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falathiel — Six A.M. In Grave Silence
Published: 2008-12-20 18:01:51 +0000 UTC; Views: 234; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 8
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Description it's six am. already
   up and
       ready.


you,
white-collar perfect man for the daughter of every woman,
with his own cubicle and relationship with a
deaf god,

hail mary hail mary forgive us for our sins
rinse repeat rinse repeat i am flawed i am flawed but
forgiveness is as cheap as a prayer and i know
that,

descend your eyes
when you
   see a beggar

and change your road
when the
   tag and gender don't
      match.


you,
awesome housewife, perfect homebuilder for the perfect white-collar,
with her own cookie recipe and countless prayers,

i think i enjoy watching the gardener do his job too much, oh
god please forgive me please forgive me please but

my husband hasn't touched me in years,

refused to cry when
some girl stumbled upon your son lying
on the sidewalk, a sign that reads
"faggot" -
   (in pieces and
   they never found what
      was supposed to be in between
         his legs. you know you will
            always remember him as an arm and a
               leg and a broken ragdoll)

and attend his
funeral.

he had said,
"there's something too miserable in
waiting for the cage that seeks me to
come, and if you are the cage to do so and
i have sought freedom in the
wrong place, i will
leave."

you said,
"i will not attend your funeral" and
he replied,
"as you wish." and left
in grave silence.

you,
have a lot to do.



and it's already six.
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Comments: 11

HugQueen [2009-01-06 04:29:20 +0000 UTC]

Wow, this is amazing dear, I agree with =Out-Of-Spite your words seem magical with how they seem distant but form together to create this stunning poem.

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MataHari7 [2009-01-05 12:40:06 +0000 UTC]

brilliant! i love the abrupt cuts, and the parts of prayers! lovely angel^^

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Heaven-CanWait [2008-12-23 12:10:19 +0000 UTC]

Can I just agree to =Out-Of-Spite plz? I couldn't say it any better.

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falathiel In reply to Heaven-CanWait [2008-12-26 21:38:25 +0000 UTC]

I will allow you this time

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Heaven-CanWait In reply to falathiel [2008-12-27 12:50:02 +0000 UTC]

that's good to know!

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Out-Of-Spite [2008-12-22 19:20:31 +0000 UTC]

hail mary hail mary forgive us for our sins
rinse repeat rinse repeat i am flawed i am flawed but
forgiveness is as cheap as a prayer and i know
that,

you always find a way to jump on all these different trains of thought and somehow make them merge until you create something as magical and truthful as this piece. Very touching.

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falathiel In reply to Out-Of-Spite [2008-12-26 22:36:53 +0000 UTC]

Wow, thank you greatly... [I can't find words to describe my happiness right now... ]

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Out-Of-Spite In reply to falathiel [2008-12-29 20:25:45 +0000 UTC]

my pleasure dear

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Atlas0 [2008-12-22 00:27:46 +0000 UTC]

Wow... That was deep.

My favorite line though had to be (other than the intro) these:

...i think i enjoy watching the gardener do his job too much...
...my husband hasn't touched me in years...

Very dramatic.

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sherrabelle [2008-12-21 00:07:05 +0000 UTC]

/stunned to silence

this is so amazing. and touching.
i don't know what to say.

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falathiel In reply to sherrabelle [2008-12-26 21:20:02 +0000 UTC]





:] Thank you greatly - and what you said is more than enough.

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