they're unique and well thought out and structured. They're far more emotive to read then ones with fancy grammar in them. Just my opinion aha. One question: am I right in saying that the message in this is what homophobia can do to relationships between parents and their children? Is the child upset because she wants her parents to accept her love, whether it be with a boy OR a girl?

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So-Nyann [2012-09-12 02:56:54 +0000 UTC]

COMMENTING AGAIN! So, I've read this ten times, still makes me cry.

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Gabbigale-TheGoober [2012-09-10 01:45:08 +0000 UTC]

This was beautifully done!

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NotenSMSK [2012-09-07 15:55:38 +0000 UTC]

It was good but the ending came a bit abrupt. I would have liked a bit more of the mummy mummy going on.

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So-Nyann [2012-09-07 12:01:30 +0000 UTC]

I can see myself in this text ;_; Thank you for this ...

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Zoey113 [2012-09-07 06:33:01 +0000 UTC]

This is so cute :3

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0L50NJ4 [2012-09-07 05:27:22 +0000 UTC]

Amen.
...
Even at my age I very much feel like this little girl.
...
God! I'm getting teary!
*wet chuckle!*
*wipes eyes*

Thank you so much for psoting this, it's EXCELLENT.

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angeluchiha7 [2012-09-07 04:43:05 +0000 UTC]

awwww cute

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kevinlee11 [2012-09-03 10:34:50 +0000 UTC]

I feel like this poem features a speaker who is trying to get her parent(s) to accept her for who she is. The language employed by the speaker contrasts itself; on the one hand she uses an expression tied to a child's nagging ("Mummy, mummy"), but on the other hand she is talking about two serious subjects: love and rejection. Love comes in as she is describing the girl whilst rejection is referred to at the end wen the speaker begs her mother to not "hate me". I think this is a wonderful poem. Keep up the good work!

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