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Published: 2009-05-06 18:43:36 +0000 UTC; Views: 888; Favourites: 22; Downloads: 0
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Description Kiwi took a break from studying for finals and colored this for practice @__@ (I suck at coloring, lol)

The lineart is by the amazing and the horrid coloring is by me eheheh...

Just trying to mess around with SAI and hopefully get better with coloring LOL

I was going to fix the hair... but don't have time.... hmmm, maybe later Cya all later (Srry for the lazy bg)

Critique coloring maybe?
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Comments: 45

azarath [2009-05-06 19:12:08 +0000 UTC]

Overall

Vision

Originality

Technique

Impact


Like I said, I think it looks nice and i love the color choice for shading. What I think could help is a more defined light source, and then highlights on the hair to match. There really isn't one on the hair right now, especially since the light source seems to be coming up from straight on the front.

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FlyKiwiFly In reply to azarath [2009-05-07 18:41:58 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much Lan
now I know why the hair looks funny I really appreciate your critique thank you so much again!

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azarath In reply to FlyKiwiFly [2009-05-07 19:15:05 +0000 UTC]

I forgot to mention how much I like the eyes. There's nice detail in there without going overboard (as a lot of anime artists do.. out tons of detail in the ey but no where else!).

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FlyKiwiFly In reply to azarath [2009-05-07 22:21:04 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much ^^
eyes are my favorite thing to color and... me thinks I actually spend more time on the eyes than the rest of the picture sometimes lol

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NobodyStudios [2009-05-23 11:20:34 +0000 UTC]

great stuff!

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FlyKiwiFly In reply to NobodyStudios [2009-05-24 15:39:07 +0000 UTC]

thank you ^^

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NobodyStudios In reply to FlyKiwiFly [2009-05-24 20:04:16 +0000 UTC]

Welcome! ^_^

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pralinkova-princezna [2009-05-21 16:21:36 +0000 UTC]

Very good colouring!

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FlyKiwiFly In reply to pralinkova-princezna [2009-05-21 19:13:05 +0000 UTC]

thank you ^^

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Falqueene [2009-05-11 03:46:59 +0000 UTC]

This looks very nice ^^
Shiny eyes are shiny 8D
I also like how you can see the brushstrokes, the white part of her dress looks especially nice!

As for critique, I little more definition in the shading of her face wouldn't hurt.
Maybe some blush or highlighting on her cheeks?
Other than that... **thumbs up**

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FlyKiwiFly In reply to Falqueene [2009-05-11 20:42:19 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much ^^
hmm, blush, thanks I'll try that next time ^_^

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ItaLuv [2009-05-10 01:17:29 +0000 UTC]

Kiwi, I don't know WHAT you're talking about when it comes to the hair. >:C I really love your style of coloring hair; each strand seems to have an inner glow.

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FlyKiwiFly In reply to ItaLuv [2009-05-10 22:17:00 +0000 UTC]

awww, thank you so much ^^
hair is still one of the things I have the most trouble coloring tho lol
hence, I raid DA for tutorials LOL

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Raggedyari [2009-05-08 01:52:40 +0000 UTC]

Hey! Your color has come a long way!

I don't have the money to "officially" write a critique lol but since it is requested...

You have an amazing sense of texture... the flowers, fabric on her dress and hair are very well done. The shoulder area could use a bit of lightening up.

Her skintone on her face is very well planned out, her hands have a few very deep shadows in her fingers, I think they might be able to be lightened up a bit...

The only other thing I would alter a bit is the background... you have all this amazing detail in the character and have a good pos/neg relationship with the background but it's still fairly flat... nothing a little painted blur can't fix?

An overall AWESOME collaboration of talents, I hope this was a help!

good luck with finals!

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FlyKiwiFly In reply to Raggedyari [2009-05-09 03:16:38 +0000 UTC]

o wow! thank you for such an awesome critique
I really appreciate that you wrote all of this out it's really helpful thank you so much again

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Raggedyari In reply to FlyKiwiFly [2009-05-11 12:02:51 +0000 UTC]

np, I'm glad it was a help, it was really refreshing to have someone request a real critique The new feature's cool but I'm sad that you can't request an *official* critique unless you subscribe @_@

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FlyKiwiFly In reply to Raggedyari [2009-05-11 20:47:10 +0000 UTC]

really? I didn't know you couldn't officially critique if you didn't have a sub @_@

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Raggedyari In reply to FlyKiwiFly [2009-05-14 17:38:44 +0000 UTC]

yeah it's kinda bizarre, but I do admit it's a good marketing tool lol

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FlyKiwiFly In reply to Raggedyari [2009-05-15 15:34:31 +0000 UTC]

true true

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Damaged927 [2009-05-07 10:58:21 +0000 UTC]

Tell you what, I really like the way that you colored her eyes

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FlyKiwiFly In reply to Damaged927 [2009-05-07 18:42:52 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much

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ririlemone [2009-05-07 02:04:52 +0000 UTC]

Dawwww<333
Don't say you suck m'dear,you've did an awsome job.
I especially like the way you've colored the roses in yellow! Damn pretty! And the eyes of course<3
Thank you very much for coloring it!

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FlyKiwiFly In reply to ririlemone [2009-05-07 18:43:26 +0000 UTC]

awww
thank you so much your art is amazing thank you so much for letting me color it ^^

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Edil23 [2009-05-06 22:00:18 +0000 UTC]

You kidding? The coloring is pretty cool! I wish I could write a critique, but I'm not worthy enought to be criticizing works yet

Very well done

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FlyKiwiFly In reply to Edil23 [2009-05-07 18:43:47 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much
and you are worthy ^^ your art is awesome

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Edil23 In reply to FlyKiwiFly [2009-05-07 18:45:42 +0000 UTC]

Oh, well thank you too

And you are very welcome

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Carsis [2009-05-06 21:36:40 +0000 UTC]

No, no.

You don't suck,

you did gooooooood

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FlyKiwiFly In reply to Carsis [2009-05-07 18:43:55 +0000 UTC]

thank you ^^

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OneFreeInternet [2009-05-06 21:12:40 +0000 UTC]

I'll crit this when i get back the computer

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FlyKiwiFly In reply to OneFreeInternet [2009-05-07 18:44:45 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much ^^
I really appreciate it

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mizuyum [2009-05-06 20:28:07 +0000 UTC]

the coloration is amazing >________<

well done^^

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FlyKiwiFly In reply to mizuyum [2009-05-07 18:44:49 +0000 UTC]

thank you

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mizuyum In reply to FlyKiwiFly [2009-05-07 19:05:36 +0000 UTC]

X)

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Kurama-chan [2009-05-06 20:08:34 +0000 UTC]

Don't say you suck for color ;__;

I would be really glad if you colored one of my drawings, but my artline is very messy for this T__T

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FlyKiwiFly In reply to Kurama-chan [2009-05-07 18:45:04 +0000 UTC]

aww thank you ^^
I'd love to do a collab with you sometime tho

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Kurama-chan In reply to FlyKiwiFly [2009-05-07 21:55:53 +0000 UTC]

This would be great

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martixxx [2009-05-06 19:58:06 +0000 UTC]

I like her tempting look, her eyes say a lot

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FlyKiwiFly In reply to martixxx [2009-05-07 18:45:09 +0000 UTC]

thank you

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bliptron [2009-05-06 19:23:47 +0000 UTC]

The colouring is so velvety, I love it! Fits so well with the dress.

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FlyKiwiFly In reply to bliptron [2009-05-07 18:45:18 +0000 UTC]

thank you
glad you like it ^^

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bliptron In reply to FlyKiwiFly [2009-05-08 20:46:33 +0000 UTC]

No problem.

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Tobogi [2009-05-06 19:09:17 +0000 UTC]

ooo so pretty i wish i could colout awesome like you master

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FlyKiwiFly In reply to Tobogi [2009-05-07 18:46:11 +0000 UTC]

thank you ^^
lol, kiwi is no master she's just learning and practicing a lot of tutorials (you should see my first attempts at color - o goodness they were horrid T_T)

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Tobogi In reply to FlyKiwiFly [2009-05-07 20:37:57 +0000 UTC]

still better then tobo

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FlyKiwiFly In reply to Tobogi [2009-05-07 22:20:25 +0000 UTC]

aww, don't say that >.>

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