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jibz777 [2024-07-07 21:31:53 +0000 UTC]
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shucotaco [2012-12-18 02:16:01 +0000 UTC]
I like it~ And it really reminds me of a poem by Billy Collins called Introduction to Poetry 101. You should read it. The one thing I wasn't so sure about was the rhyming of the first two stanzas, it took away from the rest of the poem, I think. (Because of the inconsistency)
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ANJEll4evr [2012-10-20 04:52:00 +0000 UTC]
Wow, I was suprised to see negative responses to your poem. I love it! And I get it, some poems have a deep meaning that you have to search for and some are just, like you said... spontaneous! ! ! It makes alot of sense and is beautifully written!
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puzzledpixel [2012-10-01 10:36:55 +0000 UTC]
it's not poetry if it's about nothing. is it? it's not even art. however, even this piece is about something..your idea of poetry?hehe. have a good day.
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jackoconnorveth [2012-09-03 04:44:59 +0000 UTC]
I don't necessarily agree with everything in this, but that's what made me stop to think about it. Often the de-personalised, seemingly unemotional poems are the ones that really make you think and feel, not the ones with sappy sentiment leaking out of every crevice. I particularly like the third last stanza. Nice work bro
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darkypaw [2012-08-23 07:00:04 +0000 UTC]
Love it!
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Person-A-B [2012-07-13 14:10:15 +0000 UTC]
I Believe in truth
your skills would serve better
in prose, now get lost
Poetry has morals/is intended to be beautiful/profound for a reason, it is its purpose, if one wasn't trying to say something it would have no purpose, why would you write poetry if you weren't trying to say something?
The last stanza offends me particularly, as it is obvious you think you are delivering a profound message. You are not. The message is silly at best and meaningless at worst (and self contradictory) but this would all be forgivable if it wasn't poorly delivered. The very last line: "Not what it can be" makes no sense, and you simply cannot end like that.
I hate you, I hate everyone like you
You are not important
You are not good
You are small
You are worthless
(so am I)
This is something that you need to accept
The above does not constitute poetic technique(This paragraph was added after reading your profile).
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EyeOfChaos In reply to Person-A-B [2012-07-16 19:56:54 +0000 UTC]
I considered deleting your comment. Then I thought about it and decided not to, because that would do nothing.
I like that you're offended by the poem. I like that you had any reaction at all. I even like that you hate me without knowing me. I like that you judged me based on elaborate words I punched into a computer, intentionally grandiose for the sake of art, some of them well over five years old by this point and no longer indicative of their creator.
(And I also like how you seemingly created your profile for the sole purpose of saying this to me. I can only assume that I either got you in trouble for plagiarizing or you're a friend of said person-type. But I could be wrong: you could just be new here and judging me right out the bat.)
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Person-A-B In reply to EyeOfChaos [2012-07-20 14:28:41 +0000 UTC]
right.
Firstly, I still cannot believe that anyone would plagiarize you, (if you have evidence I would honestly like to see it as it will no doubt change my entire perspective on the nature of humanity) so no, that's not the reason I am hating. I posted that because I truly hate what I read on your profile and all it stood for (based on what I saw, I cannot base my opinion on anything else).
Secondly, no i didn't make this just for you, I made it for some other guy and then I saw you. Thirdly I would not call anything you write grandiose or elaborate
However, I am saddened to find that your profile is perhaps not, as you say, indicative of its creator, simply because your reply seems to have at least a little intelligence and self awareness behind it, especially the decision not to delete, which I did not expect at all.
However, regardless of whether or not you still believe what you put on your profile or not, you continue to support it's message simply by maintaining it. If you disagree with what you have written (as you have implied) I want to know very much your reason for keeping it.
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EyeOfChaos In reply to Person-A-B [2012-07-28 13:05:17 +0000 UTC]
I keep it because it is mine. It's a record of my ideas and their changing progress over many years. Surely even you have changed in your mentality over the past five or so years.
And I have violation reports here on deviantArt and in emails, but it seems kind of silly to share all of those because one person has doubts.
This has gone on a bit longer than I'd hoped it would. Again: I appreciate your hate (at least it's not apathy), and hope to see some work on your page at some point.
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Person-A-B In reply to EyeOfChaos [2012-08-11 12:42:09 +0000 UTC]
ha, you are foolish, just as I thought, and not very good with subtlety. I still maintain that you could very easily keep records at home, and that by broadcasting it you are at least not at ends with it (as I believe that you should be).
You will never see any work on my page because I am not so presumptuous as to believe that anything that I have done is worth sharing (hint hint) and also because I do not seek approval from stranger online or slightly peeved self proclaimed poets like yourself.
I personally would never have conversations like this end (I do so love poking people) but I suppose I am getting more out of it than you, so I understand if you never reply again.
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101muffins In reply to Person-A-B [2013-01-13 18:19:04 +0000 UTC]
anyone ever tell you art and poetry are subjective, not objective. so here's a haiku for you:
this is way too late
your poem's a syllable short
and mine has no point
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EyeOfChaos In reply to Person-A-B [2012-08-13 04:50:55 +0000 UTC]
Also, I had been meaning to find this for you, as another response to your notion that poems HAVE to have a meaning:
Lizard by Shel Silverstein
A lizard in a blizzard
Got a snowflake in his gizzard
And nothing else much happened, I'm afraid,
But lizard rhymed with blizzard
And blizzard rhymed with gizzard
And that, my dear, is why most poems are made.
(Yes, there's a meaning in this poem, but the meaning is the same as mine: there doesn't have to be one)
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Tenskwatawa In reply to EyeOfChaos [2012-09-27 13:40:23 +0000 UTC]
Bless Shel Silverstein! His words painted my children in the bright colors of poetry that each still wears today! I thought that this "lizard in a blizzard" analogy was perfectly suited to this particular correspondence. Well done!
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EyeOfChaos In reply to Person-A-B [2012-08-13 04:48:42 +0000 UTC]
By all means, poke and prod away: if it bothered me, I'd have deleted it all by now.
I'm a bit confused, I must admit, at the notion of creating a profile on a community designed for the creation and sharing of art, only to not share any art. All art is worth sharing; it is another matter (typically subjective) whether or not it is good.
I truly would love to see your work. You oughtn't demean it so; it's not a matter of seeking approval, but rather a matter of expression and sharing it with others that may relate (or even be inspired by it). If your expression is purely private, then I understand, but I think expression ought to be expressed. It's in the word, after all.
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Rosthornwariorartist [2012-06-23 05:50:23 +0000 UTC]
A poem: I am a poem.
Person: Oh, how exquisite! Every one of those four words sends a message to my inner being!
Me: OH PRETTY!!! Words!!!
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Tarnished-Eyes [2011-03-26 22:23:36 +0000 UTC]
I wrote a very brief, badly worded poem in response to this one. Check it out on my profile.
I do like your poem a lot, but your logic is flawed. Nevertheless, it's a nice poem to read.
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LadySun97 [2011-03-16 22:44:46 +0000 UTC]
This is nice, i can see why people plagiarize it
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bluemoonkwl [2011-02-15 03:41:25 +0000 UTC]
I really liked this peom, it says something about poems in gengeral. Well DOne!!
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Isoya-star [2011-01-27 12:19:20 +0000 UTC]
This is amazing, sorry if I sound so blunt, but I can't really explain how good your poetry is.
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ChibiNaruto666 [2011-01-09 04:00:03 +0000 UTC]
if you like to write poetry come join us at icon:[link]
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12510 [2011-01-06 07:07:58 +0000 UTC]
Im not sure i agree fully. While meaning might not be apparent, there is generally some sort of meaning to the author. Much of poetry can be understood only by the poet themselves. Simply because meaning cant be seen doesnt mean it doesnt exist. A poem is a window into the poets mind. Jim Morrison once said "Listen, real poetry doesn't say anything; it just ticks off the possibilities. Opens all doors. You can walk through anyone that suits you. " I think that describes poetry well. It may not say something, but it can still have personal meaning in my opinion
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EriArorBlood [2010-12-28 06:39:00 +0000 UTC]
wow it is beautiful
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elisahafdis [2010-12-17 12:46:50 +0000 UTC]
this makes sense ! well done .
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PixelOnPaper [2010-11-07 02:01:08 +0000 UTC]
Awesome your words are, awesome you!!! Continue the words of beauty you seemed to captivate to well.
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sunsetwolfS [2010-10-12 00:05:50 +0000 UTC]
how do you post literature??
Like how if your supposed to save it onto word or sumthing??
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twilightkid In reply to sunsetwolfS [2010-11-11 04:48:16 +0000 UTC]
On "Submit Art" there should be something that says "Add Text". Click on that, and put down whatever literature you want there. You can copy and paste it, or just type it there.
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Kyohru [2010-10-03 06:31:05 +0000 UTC]
I can agree with some of what you are saying here because I hated having to analyze someone else's poetry in high school literature, but the point of poetry is to express emotion or to express SOMETHING at least. I find that the point, for me, is to make someone feel something from my poetry, or to feel something from someone else's poetry. Art is expression. Poetry is expression. Even if someone doesn't like it, it made them feel something all the same.
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kmkrueger [2010-08-31 11:56:43 +0000 UTC]
Well said and so very true. And sometimes there is depth that isn't intended for anyone but the poet themselves to know.
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riotgrrl1212 [2010-08-23 03:59:32 +0000 UTC]
well done
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noodleruu [2010-08-16 10:16:35 +0000 UTC]
Flagged as Spam
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EyeOfChaos In reply to noodleruu [2010-08-16 14:09:59 +0000 UTC]
Thank you for your contribution.
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torkZD [2010-06-30 02:37:15 +0000 UTC]
wow. this is amazing. it is so true. hate it when people go along and say that the things i have writen r that other have writen are wrong because the ryming is off or there is no point to it. because if there was no point we wouldnt have wrote it. your poem is so true, i really like the las stanza aswell.
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daydreamnightmares [2010-06-18 13:47:58 +0000 UTC]
I love this poem <3 Is it okay if I use it for a poetry slam for my english class? (With credit to you)
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Aquaria-Moon [2010-06-06 11:35:58 +0000 UTC]
just amazing...
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FlameDeLeon [2010-05-10 00:43:25 +0000 UTC]
Wow, this is very well written. Beautiful. I am glad you found it and shared it with us. ^_^
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