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SirArceon [2017-05-10 19:26:03 +0000 UTC]
Continue.
Please.
I BEG YOU. Q^Q
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kthies15 [2016-12-19 22:27:40 +0000 UTC]
My Emotions! ;w;
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GoldLeafGardenia [2015-10-06 22:39:13 +0000 UTC]
Holy frick. I mean HOLY FRICK Jordan!
Steven is probably the strongest twelve-year-old ever. Having to make a choice that, like you said (and like I thought when I read about the dream), no child should ever have to make. And even with that choice crushing him he tries to give his family a great day...that's just amazing. I would have broken down within the first five minutes after waking up. And all of those heartfelt things he says to the others...I almost started crying when the theme song began, and it's really rare for me to cry at anything fictional (not that I don't want to!).
This has got to be one of your biggest stories yet! Each of your longer stories ("Redeeming Light", "Broken Spirit", "It's Only Programmed") stepped things up, and this one's no different! You've got great skills, girl. I hope you know that.
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LadyRoseofFlames [2015-10-01 09:55:31 +0000 UTC]
ooooooooooh, the gems won't take this lying down. there is going to be a bloodbath in the coming chapters.
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DragonusPrime [2015-10-01 04:50:35 +0000 UTC]
wow...... that hurt. Can't wait to see where this pain train goes.
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TicklishFairy [2015-09-30 18:11:01 +0000 UTC]
So many emotions in this chapter. It literally made me start crying. I've loved your story from the start, having always wanted a Jasper redemption arc to actually happen. I love Jasper, *cosplayed her once it was a lot of fun* And I would be ecstatic if something like this actually happened on the show. Where Jasper, through a betrayal of Yellow Diamond or something similar, joined the Crystal gems. Still keeping her gruff bitch personality but developing a heart of gold but never losing her character. You have definitely accomplished this perfectly. I love how the gems all interact with each other and our precious Steven. I can't wait to see how this all plays out. You are a wonderful writer and I applaud you for keeping everyone so in character. I hope someone from the show see's this *like what may have happened with your Fluttershy Discord Story lol!* and does something similar! I can't wait for the next chapter!
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seitadelphox [2015-09-30 15:04:19 +0000 UTC]
i'm not crying you're crying ;n;
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